Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意减少语气词（如 uh, umm）和重复，回答时先给出主题句，然后用1–2个具体细节支持，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。可以说明你通常什么时候读、偏好哪类书、以及读书带给你的具体感受或好处。比如说明读书能放松、增长见识或激发想象力。

例: I enjoy reading novels in my free time, especially in the evening after class. I prefer romantic and horror novels because they help me relax and also excite my imagination. For example, a recent romance I read made me think deeply about relationships, while a horror story kept me turning pages late into the night.

提案: 注意语法准确性（如时态和短语用法），并用更具体的细节描述经历。先给出主题句，再用连词或时间词补充学习时长、风格、成就或感受，避免模糊表达（如 “good emotional”）。

例: I was keen on painting as a child and I studied it for about six years. I often painted landscapes and portraits, and teachers praised my use of color. Because of that encouragement I felt proud and motivated to keep improving my skills.

提案: 回答要更简洁并注意语法与连贯性。先明确主题句（从小就喜欢读书），然后给出具体例子（喜欢的书籍类型、曾经的活动、现在的偏好）并用连接词衔接，避免重复和错误时态。

例: I have loved reading since childhood. As a child I enjoyed fairy tales and often told those stories to my friends, which made them happy. Today I still read regularly but prefer novels aimed at adults rather than children's books.

提案: 回答时先给出直接肯定或否定，然后用具体细节支持，比如举例家庭成员共同喜欢的节目、观看频率以及为什么喜欢。避免语气词并改进词汇（如 replace 'forget our works' with 'unwind after work'）。

例: Yes, my mother and I enjoy watching TV dramas together, such as 2 Broke Girls and Sex and the City. We usually watch a new episode in the evening because it helps us unwind after a busy day. Sharing these shows is a nice way for us to relax and talk about life.

× Yes uh, I like reading novels very much uh, when I have free time or after class, uh, I like to sit on my bed and uh, read, uh, interesting novel, uh, such as romantic novel or horror novels, umm, I think it's a good way to kill time and.

✓ Yes, I like reading novels very much. When I have free time or after class, I like to sit on my bed and read interesting novels, such as romantic novels or horror novels. I think it's a good way to kill time.

句子中“interesting novel”与前文的“novels”数不一致且作泛指时应使用复数或不定冠词；此外原句冗长，口语填充词过多，影响语法连贯性。建议将句子拆分为三句，使用复数“novels”并在列举类型时保持一致。

× When I was a child, I always keen on painting and I learnt it about six years.

✓ When I was a child, I was always keen on painting and I learned it for about six years.

原句中缺少be动词“was”导致结构不完整；“learnt”虽为过去式，但搭配时间状语更自然用“learned”或“learnt”，并且“about six years”前应加介词“for”表示持续时间。建议在描述过去习惯或状态时使用过去式并加上适当的时间介词。

× When I finished a picture, people always praised me and surprised on my talent.

✓ When I finished a picture, people always praised me and were surprised by my talent.

“surprised on my talent”是不正确的搭配，应使用被动结构“be surprised by”来表示“对……感到惊讶”。原句时态需一致，描述过去习惯用过去式或过去进行式。建议使用“were surprised by”。

× So it was an easy and interesting for me because I can get a lot of good emotional on it.

✓ So it was easy and interesting for me because I could get a lot of good emotions from it.

“an easy and interesting”中冠词“an”不应出现且“interesting”前不需要不定冠词；“can”应与前半句过去时一致改为“could”；“good emotional”词性错误，应使用名词复数“emotions”；介词搭配用“from”。建议保持时态一致并注意词类和介词搭配。

× I have always liked the reading since childhood and when I was a child.

✓ I have always liked reading since childhood.

“the reading”中定冠词多余，且句子末尾重复“when I was a child”。使用现在完成时“have always liked”与“since childhood”搭配即可。建议删除多余冠词和重复短语。

× I'm enjoying to read fairy tale and tell the stories to my friends.

✓ I enjoy reading fairy tales and telling the stories to my friends.

“I'm enjoying to read”结构不正确，动词“enjoy”后应接动名词（-ing）而非不定式；“fairy tale”应为复数“fairy tales”；“tell”也应改为动名词“telling”以保持并列结构一致。建议使用“enjoy + -ing”结构并保持名词复数形式。

× They always be happy when I told it to them and now I like read novels they both.

✓ They were always happy when I told them the stories, and now I like reading novels too.

“They always be happy”时态和语态错误，应为过去式“were always happy”；“told it to them”中“it”指代不明确，改为“told them the stories”；“I like read novels they both”语序和词汇错误，应为“like reading novels too”。建议保持时态一致，使用明确代词指代，并改正动词形式和副词位置。

× My mother and I both like watching some television drama such as 2 Broke Girls and Sex and the City and we are watching a new television drama now.

✓ My mother and I both like watching television dramas such as 2 Broke Girls and Sex and the City, and we are watching a new one now.

“some television drama”搭配不自然，应使用复数“television dramas”或不定代词“some dramas”；列举后再说“we are watching a new television drama now”中重复“television drama”可用“a new one”更简洁。建议使用复数形式并避免重复。

× Uh, for us it's a good way to relax and forget our works or study.

✓ For us, it's a good way to relax and forget our work or studies.

“forget our works”不自然，work作为不可数名词更常用；“study”作为动词或不可数名词时应改为复数“studies”表示学业。建议使用“work”或“studies”并注意复数与不可数的用法。