Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), avoid filler words and repetitions, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I don’t read much because I prefer visual media. For example, I often watch educational videos and look at infographics since they explain ideas more quickly. Also, videos keep me more engaged, so I learn better that way.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting reasons connected with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar issues (e.g., gerund after 'avoid' and article use).

例: I prefer reading on paper because staring at a screen for a long time strains my eyes. In addition, I enjoy physically flipping pages, which helps me remember where information is in the book.

提案: Start with a direct answer and then give clear reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and fillers. Be specific about situations when careful reading is required and when scanning is enough.

例: I need to read carefully during class when teachers ask questions because I must understand details to answer correctly. However, I don’t read carefully for casual articles or messages since I only need the main idea in those cases.

提案: Answer directly and use linking words to contrast the two situations. Remove hesitations and finish your thought (don’t leave sentence incomplete). Be specific about why you choose one method in each situation.

例: It depends: in class I prefer detailed reading because I need to understand specific points to answer questions. In exams, however, I often scan first to locate key information quickly and then read details if necessary.

× To be honest, I am not very into reading because I prefer more. We we shall we show things such as video and. Yes, such as video and picture so.

✓ To be honest, I am not very into reading because I prefer other formats such as videos and pictures.

The original contains repetition ('We we'), incomplete fragments, and unclear phrasing ('prefer more. We we shall we show things such as video and.'). This is a sentence structure error: ideas must be combined into a single coherent sentence. Use 'prefer other formats such as videos and pictures' to express contrast clearly, pluralize 'video' and 'picture', and remove redundant words. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Absolutely. I would prefer reading on paper because I don't want to staring at the screen for a long period because I think it will damage my eyesight and I like flipping the I like flipping the physical paper so I will prefer the paper.

✓ Absolutely. I would prefer to read on paper because I don't want to stare at a screen for a long period; I think it will damage my eyesight, and I like flipping physical pages, so I prefer paper.

Errors include incorrect verb form 'to staring' (should be infinitive 'to stare'), awkward repetition ('I like flipping the I like flipping'), article use ('the screen' -> 'a screen' or 'the screen'), and word choice ('physical paper' -> 'physical pages'). Fixes: use 'prefer to read' or 'prefer reading', use infinitive after 'want', remove repetition, and improve article and noun choices. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Umm, I think especially in the class I need to read carefully because the teacher will ask you some question if you can answer. I think I will feel embarrassed so I will try my best to read the academic material in the class so and but.

✓ Umm, I think especially in class I need to read carefully because the teacher may ask questions that you should be able to answer. I would feel embarrassed if I could not, so I try my best to read academic material in class.

Problems: wrong modal 'will ask you some question if you can answer' and unclear pronoun reference, plus sentence fragments and redundant conjunctions. Use 'may' for possibility, plural 'questions', and conditional 'if I could not' to express embarrassment. Remove extra fillers and redundant conjunctions to make sentences grammatical and coherent. Grammar problem type ID:4

× It depends. If in class I will prefer UMM detail reading because umm to in order to answer some umm question about the details. But if it's in the examination I will try to scan the.

✓ It depends. In class I prefer detailed reading in order to answer questions about specifics. But in an examination I would try to scan the text.

Issues: incorrect word order ('If in class I will prefer'), wrong adjective form 'detail reading' (use 'detailed reading'), unnecessary filler words, singular/plural mismatch 'some question' -> 'questions', and an unfinished final clause. Also tense/modal choice: use 'prefer' for habitual preference and 'would try' for conditional/exam situation. These changes correct sentence structure and verb forms. Grammar problem type ID:26