Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意流利度與重複問題，避免口頭禪（如“I I”，“reading can reading can”）。回答時先給出主題句，然後用1–2句具體例子或細節支持。可用連接詞使語句更順暢，例如“also”或“besides”。另外控制句子數量，最多不要超過5句。

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. It broadens my horizons and sharpens my logical thinking. For example, I read a variety of non-fiction books about psychology and science, which help me understand different perspectives. Also, reading helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: 避免自我貶低和重複（如“I I”，“I just reading. I just read.”）。回答要更自然，給出一個主題句並補充具體細節，如讀什麼類型的書、讀書的頻率或一個有趣的回憶。使用正面表述更能展示語言能力。

例: Yes, I loved reading as a child. I often read adventure stories and fairy tales almost every evening, and my favorite was The Chronicles of Narnia. Reading helped me imagine different worlds and spend time creatively.

提案: 注意語法錯誤（應為“I have enjoyed”或“I have been enjoying”）和用詞不當（“broadens my presence”不自然）。用更自然的短語如“broadens my horizons”。補充一兩個具體例子說明為何持續從事此興趣。

例: Yes, I have enjoyed reading since I was a child because it broadens my horizons and improves my critical thinking. For instance, I still read history books and novels every week to learn new ideas and relax.

提案: 減少填詞語音（如“uh, umm”）和重複（“we often, we often”）。回答時先肯定關係，再給出具體活動細節，例如去書店的頻率、一起討論的書或共同參加的活動。使用連接詞如“so”或“for example”使陳述更連貫。

例: Yes, my sister and I both enjoy reading. For example, we often go to the bookstore together on weekends and then discuss the books we buy over coffee.

× Yeah, I I enjoy reading and I think reading can reading can broaden my horizon and improve my logical thinking skills.

✓ Yeah, I enjoy reading, and I think reading can broaden my horizons and improve my logical thinking skills.

句中出现了词语重复（“I I”和“reading can reading can”），属于句子结构/重复错误。将重复部分删除，且“horizon”用复数形式“horizons”更常用。建议说话时注意不要无意重复词语，完成后快速回顾句子以避免重复。

× It also helps me relax and clear my mind, especially after a busy day.

✓ It also helps me relax and clear my mind, especially after a busy day.

该句语法正确，无需修改。保持现在时描述习惯性行为是恰当的。

× Yeah, when I was a child, I enjoyed reading a lot because I I had no other enjoyable things to do.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I enjoyed reading a lot because I had no other enjoyable things to do.

句中“I I”重复，且句子时态使用过去时（was/enjoyed/had）正确。去掉重复的“I”即可。注意叙述过去经历时保持过去时态一致。

× So I just reading. I just read.

✓ So I just read.

第一部分“So I just reading.”缺少正确的动词形式，应使用过去式或一般现在时“read”（在这里与前句过去时一致，读作/ rɛd/）。保留“I just read.”即可，避免重复表达。建议练习使用完整的主谓结构（主语+动词）。

× Yeah, since childhood I have enjoying reading because reading broadens my presence and improves my logical thinking.

✓ Yeah, since childhood I have enjoyed reading because reading broadens my horizons and improves my logical thinking.

“have enjoying”是不正确的现在完成进行/完成形式，正确应为现在完成式“have enjoyed”。另外“presence”用词不当，应为“horizons”或“knowledge/experience”等。根据语境用“horizons”。建议复习现在完成时的结构（have/has + 过去分词），以及常用搭配。

× After a busy day, I often read some books.

✓ After a busy day, I often read books.

“read some books”并非错误，但“read books”更简练自然。原句语法可接受，因此仅作风格性调整。建议在口语中使用更简洁的表达。

× Yeah, I like reading, which is the same as my sister.

✓ Yeah, I like reading, which is the same as my sister's.

原句语法上可以理解，但更地道的表达是“the same as my sister's”，省略“hobby”。建议使用所有格来比较爱好以更清晰自然。

× She also likes reading and uh, and uh, umm, we often, we often go to the book shop together and uh, uh, enjoy the reading time.

✓ She also likes reading, and we often go to the bookshop together and enjoy reading time.

句中存在大量语气词和短语重复（“uh, and uh, umm”，“we often, we often”，“uh, uh”），影响流利度。将重复停顿词删除并合并短语，使用“bookshop”或“book shop”为单词形式，使句子流畅。建议练习去除不必要的语气词，提前组织好要说的要点。