Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Parla in modo più fluido e organizzato: evita ripetizioni e riempitivi come “uh” e “to” ripetuto. Inizia con una frase tematica chiara, poi fornisci 1–2 dettagli specifici (perché ti piace cucinare, che tipo di piatti prepari) usando connettori semplici come “because” o “so”. Controlla anche la pronuncia delle parole chiave e usa vocaboli rilevanti (es. “relieve stress”, “try new recipes”).

例: I enjoy cooking, especially by myself because I find it relaxing. For example, I often try new recipes for healthy dinners and enjoy experimenting with different spices. As a result, cooking helps me relieve stress after a busy day.

提案: Sii più preciso e fluente: elimina ripetizioni come “I I” e usa avverbi appropriati per la frequenza (ad es. “a couple of times a week”). Inizia con una frase diretta, poi aggiungi dettagli specifici sul perché ti piaceva e che ricordi hai, usando connettori come “because” o “which” per collegare le idee.

例: Yes, I enjoyed fishing as a child. I used to go fishing a couple of times a week, which was great fun. It helped me bond with my friends and created lasting memories because we spent hours talking and exploring together.

提案: Rendi la risposta più chiara e completa: comincia con una frase netta (“No, I haven’t”), poi spiega brevemente il motivo e fornisci esempi concreti dei cambiamenti. Evita frasi incomplete e ripetizioni. Usa una congiunzione per collegare le idee (ad es. “so” o “therefore”).

例: No, I haven't stuck with one hobby since childhood. I'm naturally curious, so I often change interests; for example, I moved from fishing to cooking and later to mountaineering because I enjoy trying new activities and learning new skills.

提案: Organizza la risposta con una frase principale chiara e poi aggiungi dettagli specifici: spiega cosa fate insieme (es. cook a particular dish, share tasks) e come questo rafforza il rapporto familiare. Evita ripetizioni e frasi frammentarie, usa connettori come “so” o “therefore” per mostrare conseguenze.

例: Yes, my mother and I share a love of cooking. We often create new recipes together, dividing tasks like chopping and seasoning, so cooking has become a way for us to spend quality time and strengthen our bond.

× I'd rather prefer cooking, uh, by myself than going out with friends.

✓ I'd rather cook by myself than go out with friends.

Use of 'rather' should be followed by the base form of the verb (I'd rather do), not 'prefer' or an -ing form. 'I'd rather prefer' is redundant. Suggestion: choose either 'I'd rather cook' or 'I prefer cooking.'

× Uh, it's, uh, preparing, uh, preparing uh, good recipes for retriever cold weight to, to cook is a good way for me to relieve the stress and do and to and to the compressed.

✓ Preparing good recipes and cooking is a good way for me to relieve stress and relax.

Original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words ('retriever cold weight', 'the compressed') and repetition. Rephrase into a clear subject + verb structure. Use 'relieve stress' and 'relax' for intended meaning.

× Yes, I did too. I was really into fishing. I I went fishing more or less a couple of sometimes a week and it was a good fun and also helped me connect with my peers and create good memories with them.

✓ Yes, I did. I was really into fishing. I went fishing a couple of times a week; it was great fun and also helped me connect with my peers and create good memories.

Redundant 'too' after 'I did' is unnecessary. 'A couple of sometimes a week' is incorrect; use 'a couple of times a week' or 'a few times a week.' 'Good fun' is informal; 'great fun' or 'a lot of fun' is clearer. Use past tense consistently ('helped', 'create' -> 'created').

× No, I always have been. I've always been a curious person and I I used to get bored quite quickly. So I changed from fishing to cooking to mountaineering. And also because I'm always searching for.

✓ No, I haven't. I've always been a curious person and I used to get bored quite quickly, so I moved from fishing to cooking to mountaineering because I'm always looking for new challenges.

Answer to 'Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?' should be negative: use 'No, I haven't.' 'I always have been' is awkward. 'I used to' is fine for past habits. 'Changed from' can be improved to 'moved from' or 'switched from.' Finish the sentence: 'searching for' needs an object — e.g., 'new challenges.'

× Yes, I do. Uh, cooking is also a really, uh, big things also for my, for my mother.

✓ Yes, I do. Cooking is also a really big thing for my mother.

Singular subject 'cooking' requires singular noun 'thing', not plural 'things.' Remove extra 'also' and filler words for clarity.

× We used to prepare our new recipe together and to connect to the whole time to, to spend time with each other as a result of that, So really helpful to, to be.

✓ We used to prepare new recipes together and spent time connecting with each other; it was really helpful.

After 'used to' use base verb ('prepare'). 'Our new recipe' is odd; plural 'recipes' usually fits. 'Connect to the whole time to' is ungrammatical — use 'spent time connecting.' Remove filler and complete the idea: 'it was really helpful.'