Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (types of books or a favorite title) using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and keep it to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. For example, on long or boring days I read short stories to pass the time, and before bed I usually read fiction to relax. Also, I often read travel guides or magazines when I am traveling.

提案: Clarify your preference and remove contradictions. Give a clear topic sentence stating your main preference, then explain exceptions with brief reasons and linking words. Correct minor grammar and avoid irrelevant phrases.

例: I prefer to read on paper because it is easier on my eyes and helps me focus. However, when I am on the bus I usually read on my phone because it is more convenient and lightweight.

提案: Provide a clear contrast using linking words and give a specific example of each situation. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating words. Keep answer structured: topic sentence, brief supporting details with reasons or examples.

例: I need to read carefully when I study important news or academic articles because accuracy matters. In contrast, when I'm reading for enjoyment, such as novels or comics, I relax and skim parts that are less interesting.

提案: State your preference clearly and explain why with specific benefits and an example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and avoid fillers. Keep it within three sentences for clarity.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me remember information and understand ideas deeply. However, I also use scanning when I need to find specific facts quickly, for example when looking for a date or name in an article.

× Yeah, I like reading, especially, umm, on a boring and long day, uh, and also enjoy reading book before bedtime. And I also, uh, during traveling. Yeah.

✓ Yeah, I like reading, especially on a boring or long day, and I also enjoy reading a book before bedtime. I also read while traveling.

Issues: incorrect prepositions and missing articles. Use 'on a boring or long day' for time expressions; use 'reading a book' with the article 'a'; use 'while traveling' to indicate simultaneous action. Suggestions: use correct prepositions for time ('on') and conjunction 'or' for alternatives; include articles before singular countable nouns; use 'while' + verb-ing for actions happening during another activity.

× Actually I like a boat, but I love to read on paper. But I like to read on screen in on bus I think but before the bed time I like to read on paper.

✓ Actually I like a book, but I love to read on paper. I also like to read on a screen when I'm on the bus, but before bedtime I prefer to read on paper.

Issues: 'boat' is likely a mispronunciation of 'book'; incorrect prepositions 'in on bus' should be 'on the bus'; 'the bed time' should be 'bedtime' or 'before bedtime'; article use 'a book'. Suggestions: choose correct noun ('book'), use 'on the bus' for public transport, use 'before bedtime' as a fixed phrase, and maintain consistent preference verbs ('prefer').

× While I'm studying a news topic, uh, I, I have to be careful, but uh, if I, uh, if I'm reading for, uh, enjoyment or just relaxing, uh, I don't have to be careful at all.

✓ When I'm studying a news topic, I have to be careful, but if I'm reading for enjoyment or just relaxing, I don't have to be careful at all.

Issue: slight misuse of 'while' is acceptable but 'when' is more natural here; overall tense is present continuous which is fine. The main problems were redundancy and fillers. Suggestions: use 'when' for occasions, remove filler words, and keep consistent present continuous for ongoing actions.

× In my opinion, both are important. I'm uh, but I'm using them. But uh, I like to read uh, deeply because umm, it helps me to remember uh, correctly and umm, learn deeply. But scan is great.

✓ In my opinion, both are important and I use both. I like to read in depth because it helps me remember correctly and learn more thoroughly. But scanning is also useful.

Issues: awkward adverb/adjective usage and word choice: 'read deeply' is better expressed as 'read in depth'; 'learn deeply' -> 'learn more thoroughly'; 'scan' as a noun/verb is better as 'scanning'. Suggestions: replace informal fillers, use standard collocations ('read in depth', 'learn thoroughly', 'scanning is useful'), and simplify sentence structure for clarity.