Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases (e.g., 'stress master') and redundancy, and add one specific example to support your point. Keep the answer under five sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' correctly.

例: My favourite hobby is dancing. I dance at home and at social events because it keeps me fit and relieves stress; for example, I attend a weekly Zumba class that boosts my energy and motivation.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar: give a direct topic sentence, correct tense and phrasing ('Yes, I did' rather than 'Definitely yes I would'), avoid repetition, and provide a specific childhood memory as supporting detail using a linking word like 'for example' or 'because'.

例: Yes, I did — dancing has been my hobby since childhood. For example, when I was seven I would copy the steps from music videos and practise them every day after school.

提案: Remove redundancy and fix grammar: open with a direct reply, avoid repeating the same idea, and use one clear supporting detail that explains how the hobby helped you (e.g., confidence or fitness), linked with 'so' or 'which'.

例: Yes, I have continued dancing since childhood. It helped me build confidence and stay fit, so I still practise dance routines twice a week.

提案: Be polite and precise: answer directly, avoid negative or insulting language ('they are really bad at that'), and give a brief example of your family's different interests using linking words like 'however' or 'instead'.

例: No, my family members don't share this hobby. Instead, they prefer activities like hiking or reading, so I usually dance alone or with friends.

× Well, dancing is my favorite hobby.

✓ Well, dancing is my favorite hobby.

No change needed; 'dancing' as a gerund (present participle functioning as a noun) is correct here. Keep as is.

× it motivates me towards my goals and acts as a great stress master.

✓ it motivates me toward my goals and acts as a great stress reliever.

Use 'toward' (or 'towards' is acceptable regionally) but 'stress master' is incorrect and unnatural; the correct noun is 'stress reliever'. Use collocations that are natural in English.

× I feel this is a great way of exercise.

✓ I feel this is a great way to exercise.

Use 'way to exercise' or 'way of exercising'. 'Way of exercise' is unidiomatic. Choose 'to exercise' to match infinitive structure.

× Definitely yes I would.

✓ Definitely, yes I would.

This is punctuation/intonation more than a grammar error; adding a comma clarifies the response. The phrase 'yes I would' is acceptable when answering a question about past habits, but a clearer reply is 'Definitely, I did.' if referring to childhood.

× Dancing is my childhood hobby that I have till now.

✓ Dancing is a hobby I have had since childhood.

Use 'have had since childhood' to express a continuing state from past to present. 'Till now' is informal and awkward here; 'since childhood' is clearer.

× I used to dance a lot when I I was a kid.

✓ I used to dance a lot when I was a kid.

Remove the duplicate 'I'. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action. Keep past tense 'was' for 'was a kid'.

× I have never missed any song.

✓ I never missed any song.

When describing past habitual actions with 'used to' and past context, use simple past 'never missed'. Present perfect 'have never missed' implies up to now; if you mean in childhood, simple past is clearer.

× I used to copy all the signature steps.

✓ I used to copy all the signature steps.

Sentence is acceptable; 'signature steps' is understandable though 'signature dance steps' would be clearer. No pronoun error detected.

× Yes, dancing is the hobby that I carry from my childhood.

✓ Yes, dancing is the hobby I have carried since childhood.

Use 'have carried since childhood' or better 'have had since childhood' to express continuity. 'Carry from my childhood' is unidiomatic.

× When I was a kid, I really loved to dance on each and every song until now.

✓ When I was a kid, I really loved to dance to every song, and I still do now.

Combine past preference 'loved to dance' with present continuation 'I still do now'. Use 'dance to a song' not 'dance on a song'. 'Until now' is awkward; 'I still do now' or 'I still do' is clearer.

× I love to follow the rhythm and it helps me to make me more confident and fit.

✓ I love to follow the rhythm, and it helps me become more confident and fit.

Avoid redundant 'helps me to make me'. Use 'helps me become' or 'helps me to become'. Remove repetition for clarity.

× I would say no because none of my family members love to dance.

✓ I would say no because none of my family members love dancing.

Use 'love dancing' or 'love to dance'; both are fine. Original 'love to dance' also acceptable. This suggestion makes the collocation smoother.

× They're not really interested into it.

✓ They're not really interested in it.

'Interested' is followed by the preposition 'in', not 'into'. Use 'interested in' to be grammatically correct.

× Well, they have other interests in numerous things, but not in dancing.

✓ Well, they have many other interests, but not dancing.

'Interests in numerous things' is wordy and awkward. Use 'many other interests' and avoid repeated 'in' preposition before 'dancing'.

× I would say they are really bad at that.

✓ I would say they are not very good at it.

'Bad at that' is informal and 'that' is vague. Use 'not very good at it' for a more natural, polite expression.