Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and relevant, but a bit short and could sound more natural and specific. Add a brief topic sentence about your main hobby, then give one or two supporting details (how often you play, what you enjoy about it) using linking words like "for example" or "because." Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I have several hobbies, but my main one is playing squash. For example, I have been playing squash for two years and I usually play twice a week at a local club because it helps me stay fit and meet friends.

提案: Your answer is relevant and personal, but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Improve accuracy ("it was a really nice time for me"), remove filler words, and use linking words (e.g., "also") correctly. Provide one specific detail (how often or where) and correct tense/subject-verb agreement.

例: Yes, when I was a child I used to run a lot with my friends around our neighborhood. It was a really enjoyable time for me, and we would also hold informal races every weekend.

提案: The answer is understandable but awkward and slightly vague. Avoid redundant phrases like "I've had since when I was a kid." State the hobby clearly as the topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and link ideas (e.g., "and I still enjoy..."). Use parallel structure when listing activities.

例: Yes — I have maintained several childhood hobbies. For example, I still enjoy running regularly, and I often spend my free time drawing or reading novels from different genres.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives contrast, but has grammar issues ("same hobbies with" → "the same hobbies as", "she like" → "she likes") and some redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence, then contrast with linking words like "however" or "but," and give one specific example of a shared activity.

例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my mother — we both enjoy drawing and reading. However, my sister has different interests; she prefers writing and playing badminton, so our hobbies vary quite a lot.

× For example, I have been playing squash for two years.

✓ For example, I have played squash for two years.

Use the present perfect simple (have + past participle) to describe an activity that started in the past and continues to the present when no emphasis on ongoing action is needed; alternatively present perfect continuous is possible but less common with stative or sports activities described in duration. Both are acceptable, but to match typical usage say 'I have played squash for two years.' Suggestion: Use 'I have played...' for duration that continues to now, or keep 'I have been playing...' if you want to emphasize the ongoing activity.

× It's really nice time for me and I sometimes we also did some racing.

✓ It was a really nice time for me, and sometimes we also did races.

The original has mixed tenses and an extra pronoun 'we' after 'sometimes', causing a sentence structure error. 'It's' (present) should match past context 'when I was a kid', so use 'It was'. 'Did some racing' is better expressed as 'did races' or 'had races.' Remove the extra pronoun 'we'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) and remove redundant words: 'It was a really nice time for me, and sometimes we also had races.'

× Yes, I have a hobby that I've had since when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby that I've had since I was a kid.

Using both 'since' and 'when' is redundant; choose one. 'Since I was a kid' correctly indicates the starting point of the hobby. Suggestion: Use 'since' + point in time or 'when' + clause, but not both together.

× For example, I still like running and drawing or reading.

✓ For example, I still like running, drawing, and reading.

List items should be parallel and separated by commas; using 'or' suggests a choice rather than listing hobbies. Use commas and 'and' before the final item to show they are all enjoyed. Suggestion: Use parallel structure in lists: 'running, drawing, and reading.'

× Well actually I have the same hobbies with my mother because we all like drawing and reading, but for my sister she like writing or playing badminton.

✓ Well, actually I share the same hobbies with my mother because we both like drawing and reading, but my sister likes writing and playing badminton.

Multiple errors: 'have the same hobbies with' is unidiomatic — use 'share the same hobbies with' or 'have the same hobbies as'. 'We all' is incorrect if referring only to speaker and mother; 'both' is appropriate. 'For my sister' is unnecessary and 'she like' has subject-verb agreement error; use 'my sister likes'. Use 'and' not 'or' to list hobbies. Suggestion: Use 'share the same hobbies with' or 'have the same hobbies as', ensure subject-verb agreement ('sister likes'), and use 'and' for listing.