Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用更自然和简洁的表达，避免重复与语法错误，并用连接词组织细节。可以把句子控制在最多五句内，首句直接回答，然后给出具体例子与原因。注意语法（例如 "when the weather is fun" 应改为 "when the weather is nice"）。

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. At home I enjoy design work and making decorative items by hand, which lets me be creative and relax. When the weather is nice, I like going to cafés to chat with friends because it helps me unwind. These activities reduce my stress and give me a break from studying.

提案: 注意语法与搭配，保持句子自然流畅。首句直接回答，随后用一到两句具体描述并用连接词，把细节具体化（例如举例说明最喜欢的游戏或感受）。避免冗词如 "and so on"。

例: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child. I loved dressing up my Barbie dolls because it let me use my imagination and design outfits. I also liked role-playing with friends, pretending to go shopping or do makeup, which was always great fun.

提案: 注意动词时态和语法（如 "I still dress them up" 而不是 "I still dressing"），并把细节更具体化：说明最喜欢收集哪类玩具、什么时候做手工、为什么送给朋友有意义。尽量控制在三到四句内，使用连接词如 "so"、"because"。

例: Yes, I've collected toys since childhood, especially small dolls and figures. I still dress them and sometimes make handmade accessories to give to my friends because it makes them happy. Keeping this hobby helps me stay creative and connected with people I care about.

提案: 改进语法和表达（例如 "I have the same hobbies as my family"），使句子更自然。回答先肯定，然后给出具体例子并说明原因或感受。避免冗长从句，可以拆成两句并使用连接词 like "for example" 或 "because"。

例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For example, my mother and I often go to the fitness center together, and on weekends we sometimes hike in the mountains. These activities give me a chance to bond with her and stay healthy.

× I had many hobbies when I was child.

✓ I had many hobbies when I was a child.

缺少不定冠词“a”。在表示年龄或过去某一阶段时，固定搭配为“when I was a child”。因此需在“child”前加“a”。建议：记住常见短语“a child”，不要省略冠词。

× I enjoyed the dressing up my Barbie dolls because it let me use my imagination.

✓ I enjoyed dressing up my Barbie dolls because it let me use my imagination.

动名词用法错误。动词“enjoy”后应接动名词（doing），而不是定冠词“the”加动词形式。去掉“the”并使用“dressing up”。建议：动词like/enjoy/avoid后接动名词。

× I would also play with my friends, role-playing as Barbie, going shopping, doing makeup and so on.

✓ I would also play with my friends, role-playing as Barbie, going shopping, doing makeup, and so on.

句子本身动名词使用正确，但缺少逗号导致并列项不清。此处在列举并列动作时在最后两项间加逗号更清晰（美国风格可选牛津逗号）。建议：列举多项时保持标点一致以便阅读清晰。

× since my childhood I've enjoyed collecting all kinds of lovely toys.

✓ Since my childhood, I've enjoyed collecting all kinds of lovely toys.

句首时间状语从句与主句之间应加逗号以提高可读性（语法不是严重错误，但属标点和时态搭配习惯）。建议：在句首较长的时间状语后加逗号。

× Nowadays I still dressing them up or design in some items by hand to give my friend.

✓ Nowadays I still dress them up or design some items by hand to give to my friends.

动词形式错误和介词/单复数错误。主语“I”后需用动词原形“dress”，而不是“dressing”。“design in some items”搭配错误，应为“design some items”或者“make some items by hand”。另外“give my friend”应为“give to my friends”以表示把东西送给朋友并注意复数。建议：主语+动词用正确形式；熟悉常见动词搭配（design items, give to someone）。

× I have a same hobbies as my family members.

✓ I have the same hobbies as my family members.

冠词使用错误。“same”前应使用定冠词“the”而不是不定冠词“a”。此外“hobbies”为复数，与“a”不搭配。建议：记住搭配“the same + noun”。

× on weekends we sometimes go hiking in the mountain, which means a good opportunity for me to get closer to my mom.

✓ On weekends we sometimes go hiking in the mountains, which gives me a good opportunity to get closer to my mom.

介词/名词复数和从句动词搭配问题。“mountain”应使用复数“mountains”或不定冠词“a mountain”；“which means a good opportunity for me”在此不自然，改为“which gives me a good opportunity”更符合英语表达习惯。建议：注意地名词的单复数与固定搭配，以及关系代词引导从句中动词的自然用法。