Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and provide one or two specific examples of hobbies. Use one or two linking words to show reason. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy cycling and reading; cycling helps me exercise after work, and reading relaxes me and improves my English.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating a childhood hobby, avoid unclear phrases and repetition, and give a specific detail or short reason using linking words. Correct tense and simple vocabulary help clarity.

例: Yes, I did. As a child I loved listening to music because it helped me relax after school, and I often listened to songs while doing homework.

提案: Give a direct, grammatical answer naming the hobby you have continued since childhood. Avoid unclear or unrelated details and reduce hesitations. Provide one brief supporting detail about how you keep the hobby now.

例: Yes, I have. I have enjoyed listening to music since I was a child, and I still listen to playlists every evening to relax and remember songs I loved before.

提案: Answer directly whether you share hobbies with family, use correct grammar for agreement, and give a specific example of an activity you do together plus a linking word to explain why it matters. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: Yes, my mother and I both enjoy cooking. We often cook dinner together because it gives us time to talk about our day and try new recipes.

× I have a lot of hobbies, uh, because you knows at all as a office office employee.

✓ I have a lot of hobbies because you know, as an office employee.

The verb 'know' should be in base form 'know' with subject 'you' (no -s). Also article 'an' is required before 'office employee' and duplicate word 'office' removed. Suggestion: use 'you know' and 'an office employee'.

× So I need to relax and recharge my batteries after a long day. So I.

✓ So I need to relax and recharge my batteries after a long day.

The fragment 'So I.' is incomplete (no verb) and duplicates the previous idea. Remove the fragment to form a complete sentence. Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× When I watch a choice, I very like listening to music because when I listening to music I have an opportunity to relax and recharge my batteries from a tiring from tiring range.

✓ When I was a child, I liked listening to music because when I listened to music I had an opportunity to relax and recharge my batteries after a tiring day.

The original mixes tenses and incorrect words. For past habits use past tense 'was' and 'liked' and 'listened.' 'When I listening' is incorrect; use 'when I listened.' 'From a tiring from tiring range' is meaningless; replace with 'after a tiring day.' Ensure consistent past tense for childhood descriptions.

× Umm, of course, when our childhoods, I uh, have lost a puppy such as Richmond listen music uh, uh, umm, uh, umm single and.

✓ Of course, since childhood I have loved listening to music; I also had a puppy named Richmond.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'When our childhoods' is incorrect; use 'since childhood' or 'when I was a child.' 'Have lost a puppy' likely intended 'had a puppy named Richmond.' 'Listen music' should be 'listening to music.' Break into two clear clauses and use correct verb forms.

× Umm, I think yes uh, I and my mother very like cooking up because when we cooking we can share stories about my daily life or uh umm.

✓ Yes, I think so. My mother and I really like cooking because when we cook we can share stories about our daily lives.

Use correct pronoun order 'My mother and I.' 'Very like' is incorrect; use 'really like.' 'Cooking up' is unnecessary; use 'cooking.' 'When we cooking' needs finite verb 'cook.' 'My daily life' should be plural 'our daily lives' when referring to both people.