Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and possessives, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also keep answers within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I love reading. I often spend time in the library because books on different subjects give me new perspectives on life. For example, last week I read a book called The Evolution of the World, which clearly explained how societies and technologies have changed over time.

提案: Correct grammar and awkward phrasing, connect ideas with linking words, and avoid sentence fragments. Be specific about reasons and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer reading on paper because turning the pages feels more satisfying and helps me concentrate better. In contrast, reading on a screen tires my eyes and often causes headaches, so I avoid it for long reading sessions.

提案: Make the response clearer and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and link contrasting ideas with words like "but" or "however." Give a specific example of a situation requiring careful reading.

例: If the text is simple and the font is clear, I don't need to read very carefully. However, when a document contains many technical details or very small print—such as legal contracts or instruction manuals—I read slowly and carefully to avoid mistakes.

提案: Fix grammar, word choice and sentence flow. Use linking words to contrast scanning and detailed reading, and keep examples brief and specific. Avoid invented adverbs like "readingly."

例: If a document is not important, I usually skim it to save time. However, for books or academic texts I prefer detailed reading so I can fully understand and remember the ideas; for example, I skim emails for key points but read novels carefully to appreciate the plot.

× I'm a bookworm and loves to spend my time in library by reading books on several topics which shows me different perspective of the world authors.

✓ I'm a bookworm and love to spend my time in the library reading books on several topics that show me different perspectives of the world's authors.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun/relative clause issues: 'I' requires the verb 'love' (not 'loves'). Add the article 'the' before 'library'. Use 'reading books' instead of 'by reading books'. Replace 'which shows me different perspective of the world authors' with 'that show me different perspectives of the world's authors' to match plural 'books' and make the relationship clear. Also pluralize 'perspective' to 'perspectives'.

× For instance, last time when I visit to library I used to read the Evolution of World which show how the world has changed throughout the years.

✓ For instance, last time when I visited the library I read The Evolution of the World, which showed how the world has changed over the years.

Tense and verb form errors: use simple past 'visited' for a past event (not 'visit to library'). Use 'read' (past) not 'used to read' if referring to a specific past visit. Capitalize and add articles for the book title: 'The Evolution of the World'. The relative clause should use past 'showed' to match the past time reference. Use 'over the years' instead of 'throughout the years' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer to read on papers because it gives me a sense of satisfaction whenever I turn my page and it also boosts my. Concentration and focus.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because it gives me a sense of satisfaction whenever I turn the page, and it also boosts my concentration and focus.

Countable/uncountable and article errors: 'paper' as a medium is uncountable here, so use 'on paper' not 'on papers'. Use 'the page' for a specific act of turning a page. Remove the stray period and join the sentence. Use lowercase 'concentration' and complete the phrase 'boosts my concentration'.

× However, reading on screen is quite fatigue for me because it gives you eye strain.

✓ However, reading on a screen is quite fatiguing for me because it gives me eye strain.

Word choice and pronoun consistency: 'fatigue' is a noun; use the adjective 'fatiguing' to describe reading, or 'is quite tiring'. Also maintain pronoun consistency with the speaker: use 'me' not 'you'. Add the article 'a' before 'screen'.

× When the font size is quite good and everything is readable on the page, a person should not be concentrated that much.

✓ When the font size is adequate and everything is readable on the page, a person should not have to concentrate that much.

Verb and collocation errors: 'should not be concentrated' is incorrect passive construction; use 'should not have to concentrate'. 'Quite good' is informal; 'adequate' or 'sufficient' is more natural. 'Concentrate' is the correct verb.

× However, when there are more details things and a minute font size which is unable to read properly, a person needs more careful.

✓ However, when there are many detailed items and the font size is very small and hard to read, a person needs to be more careful.

Several issues: word order and choice—use 'many detailed items' or 'more detailed things' instead of 'more details things'. 'Minute font size which is unable to read properly' is ungrammatical; say 'the font size is very small and hard to read'. 'Needs more careful' should be 'needs to be more careful'.

× If a document isn't very important, I usually skim it to save time, but for books or academic text that I prefer to thorough readingly so I can fully understand and remember the ideas.

✓ If a document isn't very important, I usually skim it to save time, but for books or academic texts I prefer to read thoroughly so I can fully understand and remember the ideas.

Form and collocation errors: 'academic text' should be plural 'academic texts' to match general meaning. 'Prefer to thorough readingly' is incorrect—use 'prefer to read thoroughly' or 'prefer thorough reading'. 'Read thoroughly' is the correct verb + adverb structure.

× For example, I skim emails and reports to get key points where as I read novels carefully to appreciate the plot.

✓ For example, I skim emails and reports to get key points, whereas I read novels carefully to appreciate the plot.

Conjunction spacing and choice: 'where as' should be the single word 'whereas'. Add a comma before 'whereas' to link the two contrasting clauses properly.