Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用简洁自然的表达直接回答，避免填充词（如 uh）并注意语法和发音错误。可以合并信息，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并修正词汇（如 scenery 拼写与用法）和冠词问题。建议把答案控制在不超过5句，每句结构完整。

例: Yes, I have several hobbies, including singing, reading, hiking and skiing. My favorite is skiing because I enjoy the scenery and the thrill of speed. I have been skiing for two years, so I feel fairly confident on intermediate slopes. Overall, skiing is an exciting and energising activity for me.

提案: 注意时态一致（过去时）、用词准确（immersed in，avoid 'pose'）并提供具体细节来丰富答案。减少含糊表述，使用连接词使句子更自然。控制在最多五句内。

例: When I was a child I loved reading novels, especially adventure stories. I would sit in my bedroom for hours and get completely immersed in the exciting plots. Those reading sessions are among my fondest childhood memories because they sparked my imagination.

提案: 注意语法（have kept / a good way → a good way to relax），避免重复和冗长。用更自然的短句表达持续性并给出具体例子或原因。

例: Yes. I started reading novels when I was seven and have kept this habit ever since. Reading is a great way for me to relax and escape everyday stress, so it's a hobby I intend to keep for life.

提案: 改进语法和表达（have the same hobbies as / recommend novels to me / developed the habit），用连接词增强连贯性，避免重复并添加具体例子以增加说服力。

例: Yes, I share a hobby with my father: we both enjoy reading novels. He often recommended books to me when I was a child, which helped me develop the habit. This shared interest has definitely brought us closer, especially when we discuss our favourite authors.

× I think skiing is very exciting activity.

✓ I think skiing is a very exciting activity.

句子中缺少不定冠词“a”，导致名词短语“exciting activity”前的修饰不完整。应在“very”和“exciting”之间加上“a”。建议：遇到可数单数名词（activity）时，注意使用适当的冠词或限定词。

× I really enjoy the Snolly uh scenery and the speed.

✓ I really enjoy the snowy scenery and the speed.

原句中“Snolly”明显是拼写错误，应为“snowy”（形容词，表示“有雪的”）。另外“enjoy”后直接跟宾语“the snowy scenery and the speed”是正确的。建议：写作时注意拼写，发音记不清时可回忆常见形容词形式。

× When I was a child, I like reading novels, especially adventure novels.

✓ When I was a child, I liked reading novels, especially adventure novels.

句子时间状语为过去（When I was a child），主句谓语应使用过去时“liked”。原句使用现在时“like”与过去时间状语不一致。建议：句子含有过去时间提示词时，将动词改为过去时。

× I used to sit in my bedroom for hours and I completely immersed the exciting pose.

✓ I used to sit in my bedroom for hours and I was completely immersed in the exciting plots.

原句“completely immersed the exciting pose”有多处问题： 1) “immersed”此处需被动结构“was immersed in”表示“沉浸于”； 2) “pose”拼写与语义错误，应该是“plot(s)”（情节）；3) 若指多部小说应使用复数“plots”。建议：当表示“沉浸于某事”用被动或短语“be immersed in”；注意单词拼写和单复数。

× I have keep these hobbies until now.

✓ I have kept these hobbies until now.

此处使用现在完成时，谓语应为现在完成时态的完成式“have kept”（过去分词kept），而不是动词原形“keep”。建议：现在完成时结构为“have/has + 过去分词”。

× Reading has always a good way for me to relax and escape the real world for a while and it's a hobby that I will never give up.

✓ Reading has always been a good way for me to relax and escape the real world for a while, and it's a hobby that I will never give up.

短语“has always a good way”缺少系动词“been”，应为“has always been a good way”。建议：在表示“某事物一直是某种方式/状态”时，使用“have/has + always + been + 表语”。

× He often recommends the novels for me when I was a child and that's probably why I developed the habits of reading.

✓ He often recommended novels to me when I was a child, and that's probably why I developed the habit of reading.

原句问题： 1) 时间为过去“when I was a child”，主句动词应为过去时“recommended”； 2) 搭配错误，“recommend ... to someone”而不是“recommend ... for someone”； 3) “habits of reading”更自然为单数“the habit of reading”或“reading habits”，但语境中指一种习惯，用单数更合适。建议：注意动词与时间一致，使用正确介词搭配并选择合适单复数形式。

× And this common hobby makes our relationship close.

✓ And this common hobby brings us closer.

原句“makes our relationship close”语义上可理解但表达不自然，英语里更常用“bring(s) us closer”或“make(s) our relationship close to”较少用法。改为“brings us closer”更地道，同时保持时态与上下文一致。建议：学习常用固定搭配或短语以表达“关系更亲密”。