Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、语法正确并且避免冗余。可精简为一到三句：先给主题句说明有哪些爱好，然后用一两个具体、连贯的细节说明原因。注意时态和主谓一致（例如 "These activities make me feel calm and help me forget my worries."），避免句子未完成。

例: I enjoy swimming and painting. These activities make me feel calm and help me forget my worries after a busy day.

提案: 句子有语法和用词错误，需要用正确的时态和表达。先直接回答，然后补充具体细节（什么时候、怎么做、原因）。避免模糊或拼写错误（如“be fond of”应为“was fond of”）。将数量或程度表达清楚。

例: Yes, I was fond of collecting stamps when I was a child. I spent a lot of my pocket money buying stamps because I found their designs and history fascinating.

提案: 时态和用法不准确。应使用简单过去或现在完成进行表达持续性（例如 "I've been playing the piano since I was seven"）。描述要连贯，避免重复和形容词混用（choose either "relaxing" 或 "relaxed"）。可以补充练习的频率或影响。

例: Yes, I've been playing the piano since I was seven. Although it's sometimes hard to practice every day, playing always helps me feel relaxed and improves my concentration.

提案: 组织要更清晰并且自然衔接。先用一句主题句回答，然后用连接词解释差异并给出具体例子。最后说明与哪位家人相同并简要说明原因。避免重复短语（如两次使用 "like"）和句子碎片。

例: Not really — most of my family prefer outdoor activities such as hiking, while I'm more of an indoor person. However, my sister shares my interests, and we often paint together at home.

× Certainly I enjoy swimming and painting. This activities makes me feel calm and.

✓ Certainly, I enjoy swimming and painting. These activities make me feel calm.

原句中有两个问题：1) 'This activities' 使用了单数指示词 'This' 与复数名词 'activities' 不一致，应该用复数指示词 'These'。2) 动词 'makes' 与主语 'activities'（复数）不一致，谓语动词应使用复数形式 'make'。另外句末多余的句点和逗号应去掉并在 'Certainly' 后加逗号以符合书面习惯。建议注意主语和指示词/动词的数一致性。

× It made me forget something.

✓ It makes me forget my worries.

原句时态与上下文不一致。前句谈及通常爱好带来的感受，应使用一般现在时而非过去时。另外 'forget something' 含义不明确，常用表达是 'forget my worries' 或 'forget my problems'。因此将 'made' 改为 'makes'，并替换更自然的宾语。

× Yes, I did when I was a little girl. I be fond of collecting stamps.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a little girl. I was fond of collecting stamps.

原句 'I be fond' 使用了动词原形 'be'，在过去时环境中应使用过去式 'was'。根据上下文 'when I was a little girl'，描述过去习惯应用过去时。

× I remember that I spent many MO money to collect stamps because they are so fascinating.

✓ I remember that I spent a lot of money collecting stamps because they were so fascinating.

原句中 'many MO money' 搭配错误：'money' 是不可数名词，应使用量词 'a lot of'（或 'much'）而不是 'many'。此外 'spent ... to collect' 可改为更自然的 'spent ... collecting'。另外因为描述过去的情况，后半句应使用过去时 'were'。建议区分可数与不可数名词，选择合适的量词和时态。

× Yes, when I was 7 I had been playing piano.

✓ Yes, when I was 7 I played the piano.

原句 'had been playing' 使用了过去完成进行时，不适合单纯陈述过去习惯或事实。描述过去某个年龄有某项爱好或经历时，通常用一般过去时 'played' 或 'had'（简单过去）。同时在英语中提到演奏钢琴通常说 'play the piano'。建议用一般过去时说明过去习惯。

× It is sometimes difficult to practice every day and it makes me relaxing, relaxed.

✓ It is sometimes difficult to practice every day and it makes me feel relaxed.

原句 'it makes me relaxing, relaxed' 用法混乱：'makes me relaxing' 不正确，因 'make' + 宾语 + 形容词时应是 'make me relaxed' 或使用 'feel'：'makes me feel relaxed'。两个形容词并列也不必要。建议使用 'makes me feel relaxed' 表达练习后感到放松。

× Not really, most of my family members like outdoor activities like hiking, but I am an indoor person. But the one person is my sister.

✓ Not really. Most of my family members like outdoor activities like hiking, but I'm more of an indoor person. The one person who shares my hobbies is my sister.

原句 'But the one person is my sister' 结构不自然且缺少关系从句，应该明确 'the one person who shares my hobbies is my sister'。另外句子重复使用 'But' 可以合并或分句。建议用更清晰的关系从句来说明人与人的爱好相同。