Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and pluralization, and avoid redundancy. Add one or two specific examples and a linking word to connect them. Keep to a maximum of five sentences.

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. In my free time I watch TV series, read novels and play video games. For example, I recently finished a science fiction series and I enjoyed the complex characters. I also like reading historical fiction because it helps me learn about the past.

提案: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence and use correct tense and subject-verb agreement. Remove filler words and add a brief detail about frequency or a memorable moment. Use a linking word to join ideas.

例: Yes, I loved playing football when I was at primary school. I played with my classmates every lunchtime, and we practiced passing and shooting. Once we organized a small match and I scored the winning goal, which made me very happy.

提案: Give a clear, direct response using correct grammar (especially present perfect and past tense) and keep sentences short. State whether any childhood hobby continued, then briefly explain how your interests changed, with one specific example.

例: No, I don't have a hobby that I have kept since childhood. I enjoyed drawing as a child, but as I grew older I became more interested in photography and now I spend my free time taking and editing photos.

提案: Respond directly and clearly. Use correct phrasing (e.g., "Yes, I share a hobby with my mother."), avoid repetition and fillers, and give a specific detail about what you do together and when. Use a linking word to show routine.

例: Yes, I share a hobby with my mother. We often choose movies and watch them together on weekends, both Saturday and Sunday. We usually pick comedies or dramas, and after the film we talk about the plot and our favorite scenes.

× Yes, I have many hobby and when I have free time I am watching TV, reading a book or playing a game.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies and when I have free time I watch TV, read a book, or play a game.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' after 'many' (plural quantifier). Also use simple present 'watch', 'read', 'play' to describe habitual actions rather than present continuous 'am watching'. Keep verbs parallel in a list.

× But my first parody about hobby is watching TV about series or movie.

✓ But my main preference for a hobby is watching TV series or movies.

The word 'parody' is incorrect; 'preference' or 'main preference' fits the meaning. 'About' is unnecessary before 'TV series' and 'movie' should be plural 'movies' to match general statement. 'Main preference for a hobby' is clearer and grammatical.

× Yes, when I was young at primary session, when I'm studying as crew, my hobby is playing football with my classmate at lunchtime.

✓ Yes, when I was young in primary school, when I was studying there, my hobby was playing football with my classmates at lunchtime.

The sentence refers to past time, so verbs should be past tense: 'was studying' and 'was playing'. 'Primary session' is unnatural; use 'primary school'. 'Classmate' should be plural 'classmates' when speaking about playing with more than one person. Maintain consistent past tense.

× Yes, uh, after we have lunch and she was playing football with my friend.

✓ Yes, after we had lunch, we played football with my friends.

The sequence describes past events, so use past tense 'had' and 'played'. The original mixes present 'have' with past 'was playing' and uses inconsistent pronouns; clarify subject 'we' and plural 'friends' if multiple.

× I am not have a hobby that I have had since childhood because when I was young I have I had the activity that when I was young loved to do it but when I'm growing up to now I have another hobby with my interest.

✓ I do not have a hobby that I have had since childhood because when I was young I had activities I loved to do, but as I grew up I developed other hobbies and interests.

Use 'do not have' for present negative. Avoid 'I am not have'. Use past 'had' for childhood activities and past 'grew up' to describe change. Remove redundant phrases and make sentence clearer and grammatically parallel.

× Especially yes, I have I I have the same hobby with my mom.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as my mom.

Avoid repetition 'I I have'. Use correct comparative structure 'the same hobby as' rather than 'with'. Clearer and idiomatic phrasing.

× When we have a free time, we uh, selecting movie and watch together in weekend, yes, not not only Saturday but also in Sunday.

✓ When we have free time, we select movies and watch them together on the weekend, not only on Saturday but also on Sunday.

Use 'free time' without article. Use 'select' (or 'choose') and plural 'movies'. Use 'watch them' to refer back to movies. Use preposition 'on' with 'the weekend' and days: 'on Saturday' and 'on Sunday'. Remove duplicated words and make verbs parallel.