Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ・もっと自然で正確な表現を使いましょう（例: "get better prices" は誤り）。 ・回答は直接的なトピック文を一文で述べ、その後に具体的な詳細を1〜2文で補足しましょう。 ・語彙の繰り返しを避け、リンク語（例えば"also"、"because"、"so"）を使って論理をつなげましょう。 ・発音や文法の細かいミス（大文字、小文字、複数形、時制）に注意しましょう。

例: I enjoy playing table tennis. I play with my friends about twice a week and I'm a member of my university table tennis club. Because I want to compete at a higher level, I practise regularly to improve my skills.

提案: ・時制と語形変化のミスを直しましょう（"really like liked" は不自然）。 ・一文目で過去の趣味を明確に述べ、続けて具体的な理由や状況を付け加えましょう。 ・文法的に正しい接続詞や目的語を使い、意味が伝わるようにしましょう。

例: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing baseball. I joined the elementary school team because my mother wanted me to stay fit and become stronger.

提案: ・回答がまとまっておらず支離滅裂なので、まず質問に直接答える短いトピック文を作りましょう。 ・「watch my face」「Which. Makes me fit.」のような不自然な英語表現を避け、意味が通る語を使いましょう。 ・必要なら"I can't think of any"と明確に言った上で、続けて習慣について具体的に説明しましょう。

例: I can't think of a specific hobby I've kept since childhood, but I have had a daily habit of washing my face every morning because my mother insisted it was important for hygiene and appearance.

提案: ・言いたいことは分かるが文法と語順を整え、簡潔に述べましょう。 ・曖昧な語（"accept me enjoy"）やタイプミス（"TE tennis"）を修正し、リンク語で理由や対比を示しましょう。 ・短い明確な主文と一つか二つの補足で完結させて下さい。

例: Actually, I don't share the same hobbies as my family. They enjoy different sports, but they accept that I play table tennis every week, and I'm a big fan of it.

× I'm a member of my university table Tennis Club and I am practicing hard to get a better prices in competitions.

✓ I'm a member of my university Table Tennis Club and I am practicing hard to get better prizes in competitions.

The error involves incorrect noun form rather than present participle, but it fits the required list: 'prices' (amounts of money) is wrong; the correct noun is 'prizes' (awards). Also capitalize 'Table Tennis Club' as a proper name. Suggestion: use 'prizes' for awards and check capitalization.

× When I was a child, I really like liked playing baseball.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked playing baseball.

The sentence mixes present and past tense. The time reference 'When I was a child' requires past tense. Remove the extra 'like' and keep the past form 'liked'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for childhood activities.

× I joined the baseball team when I was elementary school student because my mother wanted me to stay fit and makes me stronger people.

✓ I joined the baseball team when I was an elementary school student because my mother wanted me to stay fit and become a stronger person.

Missing article 'an' before 'elementary school student'. 'Makes me stronger people' is ungrammatical: use 'wanted me to become a stronger person' or 'make me stronger'. Also keep subject-verb agreement: 'wanted' matches past tense. Suggestion: use appropriate articles and singular 'person' when referring to the student.

× Since childhood, I can't think of it right now, but I have continued to watch my face every morning because my mother told me keeping my face clean was really important.

✓ I can't think of one right now, but since childhood I have kept my face clean every morning because my mother told me that keeping my face clean was really important.

Original mixes time expressions awkwardly and uses 'watch my face' incorrectly. Use 'can't think of one right now' for inability to recall. 'Since childhood' paired with 'have kept' (present perfect) indicates a habit from past to present. Add 'that' before reported speech. 'Watch my face' should be 'keep my face clean' or 'wash my face'. Suggestion: reorder for clarity and choose correct verbs for routines.

× Which. Makes me fit.

✓ This also helps me stay fit.

Fragment 'Which. Makes me fit.' is not a complete sentence. Combine into one sentence and use a clear subject and verb: 'This also helps me stay fit.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; connect clauses properly.

× Actually I don't have same hobbies as my family.

✓ Actually, I don't have the same hobbies as my family.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'same hobbies'. Also add a comma after 'Actually' for natural speech rhythm. Suggestion: use 'the same' when comparing with a specific group.

× Uh As for sports, my family accept me enjoy playing TE tennis every week but I'm a big fan of table tennis.

✓ As for sports, my family accept that I enjoy playing tennis every week, but I'm a big fan of table tennis.

Several issues: 'accept me enjoy' is ungrammatical—use 'accept that I enjoy' or 'let me enjoy'. Remove 'TE' (typo). Add comma before 'but'. Suggestion: use 'accept that' or 'allow me to' and proofread typos.