Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子整体表达清晰，但存在语法与用词错误（如“open my horizon”“make me expanding different lives”），且句子较冗长。建议： 1) 使用正确固定搭配：改为“broaden my horizons”。 2) 精简表达，控制在3–4句内，每句一层信息。比如第一句直接回答并给原因，第二句举例或补充感受。 3) 注意动词形式和被动/主动结构，避免重复“reading”。

例: Yes, I love reading because it broadens my horizons and lets me experience different lives. For example, I enjoy being absorbed in the worlds authors create, which helps me relax and think in new ways.

提案: 回答清楚且有具体理由和例子，但有小的用词和连贯性改进空间（如“convenient to take”不自然，建议用“convenient to carry”或“more portable”）。可以用连接词使句子更紧凑。

例: I prefer reading on a screen because e-books are much more portable than physical books. For instance, I can easily read new novels on my phone whenever I have spare time, such as on the bus or while waiting in line.

提案: 回答结构清晰，有对比和具体例子，但有小错误（“classicals”不自然，改为“classics”或“classic literature”；“hidden things”可更具体）。建议保持用词准确并略微精炼。

例: I read carefully when I study classics because they often contain subtle ideas and complex arguments that I don't want to miss. In contrast, I usually skim short online articles or news to grasp the main points quickly.

提案: 表达含糊且有严重语法与断裂问题（“Expo. Question from the author.”无意义，‘the details what the author wants to’语法错误）。建议： 1) 直接给出明确主题句，例如“I prefer detailed reading because...” 2) 用一到两句说明理由并举例，使用正确的从句或介词结构（e.g. “details the author wants to convey”）。 3) 避免碎片句，确保连贯性和完整句子。

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand the author's meaning and arguments. For example, when reading a novel I pay attention to subtle clues and descriptions that reveal characters' motives.

× I really love reading because reading can open my horizon and make me expanding different lives.

✓ I really love reading because reading can open my horizons and make me experience different lives.

句中“make me expanding”用法错误。动词“make”后应接动词原形（使役结构）或使役动词+宾语补足语使用原形；若表示“使我去体验”，可用“make me experience”。另外“horizon”需用复数“horizons”更自然。 建议：掌握使役动词（make/have/let）后接原形动词，以及常用固定搭配“open one's horizons”。

× I like to be absorbed in the world which the writer describes.

✓ I like to be absorbed in the world that the writer describes.

句中关系代词使用上更自然的是“that”而不是“which”在限定性定语从句中常用“that”。此外可省略关系词为“the world the writer describes”。 建议：限定性从句常用that或省略关系词；which通常用于非限定性从句并前面有逗号。 (简体中文)

× Well, I prefer reading on a screen because ebooks are much more convenient to take than physical books.

✓ Well, I prefer reading on a screen because e-books are much more convenient to carry than physical books.

“ebooks”写作习惯为“e-books”或“ebooks”，但“convenient to take”搭配不自然，英语中常用“convenient to carry”或“easy to carry”。因此替换为“convenient to carry”。 建议：注意固定搭配，如“easy/convenient to carry”和电子书写法一致性。

× So I can read new novels on my phone whenever I have spare time, for example on the bus or waiting in a line.

✓ So I can read new novels on my phone whenever I have spare time, for example on the bus or while waiting in line.

“waiting in a line”前应加while或使用现在分词作状语“while waiting in line”，且英式英语常说“waiting in line”或“waiting in a queue”。 建议：使用时间状语从句或现在分词短语时加连接词或用while以使结构完整。

× When I read classicals, I usually read carefully because they contain subtle ideas and details I don't want to overlook, for example, hidden things in novels or complex arguments in philosophy.

✓ When I read classical works, I usually read carefully because they contain subtle ideas and details I don't want to overlook, for example hidden elements in novels or complex arguments in philosophy.

“classicals”不是正确用法，应改为“classical works”或“classic works”。同时“hidden things”换为更自然的“hidden elements”。 建议：学习常见名词搭配，如“classical works / classic novels / hidden elements”。

× Expo. Question from the author.

✓ For example, questions from the author.

原句“Expo.”疑为缩写且不完整，句子缺乏动词和连贯性。改为“For example, questions from the author.”使其成为完整短语，并将“Question”改为复数“questions”与上下文一致。 建议：避免使用不明缩写，保证句子完整并与前句逻辑连贯。

× And I like to find the details what the author wants to.

✓ And I like to find the details that the author wants to convey.

“the details what the author wants to”中关系从句用法错误，应使用“that”或“which”引导，并补足动词“convey”使意思完整。原句缺乏宾语和正确动词搭配。 建议：关系从句中使用“that/which + 从句”，并选用合适动词（例如“convey/express/describe”）来完成意义。