Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague generalizations, correct factual errors, and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Use one or two specific supporting details and a linking word. For example, replace “Sherlock Holmes by Charles Dickens” with the correct author and shorten redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading because it sharpens my attention and expands my imagination. For example, I read The Adventures of Sherlock Holmes by Arthur Conan Doyle last week, and it was full of intriguing cases. This kind of mystery fiction keeps me mentally engaged and sparks new ideas.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, reduce repetition, and finish your thought. Give specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., because, however). Avoid filler phrases like “I'm habitual of”.

例: I prefer reading on paper because I find printed books and newspapers more comfortable and easier to concentrate on. For example, paper reduces eye strain and helps me remember information better, whereas screens often distract me with notifications.

提案: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. Use one or two clear contrasting examples linked by a connector (e.g., whereas, but). Be specific about why careful reading is needed and finish the second clause coherently.

例: It depends on the material: when reading medical reports or legal documents I need to read carefully because accuracy is crucial, whereas when reading a light novel or most newspapers I can read more casually because small mistakes are less important.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid repetitions and unfinished sentences. Use linking words like because or for example to clarify your point.

例: I prefer detailed reading because, as a research student, I need to understand each line to gather accurate information. For example, while researching food packaging safety, I read studies in detail to extract methodology and results that inform my experiments.

× I love reading books because I think reading makes a person attentive and increases the imagination of a human being.

✓ I love reading books because I think reading makes a person more attentive and increases a person's imagination.

The sentence uses 'attentive' and 'imagination' but lacks comparative 'more' to indicate increase; also 'the imagination of a human being' is awkward and wordy. Use 'more attentive' for comparison and 'a person's imagination' for natural expression.

× For example, I read Sherlock Holmes by Charles Dickens last week and it was so intriguing and full of mysteries.

✓ For example, I read Sherlock Holmes last week and it was so intriguing and full of mysteries.

The speaker correctly uses past tense 'read' for a completed action. However, the author of Sherlock Holmes is Arthur Conan Doyle, not Charles Dickens; that is not a grammar error but factual. Removing the incorrect author keeps grammar correct and improves accuracy.

× I prefer to read on paper like newspaper and hard copies and textbooks, notebooks because I'm habitual of reading to books.

✓ I prefer to read on paper, such as newspapers, hard copies, textbooks, and notebooks, because I am used to reading books.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'on paper like' should be 'on paper, such as'; 'newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' for general reference; 'I'm habitual of' is unnatural — use 'I am used to'; 'reading to books' is incorrect preposition and infinitive use — use 'reading books'. Also add commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× Moreover, I believe reading on screen doesn't give you that much enjoyment and also have some disadvantages like.

✓ Moreover, I believe reading on a screen does not give as much enjoyment and also has some disadvantages, such as...

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'screen'; 'doesn't give you that much enjoyment' is better as 'does not give as much enjoyment'; subject-verb agreement 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'reading' or 'reading on a screen'; sentence ended incompletely — add 'such as' to introduce examples.

× I think, uh, it depends, uh, what you are reading.

✓ I think it depends on what you are reading.

Use the correct preposition 'depends on' rather than just 'depends'; remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Present simple 'depends' is correct for general situations.

× For example, if you are reading a medical, uh, reports of a person, you need to be very careful and attentive towards it.

✓ For example, if you are reading a person's medical report, you need to be very careful and attentive to it.

Problems: 'a medical, reports of a person' is ungrammatical. Use singular 'a person's medical report' or plural 'medical reports'. 'Attentive towards' is nonstandard; use 'attentive to'. Ensure article and noun agree in number.

× And on the other hand, if you're reading a book or newspaper, uh, then you can be, you can take it lightly or.

✓ On the other hand, if you are reading a book or a newspaper, then you can take it lightly.

Remove filler and redundant clauses. Add article 'a' before 'newspaper'. 'Take it lightly' is correct; remove trailing 'or'. Use consistent subject 'you are'.

× I prefer detailed reading because I am a a research student and every line through the book UH helps me to get new information.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because I am a research student and every line in the book helps me get new information.

Fix doubled 'a a'; 'every line through the book' is unnatural — use 'every line in the book'; remove filler 'UH'; 'helps me to get' is correct but more natural as 'helps me get' (omit 'to').

× For example, I am researching on the food safety products of the package to food and I have created.

✓ For example, I am researching food safety of packaged food products and have created...

'Researching on' is incorrect — use 'researching' or 'researching on' in some dialects but standard is 'researching'; phrase 'products of the package to food' is ungrammatical; rephrase as 'packaged food products' or 'food packaging'; sentence was incomplete — indicate continuation with ellipsis. Also remove redundant 'I have' at end or complete the clause.