Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn; tránh từ thừa (ví dụ: "through via", "anyway") và cấu trúc lặp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về loại sách hoặc nguồn tin bạn thích. Thay đổi từ vựng để tránh lặp lại (ví dụ: "avid interest" và "simply because" cùng xuất hiện).

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I mainly read non-fiction books and online articles because they help me learn new ideas and keep up with current events.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi từ vựng/ngữ pháp ("reference reading books via social media" không chính xác). Nên trả lời trực tiếp (paper or screen), sau đó giải thích lý do ngắn gọn và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về thiết bị hoặc ứng dụng bạn dùng. Tránh nhắc lại không cần thiết "As I mentioned before" nếu không cần.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because I often use my tablet and apps like Kindle and news websites, which are more convenient and searchable than paper books.

提案: Cần cấu trúc rõ ràng: nêu khi nào bạn đọc kỹ và khi nào bạn đọc lướt. Tránh tiếng lấp ("umm") và ngữ pháp sai ("submitted relating my thesis"). Hãy dùng liên từ như "when" và "but" để nối ý, và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: types of journals, tasks).

例: I read carefully when reviewing academic journals or sections of my thesis because accuracy matters. But I only skim social media posts and newsfeeds when I want a quick update.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu trôi chảy và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp/văn phong (word order, tense). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer...), dùng liên từ để phân biệt hai trường hợp và hoàn thành câu với ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ độ dài không quá 3–4 câu.

例: I generally prefer detailed reading for important tasks like studying or work reports because I need to understand everything thoroughly. However, I scan content on platforms like Facebook or TikTok when I only want quick updates.

× Absolutely, I have an avid interest in reading books or news through via social media simply because I believe it is a good way for me to expand my knowledge anyway.

✓ Absolutely, I have an avid interest in reading books or news via social media because I believe it is a good way for me to expand my knowledge.

Use of both 'through' and 'via' is redundant; choose one. 'Anyway' is unnecessary and informal at the end. 'Via' is the correct preposition to indicate the medium. Also remove 'simply' if concision is desired. Suggestion: use 'via social media' and avoid redundant words.

× As I mentioned before, I have reference reading books via social media like Facebook, Google, YouTube over the other devices.

✓ As I mentioned before, I usually read reference books via social media like Facebook, Google and YouTube rather than on other devices.

The phrase 'reference reading books' is awkward; 'read reference books' is correct. 'Over the other devices' is incorrect; use 'rather than on other devices' to show preference. Also use commas and 'and' correctly in a list.

× Well, I read carefully when I have some important journals submitted relating my thesis on ISA.

✓ Well, I read carefully when I have important journal articles related to my thesis on ISA.

'Some important journals submitted relating my thesis' is ungrammatical. Use 'journal articles' or 'journals' and structure as 'related to my thesis.' 'Submitted' is unnecessary unless meaning submission; if so, use 'that are submitted.' Suggestion: 'important journal articles related to my thesis.'

× However, when I browse, umm, quickly add some daily basic new face on Facebook.

✓ However, when I browse, I quickly look at basic daily news on Facebook.

The original sentence lacks a clear verb-object structure and contains unclear words like 'add' and 'new face.' Use 'look at' or 'scan' and 'daily news.' Remove filler 'umm' in formal answers.

× I have preference detail reading over scanning when I have some important task then however I just gaining some information on Facebook TikTok when I.

✓ I prefer detailed reading over scanning when I have an important task; however, I just gain some information on Facebook or TikTok when I am not busy.

'I have preference detail reading' is incorrect; use 'I prefer detailed reading.' 'Detail' should be the adjective 'detailed.' 'Gaining' needs base verb 'gain' with correct tense. The sentence was also incomplete ('when I'). Add 'when I am not busy' to finish the idea. Use punctuation to join clauses properly.