Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は基本的に伝わりますが、文法ミス、不自然な語順、省略や曖昧な表現が多いです。まず主語と動詞の一致（I spend twice a week → I watch them twice a week / I spend two hours watching them twice a week）を直してください。また、接続詞や副詞（recently, so）を正しく使い、情報を論理的につなげること（例えば: I especially enjoy romance and documentaries because...）でより自然になります。語彙は適切ですが、具体性（どんなドキュメンタリーか、好きな作品）を足すと高得点です。回答は3文以内、必要な場合は最多5文に収めて簡潔に話してください。

例: I enjoy watching films on Netflix, especially romance and documentaries. I usually watch them twice a week for about two hours because I like relaxing with a good story. Recently I’ve been interested in nature documentaries, which I find both informative and relaxing.

提案: 文法（時制と動詞形）が不適切です。子供時代の話なので過去形を使う必要があります（I usually played, she asked me to join）。また、同じ語（usually）が繰り返され冗長になっているため、語のバリエーションを使い、理由と結果を明確に結びつける接続語（because, so, therefore, so I joined）を使ってください。具体的にどれくらいの頻度で練習したかや大会の経験などを加えると良いです。

例: Yes. When I was a child I often played tennis and badminton because my friend G was very good at them. She invited me to join the club team, so we trained together twice a week and even competed in a few local tournaments.

提案: 内容が断片的で不明瞭、言い淀みや不要な語（uh, Worse. Words）のせいで伝わりにくいです。まずは簡潔なトピック文（Yes, I have played video games since I was a child.）を述べ、その後で具体的な機種や経験（Nintendo DS、友達と遊んだこと）を時制を統一して説明してください。接続詞を使って文を滑らかに繋ぎ、余分な間投詞は避けてください。5文以内で明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I have played video games since I was a child. The Nintendo DS was especially popular among my friends, and we often played multiplayer games together. Those afternoons were one of my favorite ways to relax and socialize.

提案: 文法と語順（my family member → my family members / I started playing golf two years ago）が誤っています。過去の起点は明確に過去形で（I started ... two years ago）述べ、現在の状況は現在形（I practice now → I practice regularly）で表現してください。将来の願望は“someday I want to play with them”のように前置詞に注意。具体的な練習頻度や目標（improve my handicap, play a full round）を加えると説得力が増します。

例: Yes. My brother and father both enjoy golf, so I took up the sport two years ago. I practice regularly at the driving range and hope that one day we can play a full round together on the weekend.

× Yes, I really like watching films on Netflix, especially love romance and documentaries.

✓ Yes, I really like watching films on Netflix, especially romance and documentary films.

The phrase 'love romance and documentaries' is incorrect because 'love' is a verb, not an adjective to describe film types. Use nouns or noun phrases to list genres: 'romance and documentary films.' Also ensure parallel structure: keep 'romance' and 'documentary' in the same grammatical form. Suggestion: Replace the verb 'love' with the noun 'romance' and use 'documentary films' for clarity.

× Recently a wide range of movies on Netflix, so I spend twice a week for two hours.

✓ Recently there has been a wide range of movies on Netflix, so I spend two evenings a week watching for two hours each time.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and has awkward time expression. Add 'there has been' to introduce existence (there be issue) and correct time phrases: 'twice a week' is fine but combine with 'two hours each time' or 'for two hours' and specify 'evenings' for naturalness. Use present perfect 'has been' to show recent change. Suggestion: Use 'there has been' for recent availability and rephrase time clauses for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a child I usually play sports like tennis and badminton because my friend G was good at playing them.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I usually played sports like tennis and badminton because my friend G was good at them.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'when I was a child' with present tense 'play.' Use past tense 'played' to match. Also 'playing them' is redundant; 'good at them' is sufficient and more natural. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the past when describing habitual childhood actions: use 'played.'

× So usually she asked for joining the club team and we usually play together.

✓ So she usually invited me to join the club team and we usually played together.

'Asked for joining' is ungrammatical; native phrasing is 'invited me to join' or 'asked me to join.' Also tense should be past 'played' to match the past context. Pronoun 'we' is fine but verb forms must match. Suggestion: Use 'invited me to join' and past tense for past habitual actions.

× Yes, when I was a child, uh, playing a game. Worse. Words are enjoyable time for me especially Nintendo DS was so popular among my friends and it's so we usually play together and spend time.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed playing games. It was a very fun time for me, especially because the Nintendo DS was so popular among my friends and we usually played together and spent time together.

Original contains sentence fragments ('playing a game.' 'Worse.') and incorrect tense and reference. Use complete sentences: 'I enjoyed playing games' (past tense). 'Worse.' is unclear and should be removed or replaced with 'It was a very fun time.' 'Nintendo DS was so popular' is fine in past tense. Use 'played' and 'spent' to match past context and include 'together' for clarity. Suggestion: Avoid fragments; use complete clauses and consistent past tense for childhood descriptions.

× Yes, my family member, especially my brother and father like golf.

✓ Yes, my family members, especially my brother and my father, like golf.

'Family member' should be plural 'family members' when referring to multiple people. Also include 'my' before 'father' for parallel structure. Commas and word order improved for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural 'family members' and parallel possessives.

× Then I started playing golf before 2 years and I practice now.

✓ I started playing golf two years ago and I am practicing it now.

'Started ... before 2 years' is unidiomatic; use 'two years ago.' 'I practice now' mixes simple present with a recent action; use present continuous 'I am practicing (it) now' to indicate ongoing action. Also include object 'it' or 'golf.' Suggestion: Use 'two years ago' for past time and present continuous for current ongoing activities.

× Someday I want to play them together.

✓ Someday I want to play golf with them together.

The pronoun 'them' is ambiguous; clarify by specifying 'with them' and the activity 'golf.' 'Play them' wrongly suggests playing the people. Use 'play golf with them' or 'play together with them.' Suggestion: Use explicit object and preposition: 'play golf with them'.