Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và ngữ pháp: nói rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, dùng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và ngắn gọn (ví dụ: “Yes, I enjoy reading.”). (2) Tránh lặp từ như “fiction and fiction” bằng cách thay bằng từ đồng nghĩa hoặc mở rộng ý (e.g. “novels, especially contemporary fiction”). (3) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như “most of the books on my bookshelf is” → “are”. (4) Giảm tiếng “uh” bằng cách luyện trả lời ngắn gọn trước khi nói. (5) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để tăng tính thuyết phục (tên tác giả, thể loại yêu thích, số lượng sách).

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially contemporary fiction. Most of the books on my shelf are in Vietnamese because I like reading in my mother tongue. For example, I own several novels by Hồ Anh Thái and I usually finish one book every two weeks.

提案: Giữ độ tự nhiên nhưng cải thiện liên kết câu và loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng: (1) Dùng liên từ để kết nối 2 ý rõ ràng (e.g. “However, when I go out…”). (2) Tránh lặp từ và cụm từ thừa như “when I go outside when I can't bring a lot of books”. (3) Cân nhắc bổ sung một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về lợi ích của mỗi hình thức (ví dụ: “e-readers save space” hoặc “paper helps me concentrate”). (4) Giữ đáp án ngắn gọn (tối đa 3-4 câu) để rõ ràng và hiệu quả.

例: I prefer reading on paper because I enjoy the feel and smell of books, which helps me concentrate. However, when I travel or commute and can't carry many books, I use my tablet because it is convenient and stores many titles in one device.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, mạch lạc và dùng từ liên kết: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: “I need to read carefully when…”. (2) Sửa cấu trúc câu để tránh lặp và lỗi nhỏ như “look through the words and because I need to” → “skim the text and focus on the pictures”. (3) Dùng liên từ phù hợp (“whereas”, “while”, “because”) để phân biệt hai tình huống. (4) Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ môn học hoặc loại truyện tranh) để tăng độ cụ thể.

例: I need to read carefully when studying textbooks because I must understand facts and details, for example when preparing for an exam in history. In contrast, when I read comics I usually skim the text and focus on the illustrations to enjoy the story.

× Yes I do, I'm a big fan of reading books.

✓ Yes, I am. I'm a big fan of reading books.

Use a comma after 'Yes' and expand contraction for clarity; no major grammar error but punctuation and register improvement are suggested.

× I read a lot of cards or book like uh love fiction and fiction and most of the books on my bookshelf is in Vietnamese.

✓ I read a lot of books, mainly love fiction, and most of the books on my bookshelf are in Vietnamese.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice ('cards' should be 'books'), repetition ('fiction and fiction'), and subject-verb agreement ('books ... is' should be 'books ... are'). Also restructure for clarity: list reading preferences and language of books separately.

× I love read uh books by my mother tongue.

✓ I love reading books in my mother tongue.

After 'love' use the gerund form 'reading' (verb + -ing). Also 'by my mother tongue' is incorrect preposition use; use 'in my mother tongue' to indicate language.

× Reading on paper is my cup of tea.

✓ Reading books on paper is my cup of tea.

Add 'books' to clarify the noun being referred to; otherwise sentence is acceptable. This is an article/content specificity suggestion.

× I love the feeling when I touch the paper of the books, and I also love the smell of the paper.

✓ I love the feeling of touching the pages of books, and I also love the smell of paper.

Use 'the feeling of touching' or 'touching' instead of 'when I touch'. 'Paper of the books' is awkward; 'pages of books' or 'paper' is better. 'The smell of the paper' can be simplified to 'the smell of paper.'

× Uh, but when I go outside when I can't bring a lot of books, I umm, prefer reading on a screen because it's very convenient.

✓ But when I go out and cannot bring many books, I prefer reading on a screen because it is very convenient.

Avoid repeated 'when'; use 'go out' instead of 'go outside' in this context. Use 'cannot' or 'can't' consistently and 'many books' rather than 'a lot of books' after 'bring'. Maintain formality by avoiding filler sounds.

× I need to read carefully when I read textbooks because I need to learn, uh, the information exactly.

✓ I need to read carefully when I read textbooks because I need to learn the information accurately.

Use 'accurately' instead of 'exactly' for correct adverb usage with 'learn'. Remove filler 'uh'. Tense is present and appropriate.

× But when I read comics, I usually look through the words and because I need to, uh, look at the pictures as well.

✓ But when I read comics, I usually skim the words because I need to look at the pictures as well.

Combine clauses correctly: 'look through the words and because' is redundant. Use 'skim' instead of 'look through' for natural collocation. Remove filler 'uh' and reorder for clarity.