Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., 'self-improvement' and 'clears my mind'), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific example of a book or how it helped you for clarity. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially self-improvement books. For example, 'Atomic Habits' helped me develop a daily study routine and clarified my goals, so I feel more focused and motivated.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating preference, fix grammar and hesitations, and provide one brief reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Use precise vocabulary like 'paper books' and 'digital devices'.

例: I prefer reading paper books because digital devices dry out my eyes, especially since I wear contact lenses. As a result, I find paper more comfortable for long reading sessions.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence and concise contrast using linking words like 'however' or 'whereas'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'academic-related' and 'relaxed') and avoid repetition. Give a brief specific example of academic reading vs leisure reading.

例: I read carefully when studying academic texts because they affect my grades and require understanding. However, for fiction or light books I read more relaxedly, mainly for enjoyment and not for detailed analysis.

提案: State your preference in one clear sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct forms (e.g., 'detailed reading' and 'absorb information'). Use a linking word to explain reason and give a short example of when detailed reading is necessary.

例: I prefer detailed reading because skimming often prevents you from fully absorbing the author's ideas. For instance, when learning a new concept for an assignment, I read slowly and take notes to remember key points.

× I'm really into books that's related to self improvement.

✓ I'm really into books that are related to self-improvement.

The plural 'books' requires the relative clause to use plural agreement 'that are' rather than 'that's' (which is a contraction of 'that is'). Also add a hyphen in 'self-improvement' as a compound noun. Suggestion: use 'books that are related to...' or 'books about self-improvement.'

× I think after reading it, it just helps me, declares my mind and help me set a goal.

✓ I think after reading them, they just help me clear my mind and help me set goals.

Pronoun agreement: 'books' is plural so use 'them' and 'they'. Verb forms: 'declares my mind' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'clear my mind' using base verb. Also maintain consistent verb agreement: 'help' with plural subject 'they'. Use plural 'goals' or 'a goal' consistently. Suggestion: ensure subject-pronoun agreement and correct verb choice.

× I prefer to read books on a paper cause read it on a electronic device will make my eyes pretty dry.

✓ I prefer to read books on paper because reading on an electronic device makes my eyes very dry.

Do not use the indefinite article 'a' before uncountable 'paper' when meaning the medium; use 'on paper'. Use 'because' instead of colloquial 'cause'. Use gerund 'reading' after preference and correct article before 'electronic device' ('an electronic device'). Also use 'makes' to agree with singular gerund subject 'reading'.

× And since I'm wearing a contact lens I do think umm look looking books on electronic device makes my eyes, not that I'm not that comfortable.

✓ And since I wear contact lenses, I do think looking at books on electronic devices makes my eyes uncomfortable.

Pluralize 'contact lens' to 'contact lenses' for common usage. Use simple present 'I wear' for habitual action. Use 'looking at' + object. 'Electronic device' should be plural or generic 'electronic devices'. Remove double negation 'not that I'm not that comfortable' and replace with 'makes my eyes uncomfortable.' Suggestion: simplify and use correct preposition 'at' and plural nouns.

× I think when I'm reading academic related books, I will read it pretty carefully 'cause that's that's gonna affect my scores, my academic performance.

✓ I think when I'm reading academically related books, I read them pretty carefully because that will affect my scores and my academic performance.

Use present simple 'I read' for habitual actions. 'Academic related' should be 'academically related' or 'academic' as adjective. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'books'. Avoid colloquial 'gonna'; use 'will'. Ensure parallel structure 'scores and my academic performance.'

× But if that's if that's books not about academic, I will read read it pretty relax since it's just.

✓ But if the books are not academic, I read them more casually since they are just for enjoyment.

Correct conditional structure: 'if the books are not academic'. Use plural 'books' with plural verb 'are' and pronoun 'them'. Use adverb 'more casually' rather than 'pretty relax'. Complete the sentence with a clear purpose 'for enjoyment.' Suggestion: avoid repetition 'read read.'

× I prefer detail reading cause if you just browse browse through the books, I think you are not absorbing any information that books trying to convey or trying to provide.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because if you just browse through books, I think you do not absorb the information that books are trying to convey or provide.

Use adjective 'detailed' rather than noun 'detail' before 'reading'. Use 'because' instead of 'cause'. Remove duplicate 'browse'. Use 'absorb' with singular 'information' and include 'are' in the relative clause: 'books are trying to convey.' Use 'you do not' for clarity.

× So I think really very carefully and make sure you get an every details is very important.

✓ So I think reading very carefully and making sure you get every detail is very important.

Use gerunds for parallel structure: 'reading' and 'making sure.' Use 'every detail' (singular 'detail') not 'every details.' Remove redundant 'really' or place it appropriately. Suggestion: restructure to maintain grammatical parallelism and correct quantifier usage.