Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and grammatical: use correct verb forms and reduce fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers to under five sentences and avoid trailing off. For example, say when and why you started the hobby, who you play with, and one specific detail about yesterday’s game.

例: I enjoy playing sports, especially basketball and recently paddle (padel). For example, I played padel for the first time yesterday with three friends, and we had a great time because the rallies were fast and exciting. It’s easy to learn, so I plan to practice twice a week to improve my technique.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then expand with specific examples and linking words. Fix tenses and articles (e.g., “I have enjoyed sports since I was a child”). Mention particular sports or tech activities you did as a child and contrast past and present briefly.

例: Yes. I have enjoyed sports since I was a child, especially football and swimming. In addition, I was very interested in technology — I used to take apart old radios and learn simple programming on a computer. As a result, those interests shaped my free time and later studies.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Start with one clear hobby you’ve had since childhood, then give two specific examples with linking words. Correct phrasing like “I have played soccer and basketball for several years.” Keep to three sentences max.

例: Yes. I have enjoyed both technology and sports since I was young. For example, I played soccer and basketball for several years and also learned to swim, which helped me stay active and disciplined.

提案: Be concise and reduce hesitations. Give a clear topic sentence about sharing hobbies with family, then add a supporting detail (when you watch, what kind of films, and why you enjoy it). Use linking words like “for example” or “so”.

例: Yes. I share the hobby of watching movies with my parents; we usually watch films together in the evenings. For example, we often choose comedies or documentaries because they spark good conversations afterwards.

× Yes, I like play sports such as basketball and uh recently I tried paddle and it's very interesting.

✓ Yes, I like playing sports such as basketball, and recently I tried paddle; it's very interesting.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the -ing form when expressing general preference (gerund). Use a comma and conjunction to join clauses; replace 'play' with 'playing' to be grammatically correct and improve flow.

× It's fun to play paddle with friends. For example, yesterday umm, I played for the first time paddle and uh was very nice.

✓ It's fun to play paddle with friends. For example, yesterday I played paddle for the first time and it was very nice.

The clause 'was very nice' lacks a subject; include 'it' and place 'paddle' after 'played' as the object. Maintain past tense consistently: 'played' and 'was'.

× It's a easy game to learn and let's.

✓ It's an easy game to learn.

Before a vowel sound use 'an' not 'a'. The fragment 'and let's' is incomplete; remove it to make a complete sentence.

× Sport has been my favorite hobby since I was a child and uh, I bring this hobby uh, over the years also.

✓ Sports have been my favorite hobby since I was a child, and I have kept this hobby over the years as well.

'Sport' as a general activity is usually plural 'sports' in this context. Use present perfect 'have been' and 'have kept' to express continuity from past to present; 'bring this hobby over the years' is unnatural—use 'kept this hobby over the years'.

× I was very interested in technology.

✓ I have been very interested in technology.

If the speaker means an interest continuing from childhood to now, present perfect 'have been' is appropriate. If they meant only in the past, the original is acceptable; context implies continuing interest.

× Yes, as I said, technology and sports, I play different sports during the over the years.

✓ Yes, as I said, technology and sports. I have played different sports over the years.

The phrase 'during the over the years' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'have played' with 'over the years' to indicate repeated actions from past to present.

× For example, I played soccer, basketball for several years and swimming, swim, sorry and.

✓ For example, I played soccer and basketball for several years, and I also swam.

List items need parallel structure. Use 'played' with sports played in seasons/years and 'swam' as past tense of 'swim'. Remove filler words and finish the sentence.

× Umm, I have umm, I, I am interested in uh, movies such as my parents, we usually uh, watch films, uh, during the evening and yes, I enjoy a lot watching film with them.

✓ I am interested in movies like my parents; we usually watch films in the evening, and I really enjoy watching films with them.

'Such as my parents' is incorrect; use 'like my parents' to indicate similarity. Combine clauses properly and place adverbs correctly: 'enjoy a lot watching film' is awkward—use 'really enjoy watching films'. Use 'in the evening' for time expression.