Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar (e.g., “helping to run” → “training for”). Use one clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid listing too many genres without context. Add a brief example to make it more vivid.

例: Yes — I enjoy running and reading. Currently I’m training for a marathon, which involves five weekly runs to build endurance. In addition, I read mainly short stories and poetry because they fit easily into my commute, and they help me relax after a busy day.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid uncertain phrases like “I'm not completely sure” — be confident. Provide one specific memory or detail to illustrate how important these activities were.

例: Yes — as a child I loved running and swimming. For example, every Saturday my dad and I would run three kilometres around the park, and during summer we swam at the beach almost every weekend. I also read a lot of children’s books, which shaped my love of stories.

提案: Correct grammar and tense consistency (e.g., “I've get” → “I have” or “I got”; “I've keep” → “I’ve kept” or “I have kept”). Give one clear example and explain briefly why you maintained the hobby to show continuity and motivation.

例: Yes — I have kept several childhood hobbies. For instance, I’ve always enjoyed reading short stories because they fit my busy schedule, and I’ve kept running since childhood because it helps me stay fit and reminded me of time spent with my dad.

提案: Good direct response and relevant examples. Make it slightly more fluent by using linking phrases (e.g., “for example,” “in addition”) and a brief reason why sharing hobbies matters to you. Maintain present/past consistency.

例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For example, I run with my dad because we enjoy training together, and my mother encouraged my reading habit, so we often recommend books to each other.

× Yes, actually I've get a few hobbies from my childhood.

✓ Yes, actually I've got a few hobbies from my childhood.

The student used 'I've get' which mixes the present perfect auxiliary 'have/I've' with the base form 'get'. English requires the past participle after 'have' in present perfect. Use 'got' (past participle of 'get' in informal British English) or 'gotten' (American) to form 'I've got' meaning 'I have obtained/retained'. Suggestion: Use 'I've got' or 'I have had' to express possession continuing from childhood.

× I also used to go running with my dad around the park and I've keep that habit until now.

✓ I also used to go running with my dad around the park and I've kept that habit until now.

The phrase 'I've keep' incorrectly pairs the present perfect auxiliary 'have/I've' with the base verb 'keep'. The present perfect requires the past participle 'kept'. Use 'I've kept' to indicate a habit that started in the past and continues to the present. Alternatively, 'I have kept that habit' or 'I have maintained that habit' are correct.

× Yes I do, I really enjoy running and I'm helping to run a marathon this year.

✓ Yes I do, I really enjoy running and I'm going to run a marathon this year.

'I'm helping to run a marathon' suggests assisting someone else to organize or conduct the marathon, not participating as a runner. To express intention or plan to participate, use a future construction like 'I'm going to run a marathon' or 'I'm running a marathon this year' (present continuous for planned near-future). Suggestion: Use 'I'm running a marathon this year' or 'I'm going to run a marathon this year' depending on emphasis.