Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I enjoy reading.), then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct tense/grammar (e.g. I have enjoyed reading since childhood).

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I have loved books since childhood, and I read both fiction and nonfiction because fiction helps me relax while nonfiction teaches me new facts. For example, I recently read a history book that gave me useful context for my studies.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid vague phrases like "clearview". Keep within 1–3 sentences.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it is easier on my eyes and helps me concentrate. For example, paper books reduce screen glare and I can annotate margins, which makes studying more effective.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence and two contrasting, specific examples linked with words like "when" and "whereas". Remove fillers and improve sentence structure. Explain briefly why you read carefully in one case and casually in the other.

例: I read carefully when the material is informative or important, such as academic articles or work documents, because I need to understand details. Conversely, I skim casual content like social media posts or light stories, since they are mainly for entertainment and I don't need to remember everything.

× Yes, I like reading a lot as since my childhood I prefer to read different kinds of books and especially related to the umm fiction and nonfiction both kind of book I would prefer to read since my childhood.

✓ Yes, I have liked reading a lot since my childhood. I prefer to read different kinds of books, especially both fiction and nonfiction.

Original sentence has plural and phrasing issues: 'both kind of book' should be 'both fiction and nonfiction' (plural categories) and repetitive 'since my childhood' and awkward 'as since'. Use present perfect 'have liked' to show a continuing preference from childhood to present; use plural nouns 'kinds of books' and parallel structure 'both fiction and nonfiction.' Suggestions: remove redundant phrases, use parallel coordination, and choose correct noun number.

× I prefer to read on paper as it give me the clear and concise information that I'm reading and moreover I try to read by different kind of colorful pages so that I I can get the clearview.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because it gives me clearer, more concise information, and I also like books with colorful pages so I can see more clearly.

Errors include verb agreement ('it give' -> 'it gives'), article and noun form ('the clearview' is incorrect; use 'see more clearly' or 'a clear view'), and pluralization ('different kind' -> 'different kinds' or 'books with colorful pages'). Use 'because' for reason. Also adjust adjectives order and form: 'clearer, more concise' is comparative. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, correct article use, pluralize countable nouns, and use comparative forms where appropriate.

× I think when, when I'm reading something, uh, more informative, uh, I try to read it carefully and, uh, when I'm reading something, uh, normal, which I don't think so is very helpful for me in the future so that I'm not reading carefully.

✓ I think when I'm reading something more informative, I try to read it carefully; when I'm reading something ordinary that I don't think will be useful in the future, I do not read it carefully.

Problems: awkward tense and phrasing 'which I don't think so is very helpful' and redundant filler words. Use simple present for habitual actions. Replace 'normal' with 'ordinary' and use 'will be useful' for future usefulness. Also change 'so that I'm not reading carefully' to 'I do not read it carefully' for clarity. Suggestions: remove fillers, use clear relative clauses, and keep consistent present tense for habits.