Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details and avoid short, vague phrases. Correct grammar (e.g., “I feel, enjoy and relax” → “I feel relaxed and enjoy it”) and reduce redundancy. Use linking words like “for example” or “because” to explain why you like reading.

例: Yes, I love reading. I especially enjoy religious books and novels because they help me reflect and imagine different lives. For example, reading a novel lets me relax after a busy day and escape into another world.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence and one clear reason with a supporting detail. Remove filler words (“uh”) and correct grammar (e.g., “it's helps me” → “it helps me”). Use a linking word like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it’s more comfortable and helps me visualise the story. For example, flipping physical pages makes the characters and scenes feel more vivid to me.

提案: Clarify the time frames and give a direct contrast between careful and casual reading. Use correct tense and grammar, and provide specific examples (e.g., studying for exams vs reading for pleasure). Use linking words like “when” and “but” to show contrast.

例: I read carefully when I’m studying for a class or preparing for an exam because I need to understand details and remember facts. But when I have free time I read novels more casually just for enjoyment and relaxation.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then explain why using specific reasons and correct grammar. Avoid starting with filler words like “and usually.” Use linking words such as “because” and give a brief example to illustrate.

例: I usually prefer scanning rather than detailed reading because I read mainly for pleasure and to imagine the story. For example, when I read a novel I focus on the plot and characters instead of analysing every sentence.

× When I read books I feel, enjoy and relax.

✓ When I read books I feel relaxed and enjoy them.

Original sentence mixes verb forms and lacks object. 'Feel' should be followed by an adjective 'relaxed' to express state. 'Enjoy' needs an object ('them' referring to books). Also use parallel structure: 'feel relaxed and enjoy them.' Improve by keeping verbs consistent and adding the object.

× Oh, I really prefer to read on paper because it's very comfortable for me and, uh, it's helps me, uh, to imagine a story.

✓ Oh, I really prefer to read on paper because it's very comfortable for me and it helps me to imagine a story.

The phrase 'it's helps' is incorrect because the auxiliary 'it' + 'helps' creates a subject-verb agreement error and an extra auxiliary. Use either 'it helps' (correct third person singular) or 'it's helping' (present continuous). Here 'it helps' is appropriate. Remove the extra contraction to fix agreement.

× When I had some free time, I try read book because on my own lecture.

✓ When I have some free time, I try to read a book because of my own lectures.

Tense is inconsistent: 'When I had' (past) conflicts with 'I try' (present). Use present tense 'When I have some free time' for habitual actions. Also 'try read' needs the infinitive 'try to read.' 'book' needs an article 'a book.' 'on my own lecture' is incorrect preposition and number; use 'because of my own lectures' or 'because of my lectures.' Fix by matching tense, adding the infinitive marker, correct article, and correct preposition.

× Reading helps me new learning, new things and enjoy at the moment.

✓ Reading helps me learn new things and enjoy the moment.

'Helps me new learning' is ungrammatical: after 'helps me' use the base verb 'learn.' 'New things' is the correct noun phrase. 'Enjoy at the moment' should be 'enjoy the moment' (no preposition). Rearrange to 'Reading helps me learn new things and enjoy the moment.'

× And usually I don't read with detail because I read and just enjoying and imagine a story of book.

✓ Usually I don't read in detail because I just read for enjoyment and imagine the story of the book.

'Read with detail' should be 'read in detail' (preposition). 'I read and just enjoying' mixes verb forms; use 'I just read for enjoyment' or 'I read and just enjoy imagining the story.' 'Imagine a story of book' is awkward—use 'imagine the story of the book' or 'imagine the story.' Fix by using correct preposition, consistent verb forms, and clearer wording.