Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "I enjoy watching TV and playing cricket"), avoid redundancy, and limit to up to 5 sentences. Add one brief specific detail using a linking word (e.g., when or because).

例: I enjoy watching TV and playing cricket with my friends in my spare time. For example, I usually watch documentaries on weekends, and I play cricket twice a week because it helps me stay fit and socialise.

提案: Give a direct, grammatical answer and avoid hesitation. Use a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and then give a specific supporting detail with a linking word. Correct phrases like "in my childhood" and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I did have hobbies as a child. I enjoyed playing games with my classmates and neighbours, and I often organised football matches after school, which helped me make friends and stay active.

提案: Answer directly and clean up grammar. Start with a topic sentence stating the hobby, then give a brief reason and a specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and avoid awkward phrases like "for my childhood age".

例: Yes, I've played cricket since I was a child because I love the sport. I started at school and practised regularly, and now I even play for my state team, which shows how committed I have been.

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and use linking words like "and" or "so". Avoid repetitive words such as "like" used multiple times.

例: Yes, my brother shares my interest in cricket and is also a skilled batsman. He plays on the same team as me, and we practice together nearly every weekend to improve our skills.

× I have a lot of hobbies but I mostly like to do watching TV as well as playing cricket with my friends in my spare time.

✓ I have a lot of hobbies but I mostly like watching TV and playing cricket with my friends in my spare time.

The phrase 'like to do watching TV' incorrectly combines 'to do' with a gerund. Use either 'like to watch TV' (infinitive) or 'like watching TV' (gerund). Also replace 'as well as' with 'and' for natural coordination of two activities.

× Well, I don't think so. I had any hobby when I when when was I a child? Because in my childhood age I mostly did like playing with my peers in school as well as in the home.

✓ Well, I don't think so. I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child because in my childhood I mostly played with my peers at school and at home.

Use past simple negative 'didn't have' instead of 'had' when negating. 'Any' pairs with negative: 'any hobbies'. Remove repeated words and incorrect word order 'when I when when was I a child' -> 'when I was a child'. 'Did like playing' is awkward; use 'mostly played'. Use prepositions 'at school' and 'at home' not 'in the home'.

× Of course, I have an hobby of cricket when I was a child because I love the cricket and I played cricket for my childhood age in the school and now I'm a national player for my state.

✓ Of course, I had a hobby of playing cricket when I was a child because I loved cricket; I played cricket at school in my childhood and now I'm a state-level player.

Use 'a' vs 'an' before consonant sounds: 'a hobby' not 'an hobby'. Use 'playing cricket' to express the hobby. Tenses should be consistent: past 'had' and 'loved' for childhood. Omit 'the' before 'cricket' when speaking generally. 'Played cricket at school' is the correct preposition. 'National player for my state' is unclear; 'state-level player' is clearer.

× Yes my brother has a same hobby like me like he also very well known batsman in our in my team and he is a very good player also.

✓ Yes, my brother has the same hobby as me; he is also a well-known batsman in my team and a very good player.

Use 'the same hobby as me' not 'a same hobby like me'. 'Has the same' requires definite article. 'Like' is not needed. 'Very well known' should be 'well-known' (hyphen) and placement should follow 'is a well-known batsman'. Remove redundant phrases 'in our in my team' and replace with 'in my team'.