Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp cần rõ ràng hơn; tránh lỗi từ vựng như “has me broaden” hay “without any desktop”. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, rồi thêm 1–2 câu hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ loại sách bạn thích hoặc lợi ích cụ thể). Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như “broaden my horizons” đúng cách và thay “kill my time” bằng “pass the time” hoặc “spend my free time”.

例: Yes, I do. I often read in my free time because it helps broaden my horizons and relax me. For example, I enjoy reading short stories and popular science articles that teach me new ideas.

提案: Cần cải thiện phát âm lẫn cấu trúc câu và dùng liên từ hợp lý. Tránh dùng cụm từ yếu như “And so” lặp. Nên nêu một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp lý do cụ thể và ví dụ (ví dụ: truy cập nhanh, nhiều nguồn, lưu trữ dễ dàng). Chú ý ngữ pháp: “we can find” thay cho “we can easier to find”.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it is more convenient. For instance, I can quickly access many articles on my phone when I am out, and I can save items to read later or search for additional information online.

提案: Cần dùng câu rõ ràng và đúng ngữ pháp, tránh cụm từ lủng củng như “have me provide”. Nên chia hai phần: khi đọc kỹ (mục đích, ví dụ chi tiết) và khi không đọc kỹ (ví dụ cụ thể). Sử dụng danh từ số ít/phức như “information” không thêm -s. Dùng liên từ như “whereas” hoặc “otherwise” để kết nối ý.

例: I read carefully when I need exact information for presentations or studies, such as data and references. Otherwise, I skim headlines or short news summaries just to get a general sense of what's happening in the world.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp: chọn scanning hoặc detailed reading. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như “I prefers” và cấu trúc lộn xộn “it's half me”. Giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và cho ví dụ cụ thể khi nào bạn dùng mỗi cách. Sử dụng liên từ như “because” và “however” đúng chỗ.

例: I usually prefer scanning because it lets me quickly find the main points when I am short on time. However, I use detailed reading when I need to fully understand a topic, for example when preparing for exams or writing reports.

× Actually yes, I like reading even when I have free time, which has me broaden my horizons and I also kill my time without any desktop.

✓ Actually, yes, I like reading even when I have free time, which helps me broaden my horizons, and I also pass the time without any boredom.

The phrase 'has me broaden' is incorrect; use 'helps me broaden' to show causation. 'Kill my time' is informal and collocationally odd with 'without any desktop'; replace with 'pass the time' and 'without any boredom'. Use of articles and word choice were adjusted for natural English. Suggestions: use 'helps me broaden' for cause-effect, prefer 'pass the time' instead of 'kill my time', and replace unclear noun 'desktop' with appropriate word such as 'boredom' or remove it.

× This is because I think using my mobile phone is very convenient when I go outside or just stay at home.

✓ This is because I think using my mobile phone is very convenient whether I go outside or stay at home.

No major grammatical error but 'when I go outside or just stay at home' is stylistically improved to 'whether...or' for parallelism. Present participle 'using' is fine. Suggestion: keep parallel structures when listing alternatives.

× And so on the Internet we can easier to find a lot of, uh, source about what I want to read.

✓ And so on the Internet we can more easily find many sources about what I want to read.

'Easier to find' is incorrectly placed; the correct adverb form is 'more easily'. 'A lot of source' is wrong: use 'many sources'. Also move the adverb properly before the verb. Suggestion: use 'more easily' and 'many sources'.

× I usually read carefully when I need to find some informations which have me provide for my presentations.

✓ I usually read carefully when I need to find some information that I will use for my presentations.

'Informations' is uncountable in English; use 'information' (no plural). 'Which have me provide' is ungrammatical; use a relative clause 'that I will use' or 'that I need to provide'. Also 'will use' fits future intent. Suggestion: use 'information' and clear relative clause.

× However, when I just when I'm not carefully I just read some matching heading or title on the news to grasp the information about the world.

✓ However, when I'm not reading carefully I just read some headlines or titles in the news to grasp information about the world.

'When I'm not carefully' misuses the adverb 'carefully'; it should modify a verb: 'not reading carefully'. 'Matching heading' is awkward; use 'headlines' or 'titles'. 'On the news' changed to 'in the news'. Suggestion: place adverbs to modify verbs and choose correct news vocabulary.

× Actually, I prefers getting reading.

✓ Actually, I prefer skimming.

'I prefers' is incorrect because with subject 'I' the base form 'prefer' must be used. 'Getting reading' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'skimming' or 'getting a quick read'. Suggestion: use correct verb form 'prefer' and a suitable gerund like 'skimming'.

× The reasons for this is when I it's half me can umm more understand about this T topic without too much time.

✓ The reason for this is that it allows me to understand the topic more quickly without spending too much time.

Original has multiple structural errors: 'reasons' should be singular 'reason' to agree with 'is'; 'when I it's half me can' is ungrammatical. Rewrote to clear subject 'it' (skimming) allowing understanding. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement and use clear subordinating clause 'that it allows me to...'.

× However, detailed readings have more understand about this topic.

✓ However, detailed reading gives a better understanding of this topic.

'Detailed readings have more understand' is incorrect: use noun 'reading' and noun phrase 'a better understanding'. 'Have' with 'understand' is wrong. Suggestion: use 'gives a better understanding' or 'helps me understand more'.