Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答比较直接但句子较长且有重复。建议简化并用连接词使表达更自然，控制在最多5句内。可以先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节（如频率、喜欢的书籍类型或与朋友打网球的场合）。注意时态和搭配（e.g. "listen to music" 而非 "to listening"）。

例: I have several hobbies. I often play tennis with my friends at the local club because it keeps me fit and is a good way to socialize. I also enjoy reading, especially contemporary fiction, which helps me relax in the evenings.

提案: 回答中混用了时态（应该用过去式）且有填充词“uh”。建议用过去式描述童年爱好，去掉多余词汇，并用连接词解释为什么最喜欢跳舞，提供具体例子（比如参加过的活动或学习舞蹈的经历）。

例: Yes, I did. As a child I enjoyed running, drawing and dancing, but dancing was my favourite because I took lessons for several years and loved moving to upbeat music. It always helped me unwind after school and I even performed in a few local shows.

提案: 回答重复前面内容且句子有语法问题（例如 "feel very happy and enjoy" 不完整）。建议先用一句主题句说明从小开始跳舞，然后补充具体细节（例如什么时候开始、学了什么舞种或参加过的表演），并优化句子结构使表达完整。

例: Yes, I've been dancing since I was six. I started with ballet and later learned modern dance, which helps me express my emotions and always makes me feel joyful and confident.

提案: 回答意思清楚但表达不够地道，存在语法和措辞问题（"reading books is very happy"、"knowledges"）。建议先用主题句确认共同爱好，然后用一两句具体说明共同阅读的类型、如何一起阅读或讨论书籍，注意用词和语法正确。

例: Yes. My father and I both enjoy reading, especially non-fiction and history. We often recommend books to each other and discuss interesting ideas, which helps us learn things that aren't covered in school textbooks.

× I like to play tennis with my friends and I also like to read books and I think it can make me feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ I like to play tennis with my friends, and I also like to read books because I think they can make me feel relaxed and comfortable.

句子中时态总体没错，但代词与前面的复数名词不一致（books 应对应 they），以及句子过长需用连词或标点分隔使结构清晰。建议将句子拆分或用because连接，并用复数代词 they 指代 books。

× Yes I did, I have many hobbies uh like running, drawing and dancing.

✓ Yes I did. I had many hobbies, like running, drawing and dancing.

在回答关于过去（when you were a child）的问题时，应该使用过去时态。原句中先用过去时“did”但接着使用现在时“have”，时态不一致。应将 have 改为过去式 had，并用句号或逗号加连词分隔从句以改善语流。

× I like dancing most because I like to listening to the music, it can make me feel relaxed.

✓ I like dancing most because I like listening to music; it can make me feel relaxed.

动词搭配错误：'like to listening' 中同时出现不定式和动名词，正确用法为 'like listening' 或 'like to listen'。另外 'the music' 在泛指听音乐时一般不加定冠词，建议用 'music'。两部分建议用分号或句号分开，避免逗号连接两个独立分句。

× I like dancing because I think dancing can let me find myself and when I'm dancing I feel very happy and enjoy.

✓ I like dancing because I think dancing helps me find myself, and when I'm dancing I feel very happy and enjoy it.

句中时态和表达需要小调整：'can let me find myself' 更自然的表达是 'helps me find myself'；最后的 'enjoy' 是及物动词，需有宾语，故加上 'it'。整体保持现在时。

× My father and I both like reading books because we think reading books is very happy and we can learn many things in the books.

✓ My father and I both like reading books because we think reading is very enjoyable, and we can learn many things from books.

'reading books is very happy' 使用不当，'happy' 描述人而非活动，活动应使用形容词 'enjoyable' 或副词结构。短语 'in the books' 在此语境更自然的介词是 'from books' 表示从书中学到东西。

× There are many knowledges didn't write in the school books.

✓ There is a lot of knowledge that isn't written in school books.

'knowledge' 是不可数名词，不能用复数形式 'knowledges'；结构上需要引导从句 'that isn't written' 或被动语态；另外 'a lot of knowledge' 或 'many things' 更自然。时态和语态用一般现在时被动更合适，表示普遍事实。