Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but has grammatical errors, redundancy and awkward phrasing. Keep responses concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "all that stuff" and incorrect words such as "every treater."

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I like a wide range of books, from fiction and religion to history, but I mostly read historical books because I am fascinated by the past. For example, I recently read a biography about a 19th-century leader, which helped me understand how events shaped my country.

提案: Your preference is clear but the answer repeats ideas and contains grammar and vocabulary mistakes. Use a direct topic sentence, then provide one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid repeating words and unclear references (e.g., "run Jindakar").

例: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen. I find printed pages easier on my eyes and more comfortable for long reading sessions; for instance, I recently finished a historical novel in print and appreciated being able to annotate the margins.

提案: Good content idea but the answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors and hesitations. Structure your response: state when careful reading is necessary, give a specific example, then state when casual reading is acceptable with a short example. Use linking words like "because" and "however."

例: I need to read carefully when I'm studying or researching, because accuracy is important for assignments and citations. For example, I review journal articles slowly to note key arguments. However, in the evenings I often read light fiction to relax and skim rather than analyse closely.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains awkward phrasing and redundancy. Begin with a clear statement of preference (or a balanced answer), then use linking words to explain situations for detailed reading versus scanning, with specific examples. Avoid filler words like "just" and unclear phrasing such as "give more stress."

例: It depends on the purpose: I use detailed reading for university research and assignments because I need to understand arguments and take notes. Conversely, when I read for pleasure, I often scan or skim to get the main idea quickly, such as when browsing short stories or articles online.

× Being a every treater I love to explore different kind of books ranging from fiction to non fiction, religious, historical but most of the times I prefer to read the historical books because I love history and because it gives me a knowledge about the past and all that stuff.

✓ Being a frequent reader, I love to explore different kinds of books ranging from fiction to non-fiction, religious, and historical, but most of the time I prefer to read historical books because I love history and because they give me knowledge about the past and related topics.

Errors: 'a every treater' uses incorrect article and words; should be 'a frequent reader' (article + correct noun). 'different kind of books' should be 'different kinds of books' (plural form). 'non fiction' should be hyphenated 'non-fiction'. 'most of the times' should be 'most of the time' (article and singular time expression). 'the historical books' unnecessary definite article; use 'historical books'. 'it gives me a knowledge' wrong pronoun and article; use 'they give me knowledge'. Suggestions: use correct articles ('a' before singular countable), pluralize where needed, avoid unnecessary 'the', and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× I still stick to the papers over the screen.

✓ I still stick to paper rather than the screen.

Error: 'stick to the papers over the screen' uses wrong preposition and article. Use 'stick to' with a noun without plural when speaking generally: 'stick to paper'. To compare choices, use 'rather than' or 'instead of'. Also 'the screen' is appropriate when contrasting a general screen. Suggestion: use 'paper' for the medium in general and 'rather than' for contrast.

× I know modernization changes everything, but my values don't give me the permission to switch to the screen most of the times.

✓ I know modernization changes everything, but my values don't give me permission to switch to the screen most of the time.

Errors: 'give me the permission' uses an unnecessary definite article; use 'give me permission'. 'most of the times' is incorrect; use 'most of the time'. Suggestion: drop 'the' before 'permission' and use the correct time expression.

× I love to read read on the on a paper.

✓ I love to read on paper.

Errors: duplicate word 'read read', extra words 'the on a' create ungrammatical sequence. Simplify to 'I love to read on paper.' Suggestion: remove duplicates and unnecessary articles when speaking about a medium generally.

× Last time I read a book run Jindakar.

✓ Last time I read a book called Jindakar.

Errors: 'run' is incorrect word choice, likely intended 'run' -> 'called' or 'named'. Also missing article may be fine with 'a book called'. Suggestion: use 'called' or 'titled' when naming a book.

× OK, there are many reasons where I need to be careful while reading, such as I am exploring my academic stuff and some I'm searching about something important to me.

✓ OK, there are many situations when I need to be careful while reading, such as when I am studying academic material or when I am searching for something important to me.

Errors: 'reasons where' should be 'situations when' or 'reasons why'. 'my academic stuff' is informal and vague; 'academic material' is better. 'and some I'm searching about something' is ungrammatical; use parallel structure: 'or when I am searching for something important to me.' Suggestion: use 'when' for time/situations, maintain parallel clauses, and use 'searching for' (preposition use).

× But on the other hand, I sometimes I just read in the evenings to just relax my mind at that time.

✓ But on the other hand, sometimes I just read in the evenings to relax my mind.

Errors: duplicate 'I' and duplicated 'just' are redundant; 'at that time' is unnecessary. Adverb placement should be concise: 'sometimes I just read in the evenings to relax my mind.' Suggestion: remove redundancy and unnecessary time phrase.

× I think it's fine if I am not, uh, careful while searching while.

✓ I think it's fine if I am not careful when I am just browsing.

Errors: trailing 'while' and filler 'uh' break sentence; 'searching while' is ungrammatical. Use 'when I am just browsing' or 'when I am just reading for pleasure.' Suggestion: replace vague 'searching' with 'browsing' and remove filler words.

× As I already mentioned above that I need to give more stress like detailed reading for my universities research and my schoolwork.

✓ As I already mentioned above, I need to give more attention and do detailed reading for my university research and my schoolwork.

Errors: 'give more stress like detailed reading' is unnatural; use 'give more attention and do detailed reading' or 'give more emphasis to detailed reading.' 'universities research' wrong possessive/plural; should be 'university research.' Suggestions: use 'attention' or 'emphasis', correct noun form 'university'.

× But on the other hand I am just if I am reading just for enjoying.

✓ But on the other hand, if I am reading just for enjoyment, I am fine with skimming.

Errors: 'I am just if I am' word order is incorrect. 'for enjoying' is wrong; use 'for enjoyment' or 'to enjoy myself.' Suggestion: use proper clause order 'if I am reading for enjoyment' and use 'enjoyment' as noun.

× I think that would be fine if I am just scanning this stuff.

✓ I think that is fine if I am just scanning this material.

Errors: 'would be' shifts tense unnecessarily; context is general, so 'is fine' is better. 'this stuff' is informal; 'this material' or 'these texts' preferred. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with general statements and choose more formal noun than 'stuff.'