Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 总体回答自然且信息充实，但可更直接地开头回应问题并用一到两句具体细节增强说服力。避免冗长重复（例如对“reading”的喜好在后面多次提及），并在句子间使用连接词使表达更连贯。最多控制在5句内。

例: I have several hobbies, including reading, watching TV shows, and playing sports. Reading is my favorite because I enjoy the tactile feel of turning pages and it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I often read historical novels to learn about different cultures, which gives me new perspectives and vocabulary.

提案: 回答直接且相关，但句子略显重复（多次说明“after school”与“played”）。可用连接词简化并增加一两个具体细节（例如比赛频率或一次难忘的经历）以体现内容丰富性且控制句数。

例: Yes, I played many sports as a child, especially basketball with classmates at the local park. We organized friendly matches two or three times a week, and I loved the teamwork and competition, which helped me build confidence.

提案: 回答清晰且结构良好，但可更自然地用连接词衔接原因与例子，并减少并列句过多。可加一处具体书名或例子以增强说服力，同时保持不超5句。

例: Yes, reading has been my hobby since childhood because my teachers encouraged me to read a lot. It helps me learn new vocabulary and improves my imagination; for example, I used to read fantasy novels like The Chronicles of Narnia, which inspired my creativity.

提案: 回答相关且内容完整，但句子略长且信息稍拥挤。可用一两句分别描述两项活动，使用连接词（e.g., Besides, Also）使结构更清晰，并提供具体频率或一次家庭活动的例子。

例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. We often go jogging together in the evenings to stay fit, and on weekends we play board games like Monopoly, which always makes our family time fun and memorable.

× I often played sports with my classmates at the local park after school, especially basketball, and we frequently organized the friendly matches.

✓ I often played sports with my classmates at the local park after school, especially basketball, and we frequently organized friendly matches.

句子中多了冠词“the”在“the friendly matches”前不合适。因为谈论的是一般性的友谊赛，而不是特定的、已知的比赛，所以不需要定冠词“the”。建议在类似泛指情形中省略定冠词，或改为使用不定冠词（a/an）表示一场不特定的比赛。

× Because I love the teamwork and competition, I usually played after school.

✓ Because I loved the teamwork and competition, I usually played after school.

句子时态不一致。前半句用过去时表示原因（I loved），后半句也应保持过去习惯性（usually played），但原句使用了现在时的“love”，导致时态冲突。应把“love”改为过去式“loved”以保持与句子背景时间一致。

× We often go jogging together in the evenings and play board games like Monopoly on weekends because it helps me stay fit and also strengthens our relationship which I find really enjoyable.

✓ We often go jogging together in the evenings and play board games like Monopoly on weekends because they help me stay fit and also strengthen our relationship, which I find really enjoyable.

句子中代词指代与动词单复数不一致。原句使用单数“it helps”但前面列举了两个活动（jogging and play board games），应使用复数“they help”；同时“strengthens”应改为复数形式“strengthen”。另外在“relationship which”前需要逗号以引出非限制性定语从句。建议注意并列主语与动词的一致性，并在非限制性从句前使用逗号。