Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban singkat seperti ini kurang informatif dan terkesan tidak alami. Sebaiknya berikan kalimat topik yang langsung menjawab dan ditambah satu atau dua detail singkat untuk memperkaya jawaban.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy playing football in my free time because it keeps me active and helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: Struktur kalimat kurang jelas dan ada penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat (mis. "last time", "follow activity"). Perbaiki dengan menyatakan topik secara langsung lalu jelaskan kegiatan spesifik dan kapan Anda melakukannya. Kurangi filler seperti "uh".

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often took part in school activities, especially sports events like football matches and relay races, which I enjoyed a lot.

提案: Jawaban terlalu panjang tanpa struktur yang baik dan ada banyak kesalahan tata bahasa serta kosakata (mis. "wanna", "I'm always play", "Hampton", "drunk water"). Gunakan bentuk present simple untuk kebiasaan, sebutkan tempat dengan jelas, sebutkan siapa yang ikut, dan gunakan kosakata tepat seperti "drink water". Hindari slang seperti "wanna" dalam IELTS.

例: Yes, I have. I have played football since I was a child. I usually play with my friends and my brother at a local field near my house, and we always drink water together after the game.

提案: Jawaban mengandung pengulangan dan kesalahan tata bahasa (mis. "my my", "don't like play"). Perbaiki struktur: mulai dengan jawaban langsung, lalu jelaskan perbedaan secara spesifik dan berikan contoh. Gunakan bentuk present simple yang benar dan hindari repetisi.

例: No, not really. My brother doesn't like football; he prefers riding motorcycles. He often invites me to go riding with him in the hills, which is something I rarely do.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I do.

The student used 'have' as a short answer to 'Do you have any hobbies?'. In English, short answers use the auxiliary verb from the question: 'do' for present simple. Use 'Yes, I do.' instead of 'Yes, I have.' to match the question's verb. Suggestion: respond with 'Yes, I do.' for present simple possession questions.

× Yes, because last time, uh, I always follow activity in my school.

✓ Yes, because when I was a child I always attended activities at my school.

The original mixes 'last time' with 'always' and uses incorrect verb 'follow activity'. For past habitual actions use past simple 'attended' and time expression 'when I was a child'. Also use preposition 'at' for activities at school. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' and past simple for habitual past actions.

× Yes, I have. I wanna give you example.

✓ Yes, I do. I want to give you an example.

Again, short answer to 'Do you have...' should be 'Yes, I do.' 'Wanna' is informal and contractions are fine in speech, but for clarity use 'want to' and include the article 'an' before 'example'. Suggestion: use 'I want to give you an example.'

× Uh, I'm always play football uh, in my Hampton with my friend and with my brother and after that I'm drunk water.

✓ I always play football in my hometown with my friends and my brother, and after that I drink water.

Mixes continuous 'I'm always play' which is ungrammatical; use simple present 'I always play' for habitual actions. 'Hampton' likely incorrect; 'hometown' fits context. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if more than one. 'I'm drunk water' uses past participle 'drunk' incorrectly; use present simple 'I drink water.' Suggestion: use simple present for habits and correct verb forms.

× No, because my my brother don't like play football and he always play motorcycle and he always invite me to ride in in the hills and.

✓ No, because my brother doesn't like playing football; he always rides a motorcycle and he always invites me to ride with him in the hills.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement 'my brother don't' should be 'doesn't' (third person singular). Use gerund 'playing football' after 'like'. 'Play motorcycle' is incorrect—use 'ride a motorcycle' or 'rides a motorcycle' for habitual action. 'Invite' needs third person singular 'invites'. Also add 'with him' to clarify who the student rides with. Suggestion: use 'doesn't' for third person singular, use gerunds after 'like', and use correct verbs for riding a motorcycle.