Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct, and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and use plural/singular consistently. For example, replace "it refreshed" with "it refreshes" and combine ideas to avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I really enjoy reading because it refreshes my mind and expands my vocabulary. Additionally, reading regularly has improved my comprehension skills, especially when I read varied genres like fiction and news articles.

提案: Be direct and avoid filler phrases like "I guess". Use a clear comparison and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct awkward phrasing (e.g. "prefer to read on paper to on a screen" -> "prefer reading on paper to reading on a screen"). Don't overload with too many reasons; choose the most relevant.

例: I prefer reading on paper to reading on a screen because I can concentrate better and I find it easier to remember information. Moreover, physical books often expose me to well-edited language, which helps me learn vocabulary and grammar patterns.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid vague phrases like "lots of reasons"; instead mention a concrete reason (e.g. tiredness, distractions). Correct small grammar errors ("on that time" -> "at that time"). Keep it concise and natural.

例: I need to read carefully in the morning when I'm most alert, so I can understand complex material and take notes. In the evening I usually skim texts because I'm tired and more easily distracted, so I focus only on the main points.

× I'm very passionate about reading because it refreshed my mind along with provides a lot of vocabulary.

✓ I'm very passionate about reading because it refreshes my mind and provides a lot of vocabulary.

The sentence mixes past tense 'refreshed' with present-tense context. Use present simple 'refreshes' to match 'I'm very passionate' which expresses a general truth. Also replace 'along with provides' with 'and provides' for correct coordination.

× Apart from that builds my comprehension skill efficiently.

✓ Apart from that, it builds my comprehension skills efficiently.

This fragment lacks a subject and uses singular 'skill' unnaturally. Add the subject 'it' to complete the sentence and use plural 'skills' which is more natural. A comma after 'Apart from that' improves clarity.

× Most of the time I guess I prefer to read on paper to on a screen because it helps me to concentrate better as well as provides numerous articles and exposes lots of vocabulary and grammatical structure.

✓ Most of the time, I guess I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because it helps me concentrate better and exposes me to many articles, vocabulary, and grammatical structures.

Use 'rather than' for comparing choices, not 'to'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps me'. Use parallel structure: 'helps me concentrate' and 'exposes me to'. Use 'many' and plural 'structures' for natural quantification.

× I usually read in the morning attentively because I can focus better on that time.

✓ I usually read attentively in the morning because I can focus better at that time.

Adverb placement: 'attentively' sounds more natural after 'read' or before phrase; move it for clarity. Use 'at that time' instead of 'on that time' because 'at' is correct for times of day.

× In contrast, I find it hard to focus in the evening because I'm tired and also lots of reasons.

✓ In contrast, I find it hard to focus in the evening because I'm tired and for many other reasons.

'Lots of reasons' is informal and lacks a preposition; 'for many other reasons' is clearer. Maintain parallel structure with 'because I'm tired and for many other reasons.'