Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容清楚，但有语法和表达不自然的问题。注意主谓一致与冠词使用（例如“the piano”或“playing the piano”），去掉多余词汇（如重复的“they these”），将非正式填充词（umm）减少，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。可将信息压缩为2–3句，每句不超过5句的限制。

例: Yes, I have several hobbies, including playing the piano, photography and cooking. These activities help me relax after busy study periods, and I particularly enjoy photography because it lets me capture everyday moments.

提案: 回答能表达主要意思但存在时态、语法和词汇使用错误（如“I'd like”应为“I liked”或“I used to like”，“tell”应为“told”，“consist”用词错误）。减少填充词并用一两个具体细节支撑（例如学习经历或感受），使用连接词提升连贯性。

例: Yes, I liked playing the piano as a child. My grandfather told me at five that I could choose any instrument, so I picked the piano and have been practising it ever since because I enjoy learning new pieces.

提案: 重复前一问题的内容且存在语法错误（例如“grandpa tell me”应为“grandpa told me”，“I enjoy to learn”应为“I enjoy learning”）。避免冗余（“I really enjoy that and I enjoy to learn new pieces and new like”），用更具体的细节（例如练习频率或最近学的曲目）使答案更丰富。

例: Yes, I have played the piano since I was five. My grandfather encouraged me to choose an instrument, and I still practise two or three times a week and enjoy learning both classical and contemporary pieces.

提案: 回答简短但信息明确。注意语法一致性（如“every family member ... likes”），不要使用口语填充词（umm）。可以补充具体细节比如家人如何一起做饭或你最喜欢做的菜以增加内容。

例: Yes, cooking is a common hobby in my family. Almost everyone enjoys preparing meals, and we often cook together on weekends, which is a great way to bond.

× They these hobbies can help me relax and feel unwind after the busy study and I'm really appreciating that.

✓ These hobbies can help me relax and unwind after my busy studies, and I'm really appreciative of that.

句中使用了错误或多余的代词（"They these"），应只用一个指示代词“These”。此外，“feel unwind”搭配不当，应为“relax and unwind”或“feel relaxed and unwind”。“busy study”应改为复数名词或所有格短语“my busy studies”。“I'm really appreciating that”在此处语感不自然，改为形容词“appreciative”或简单句“I'm really appreciative of that”。建议：注意不要重复代词，使用固定搭配（relax and unwind），名词数一致并用自然表达（appreciative）。

× Yes, when I was a child, I'd like to play the piano because when I was five years old, my grandpa tell me you can play, you can choose whatever you want.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I liked to play the piano because when I was five years old my grandpa told me, "You can play; you can choose whatever you want."

句子时间背景在过去，因此主句和从句的动词应使用过去时。原句使用了现在时或条件式“I'd like”以及现在时“tell”，需要改为过去时“liked”和“told”。引号内直接引语保留现在时是可以的（表示当时他说的话），但报告式叙述要用过去时。建议：描述过去事件时把动词改为过去时，如"liked"、"told"。

× So but I choose to play the piano and I, umm, consist to do that until now.

✓ So I chose to play the piano and have continued doing that until now.

原句中连接词冗余（"So but"），时态前后不一致（"choose"为现在时但描述的是过去选择），且动词"consist"用法错误。应使用过去时"chose"和完成时"have continued"表示从过去持续到现在；"doing that"为正确的动名词短语。建议：避免重复连接词，选择与时间线一致的时态，并用正确的动词搭配（continue doing）。

× Yes, of course, it's about playing the piano because at that time when I was five years old, my grandpa tell me I can choose whatever I want to learn.

✓ Yes, of course, it's about playing the piano because when I was five years old my grandpa told me I could choose whatever I wanted to learn.

这里叙述的是过去发生的事件，主要动词应为过去时“told”。另外，间接引语中从现在时转为过去时，"can"和"want"应相应变为过去形式"could"和"wanted"以保持时态一致。建议：间接引语随时间背景回溯（backshift），把现在时改为过去时。

× So I choose the piano and I have continued practicing it ever since because I really enjoy that and I enjoy to learn new pieces and new like.

✓ So I chose the piano and I have continued practicing it ever since because I really enjoy it and I enjoy learning new pieces and new things.

动词"choose"应为过去时"chose"。短语"enjoy to learn"不符合动词搭配，动词"enjoy"后需接动名词，故改为"enjoy learning"。句尾"new like"不完整，改为更自然的"new things"或直接说"new pieces"。建议：注意动词时态一致，记住某些动词（如 enjoy）后接 -ing 形式。

× Yes, of course, Like the hobbies of cooking. Umm, almost everyone, every family member in my home like to do that.

✓ Yes, of course, like cooking. Almost every family member in my home likes to do that.

第一句“Like the hobbies of cooking”结构笨拙，改为简洁的“like cooking”。第二句主语“Almost every family member”是单数含义，动词应使用第三人称单数“likes”而非“like”。建议：使表达更自然并注意主谓一致，单数意义的代词或短语要用第三人称单数动词。