Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve anlaşılır, ancak dilbilgisi ve akışta bazı hatalar var. Cümleleri daha akıcı ve kısa tutarak tekrarları azaltın; örneğin zaman zarflarını doğru yerleştirin (in my free time), ve ‘practice’ ile ‘practicing’ kullanımlarını tutarlı hale getirin. Ayrıca bağlaçlarla (for example, because, so) neden-sonuç ilişkisini daha net kurun ve maksimum 5 cümle kuralına uyun.

例: I practice yoga in my free time and have done so for more than eight years. I find it keeps me motivated and energized because it combines stretching and breathing exercises. For example, after a session I feel more focused and ready for the day. Overall, yoga is an essential part of my routine.

提案: Cevap açık ve ilgili detaylar içeriyor, fakat dolaylı doldurma kelimeleri (uh) azaltılmalı ve cümleler daha doğal bağlaçlarla bağlanmalı. ‘Used to’ tekrarları yerine varyasyon kullanımı ve daha spesifik detay (kaç yaşında, hangi stil) eklemek puanı artırır.

例: Yes, I used to swim competitively as a child and I was part of a local team. We regularly competed in regional meets, and I even won a medal in a freestyle event. Those experiences taught me discipline and teamwork.

提案: Cümlelerde zaman kullanımı hatalı (I'm practicing → I have been practicing; used to took → used to take). Cümleleri basitleştirip doğru zaman formlarını kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Ayrıca bağlaçlarla neden devam ettiğinizi netleştirin (because, so) ve 5 cümleyi aşmayın.

例: I have been practicing yoga since I was a child because my mother used to take me to classes. We often practiced together, which made it enjoyable and easy to continue. As a result, I have kept it as a lifelong habit.

提案: Cevap anlaşılır ama konuşma dolgu sözcükleri (uh) fazla, dilbilgisi hataları var (enjoy → enjoys, same time → at the same time). Cümleleri net ve kıyaslayıcı bağlaçlarla düzenleyin (both, while, and) ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın. Aile bireylerinin hangi hobileri paylaştığını kısa örneklerle belirtin.

例: Yes, many of our hobbies overlap. For example, both my father and I enjoy jogging outdoors in the mornings, while my mother and I often practice yoga together. So overall, we share similar interests in fitness activities.

× I practice yoga in my free times.

✓ I practice yoga in my free time.

Use 'time' as an uncountable noun in the fixed expression 'free time' rather than the plural 'free times'. Use 'in my free time' for general habit.

× It's been more than eight years that I've been practicing it.

✓ I've been practicing it for more than eight years.

Use 'for' with a duration and place the present perfect continuous at the beginning: 'I've been practicing... for more than eight years.' This is the normal word order in English for durations.

× I practice it because it makes me feel motivated and energized.

✓ I practice it because it makes me feel motivated and energized.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. The present simple is appropriate to express a habitual reason.

× I used to swim when I was a child.

✓ I used to swim when I was a child.

This sentence is correct; 'used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action.

× Uh, I was in a team and we used to have competitions and I won a medal during these competitions.

✓ I was on a team and we used to have competitions, and I won a medal in one of them.

Use 'on a team' (common collocation) rather than 'in a team'. 'Won a medal during these competitions' is awkward; say 'in one of them' or 'during one of the competitions'. Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity.

× I'm practicing yoga since my childhood.

✓ I've been practicing yoga since my childhood.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been practicing' with 'since' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'I'm practicing' is present continuous and incorrect with 'since' for ongoing long-term actions.

× When I was a child my mom used to took me to yoga classes and we were practicing together and since that I've never stopped practicing yoga.

✓ When I was a child my mom used to take me to yoga classes and we practiced together, and since then I've never stopped practicing yoga.

After 'used to' follow the base form 'take', not 'took'. 'We were practicing together' is unnecessarily progressive; 'we practiced together' is clearer for habitual past actions. 'Since that' should be 'since then' to refer back in time.

× We all have uh, I think same hobbies.

✓ We all have, I think, the same hobbies.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'same hobbies' and move commas for natural parenthetical phrasing: 'I think' set off by commas.

× I like to work in the outside like jogging and my father also likes jogging too.

✓ I like to be outside for activities like jogging, and my father also likes jogging.

'Work in the outside' is unidiomatic; say 'be outside' or 'exercise outside'. Use 'for activities like' to introduce examples. Remove redundant 'too' when 'also' is used.

× I enjoy practicing yoga and same time my mom also enjoy practicing yoga.

✓ I enjoy practicing yoga, and my mom also enjoys practicing yoga.

Use 'at the same time' if needed, but here a simple conjunction is clearer. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'my mom also enjoys' (adds -s for third person singular).

× So I can say that we all have the same uh, kind of, uh, tastes.

✓ So I can say that we all have the same kind of tastes.

Remove filler 'uh' and extra commas. 'The same kind of tastes' is the correct and natural phrasing.