Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms, reduce redundancy, and give one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "and", "after").

例: Yes, I do. I usually listen to music and watch YouTube videos on my iPad while I work, and after I finish working I relax by watching my favourite channels.

提案: Answer directly, use correct tense (past), and give clear, specific details. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Explain what the hobby involved and why you enjoyed it, using linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, I did. As a child I enjoyed drawing pictures of Dory from the cartoon films because I loved watching those shows on TV, so I practised drawing characters every weekend.

提案: Be more fluent and use correct grammar for present perfect and past. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why your hobbies changed and give a specific current hobby with a reason. Use linking words like "because" and "so".

例: No, I haven't kept the same hobby since childhood because my interests changed as I grew up. For example, I now enjoy playing the guitar because I love listening to music and wanted to learn how to play songs myself.

提案: Reply with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (possessive and tense). Explain briefly how your father's hobby influenced you and give a specific example of shared activities, using linking words such as "because" and "so".

例: Yes, I do. My father plays the guitar, and watching him inspired me to learn; we often practise songs together, which helped me improve my playing skills.

× Yes, I have. I enjoy my spending my time to listen to music and watching YouTube on my iPad when I'm working.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy spending my time listening to music and watching YouTube on my iPad when I'm working.

Use 'do' as the short answer for 'have' when referring to hobbies; 'I enjoy my spending' is incorrect — 'enjoy' should be followed by the gerund without 'my' (enjoy spending). Use parallel gerunds: 'listening' and 'watching' rather than mixing 'to listen' and 'watching'. Also use 'do' instead of 'have' for the question 'Do you have any hobbies?'. Suggestion: Answer with 'Yes, I do.' and use gerunds consistently: 'I enjoy spending my time listening to music and watching YouTube.'

× After finishing working, I really enjoyed seeing that.

✓ After finishing work, I really enjoy that.

Tense mismatch: the context describes current hobbies, so use present tense 'enjoy' instead of past 'enjoyed'. 'Finishing working' is awkward — use 'finishing work'. 'Seeing that' is unclear; 'that' likely refers to watching videos or music, so use 'that' only if the referent is clear. Suggestion: Use present tense for habitual actions: 'After finishing work, I really enjoy that.' or be specific: 'After finishing work, I really enjoy watching videos.'

× Yes, I have. When I was a child. My hobby is a Dory picture because I love watching cartoon in on a TV.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my hobby was collecting Dory pictures because I loved watching cartoons on TV.

Fragment and tense issues: 'When I was a child.' is a fragment — combine with main clause. Use past tense 'did' and 'was' for childhood. 'My hobby is a Dory picture' is ungrammatical: likely meant 'collecting Dory pictures'. 'Watching cartoon in on a TV' has article/preposition and plural errors: use 'watching cartoons on TV'. Suggestion: Combine clauses and use past tense and correct preposition: 'When I was a child, my hobby was collecting Dory pictures because I loved watching cartoons on TV.'

× Yeah and I try to drawing my tattoo lover because I love.

✓ Yeah, and I tried drawing tattoo designs because I loved it.

'Try to drawing' mixes infinitive and gerund forms; use 'try drawing' or 'try to draw'. Context is childhood, so use past tense 'tried' and 'loved'. 'My tattoo lover' is unclear—likely 'tattoo designs' or 'tattoo art'. Also include object for 'loved' ('it'). Suggestion: Use proper verb forms and clearer noun: 'I tried drawing tattoo designs because I loved it.'

× No, I don't. Uh, I think when I grow up, my hobby is change when, uh, I see a lot of other things in my life.

✓ No, I don't. Uh, I think as I grow up, my hobbies change when I see a lot of other things in my life.

Tense and subject-verb agreement: 'when I grow up' can be 'as I grow up' for ongoing change; 'my hobby is change' is incorrect — use plural 'hobbies change' or 'my hobby changes'. Use present simple for habitual/general truths: 'hobbies change'. Suggestion: Use 'as I grow up' and 'hobbies change' to express ongoing change: 'I think as I grow up, my hobbies change when I see many other things.'

× Yeah. And I enjoy playing the guitar because I love to listen music.

✓ Yeah. And I enjoy playing the guitar because I love listening to music.

After 'love' use either infinitive plus object ('to listen to music') or gerund 'listening to music'; also include the preposition 'to' after 'listen'. 'Enjoy playing the guitar because I love listening to music' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'listening to music' or 'to listen to music': 'I enjoy playing the guitar because I love listening to music.'

× Yes, I have because my father's like playing guitar and I'd like to see my father when he play because it's made me feel funny and I have more skill to play in that.

✓ Yes, I do, because my father likes playing the guitar and I like watching him play; it makes me feel happy and has helped me improve my skills.

Short answer: use 'do' not 'have' for 'Do you have the same hobbies'. 'Father's like' should be 'father likes' (third person singular). 'I'd like to see my father when he play' should be 'I like watching him play' and 'he play' needs 'plays'. 'It's made me feel funny' is incorrect phrasing — 'funny' is wrong meaning; use 'happy'. 'I have more skill to play in that' is ungrammatical — use 'has helped me improve my skills' or 'made me more skilled'. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement, clearer expressions and appropriate adjectives: 'my father likes playing the guitar', 'I like watching him play', 'it makes me feel happy', 'it has helped me improve my skills.'