Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing water polo because it keeps me fit, and I also love watching movies in my free time. In addition, I often go out for drinks with friends to relax and socialize.

提案: Good clear response and relevant detail. Improve by removing repetition, using smoother linking, and adding one specific detail (when/why) to enrich the answer. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: Yes, when I was a child I played baseball with my friends in the park after school because I loved the team spirit. I practiced every weekend and dreamed of becoming really good at it.

提案: Be precise and correct grammar (tense and number). Start with a topic sentence, then give a specific example and explain why you kept the hobby. Use linking words for clarity and avoid repeating the same phrase.

例: Yes, I've loved watching movies since I was a child. In particular, I'm a big fan of the Harry Potter films because I grew up with them and they sparked my imagination.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Correct grammar and avoid filler words. Give one or two specific comparisons between your hobbies and family members' hobbies using linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

例: Yes, my family and I share an interest in sports. For example, we often watch games together, and my father especially enjoys baseball while I prefer water polo and movies.

× I like to playing water polo and also watching movies is my favorite hobbies and I really like to drinking with my friends.

✓ I like playing water polo, and watching movies is one of my favorite hobbies. I also really like drinking with my friends.

The verb pattern 'like' followed by another verb should use the -ing form (gerund) or 'to' plus base form consistently. 'to playing' is incorrect; use 'playing'. 'watching movies is my favorite hobbies' has number agreement and article issues: 'hobbies' (plural) mismatches 'is' (singular) and 'my favorite' needs 'one of' for plural items. 'to drinking' is incorrect; use 'drinking' or 'to drink'. Suggestion: use 'I like playing...' and 'one of my favorite hobbies' and 'I also really like drinking with my friends.'

× Yes, as a child my hobby was playing baseball with my friends in the park after school. I I was obsessed with baseball at that time.

✓ Yes, as a child my hobby was playing baseball with my friends in the park after school. I was obsessed with baseball at that time.

There is a duplicated 'I' creating a typographical error; tense use 'was' is correct for past. Remove the extra 'I'. No tense change needed. Ensure only one subject pronoun appears: 'I was obsessed...'. (This mainly corrects a duplication error rather than grammatical tense.)

× Yes, watching movies is my favorite hobbies since I was a little especially I like Harry Potter since I was a child and I'm big fan of it.

✓ Yes, watching movies has been one of my favorite hobbies since I was little. I especially like Harry Potter; I've been a big fan of it since childhood.

The sentence mixes present tense with duration; use present perfect for an action continuing from the past to present: 'has been'. 'my favorite hobbies' mismatches number; use 'one of my favorite hobbies'. 'since I was a little' is unnatural; use 'since I was little' or 'since childhood'. 'I'm big fan' lacks an article: 'I'm a big fan'. For ongoing liking of Harry Potter, 'I've been a big fan since childhood' is clearer.

× My family, all members of my family, loves uh sports. Both watching and playing, for example, my father like baseball.

✓ All members of my family love sports, both watching and playing. For example, my father likes baseball.

Pronoun/reference and subject-verb agreement issues: 'My family, all members of my family, loves' is awkward and uses 'loves' with a plural sense; use 'All members of my family love' or 'My family loves' with consistent singular/plural sense. 'my father like baseball' needs third person singular verb: 'likes'. Also restructure for clarity: 'Both watching and playing' should attach to 'love' and be part of the sentence. Suggestion: 'All members of my family love sports, both watching and playing. For example, my father likes baseball.'