Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and coherent: give a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 linked supporting details. Use correct grammar and complete sentences, avoid fragments. Include linking words (e.g., 'and', 'so', 'for example') and specific information such as how often and where you hike.

例: Yes, I have several hobbies, but my favorites are reading and hiking. I usually go hiking on weekends, exploring nearby mountains or nature trails, and I read every evening to relax after work. For example, last weekend I climbed Mount X, which took about three hours and had great views.

提案: Correct vocabulary and sentence structure: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and avoid misused words. Provide one specific detail about the hobby and a brief reason or memory to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, when I was a child I had several hobbies, but my favorite was practising artistic gymnastics. I trained twice a week at a local club and enjoyed performing routines because they made me feel strong and focused.

提案: Clarify meaning and use correct phrases: say 'a hobby I have had since childhood' not 'holiday.' Use present perfect to show continuity and give specific details (how often, what you read, why you love it). Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, reading is a hobby I have had since childhood and I still love it. I usually read novels and non-fiction books several times a week, and I enjoy the way reading helps me learn new things and relax.

提案: Use correct negation and natural phrasing: say 'No, I don't share hobbies with any of my family members' or 'No, my hobbies are different from theirs.' Add one supporting detail explaining how your hobbies differ or mention a family member's hobby for contrast.

例: No, I don't share hobbies with my family; my parents enjoy gardening while I prefer reading and hiking. For example, my mother spends weekends tending to her plants, whereas I like to go for long walks in the hills.

× Frequently I go. Climbing the mountain, the weekends.

✓ I frequently go hiking in the mountains on weekends.

The original has incorrect adverb placement and sentence fragments. 'Frequently' should come before the main verb 'go'. 'Climbing the mountain' is a fragment; use the gerund 'hiking' to express the activity. Use plural 'mountains' or 'hiking in the mountains' and include 'on' before 'weekends'. Suggestion: place adverbs close to the verb and combine fragments into one complete sentence.

× When I was chill I had several hobbies, but I remember that my favorite was. Practicing artist gymnastic.

✓ When I was a child I had several hobbies, but I remember that my favorite was practicing artistic gymnastics.

Multiple problems: 'chill' is incorrect word choice; 'child' is needed. The verb tense 'had' is fine for past, but the sentence is split incorrectly and contains wrong forms: 'Practicing artist gymnastic' is ungrammatical. Use 'practicing' followed by the noun phrase 'artistic gymnastics'. Combine the fragments into a single sentence and use 'a child'. Suggestion: ensure proper noun forms and keep past-tense consistency, and attach gerund phrase directly after 'was'.

× Yes, I have a holiday that I do since childhood and this is reading and actually I love it so much.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby since childhood: reading, and I really love it.

The original misuses 'holiday' instead of 'hobby' and uses present tense 'have' with 'since childhood' which requires present perfect. 'I have had' indicates an action continuing from the past to present. The sentence is wordy and awkward; replace 'actually I love it so much' with concise 'I really love it'. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions continuing from the past and choose correct vocabulary ('hobby').

× No, I don't have the same hobby with neither member of my family.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as any member of my family.

The original uses a double negative 'don't' and 'neither' plus incorrect preposition 'with'. Replace with affirmative construction 'don't have the same hobbies as any member' or 'none of my family'. Also use plural 'hobbies' to match context. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and use the correct comparison structure 'the same ... as'.