Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb forms and remove redundancy. Use linking words like “for example” or “and” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading a lot. For example, I often read books in the library about nature and different countries to learn details like customs and travel tips.

提案: Start with a direct preference sentence, then give one clear reason and a short supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases and repetition; use linking words such as “because” or “so”.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it is easier on the eyes, especially during long reading sessions, so I get less eye strain than when I read on a screen.

提案: Use a clear present-tense topic sentence and provide two specific situations with a linking word (e.g., “for example”, “but”). Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear endings.

例: I need to read carefully when doing important tasks; for example, when I complete homework, handle office reports, or help my child with assignments. But for casual articles or messages I usually skim.

提案: State your preference clearly, then explain why with a specific benefit. Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “detailed reading” not “raining”) and one linking phrase like “because” or “so”.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand meanings and learn vocabulary from a book, so I can remember new words and use them correctly.

× I like reading too much.

✓ I like reading very much.

The original uses 'too much' which often implies an excessive amount with negative connotation; this is a word choice issue rather than grammar list items, but fits best under pronoun/word use category here. Use 'very much' to express strong positive preference.

× I reading books in the library about the natural things, about the world, about the countries, to know the more detailed things in for the so many countries, how to travel to different countries.

✓ I read books in the library about nature, the world, and different countries to learn more details about them and how to travel to those countries.

Multiple errors: missing auxiliary/verb form ('I reading' should be 'I read'), incorrect nouns ('natural things' -> 'nature'), redundant phrases and wrong prepositions ('in for the so many countries' -> 'about them' or 'different countries'), and awkward clause order. Suggestion: use simple present 'I read' for habitual action, replace vague nouns with precise ones, and simplify clause structure: purpose expressed with 'to' + verb.

× Hi prefer to read on paper.

✓ I prefer to read on paper.

Typo 'Hi' should be 'I'. Also 'prefer' is correct for present preference. Suggestion: carefully check for typos and ensure subject pronoun is correct.

× Why on a screen? Because you don't.

✓ Why would anyone read on a screen? I wouldn't.

Original fragments are incomplete and unclear. 'Because you don't' is vague and lacks an object; rephrase to a full sentence expressing personal choice. Suggestion: use complete sentences and include subject and verb for clarity.

× Paper is good for our eyes as compared to see on the screen.

✓ Paper is better for our eyes compared to looking at a screen.

Wrong verb form and preposition 'see on the screen' should be 'looking at a screen'. Use comparative 'better' and correct preposition 'at' after 'looking'. Suggestion: use 'looking at' when referring to viewing screens.

× Screen is not good for our eyes.

✓ Screens are not good for our eyes.

Count noun 'screen' when speaking generally should be plural 'screens' or include an article: 'A screen is not good...'. Also 'not good for our eyes' is acceptable. Suggestion: use plural for general statements about things.

× It takes too much capacity for reading in the screen.

✓ It requires too much effort to read on a screen.

'Too much capacity' is awkward; 'effort' is a better noun. Preposition 'in the screen' is incorrect; use 'on a screen' or 'on screens'. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'read on a screen' and 'requires effort'.

× I need to read carefully when I was to do some important work, like for example our homework, our office work, helping the child to do their homework.

✓ I need to read carefully when I have to do important work, for example my homework, office work, or helping a child with their homework.

Tense mismatch: 'I was to do' is wrong; use present 'have to' for general situations. Pronouns and possessives: 'our homework' should be 'my homework' unless speaking for a group; 'helping the child to do their homework' -> 'helping a child with their homework'. Suggestion: use 'have to' for obligations and consistent possessive pronouns.

× Without making any.

✓ I need to make no mistakes.

Fragment 'Without making any.' is incomplete; it lacks an object. Clarify meaning: likely intends 'without making any mistakes'. Suggestion: complete the clause and state the object.

× I prefer detailed raining as compared to scanning.

✓ I prefer detailed reading to scanning.

Typo 'raining' should be 'reading'. Use the gerund 'reading' after 'prefer' and the correct comparative structure 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'as compared to'. Suggestion: 'prefer X to Y' is the common pattern.

× Detailed reading is help us to in case of a book vocabulary.

✓ Detailed reading helps us learn the vocabulary in a book.

Grammar errors: 'is help us' should be 'helps us' (subject-verb agreement and verb form), unnecessary 'to in case of', and awkward phrasing 'book vocabulary' -> 'the vocabulary in a book' or 'a book's vocabulary'. Suggestion: use 'helps us' and a clear verb like 'learn' with proper object placement.