Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence saying whether you like reading now, then briefly mention past habits and current occasional reading. Use correct tense and smoother linking words, and avoid repetition. Aim for 3–4 concise sentences with specific examples of what you read now.

例: Not really — I don’t read much these days. When I was a child I read a lot, especially books to help me study Korean. As an adult I drifted away from reading, but I still read occasional online articles about technology or news.

提案: This answer is clear and direct but contains repetition and slight awkward phrasing. Start with one strong sentence stating your preference, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., concentrate, retain, comfortable) and avoid repeating phrases.

例: I definitely prefer paper because I find it easier to concentrate and retain information. On screens I get distracted more easily, and reading on paper feels more comfortable and less tiring for my eyes.

提案: Organize into a clear contrast: state when careful reading is necessary, give specific examples and reasons, then state when it is not necessary with an example. Use linking words (for example, whereas, because) and correct grammar (e.g., ‘art descriptions’).

例: I need to read carefully when I study textbooks or follow technical instructions related to my major, because accuracy is important. By contrast, I don’t read carefully when I enjoy comic books or light fiction, since they’re mainly for entertainment.

提案: Answer directly and include a brief explanation and an example. Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘otherwise’ to show contrast, and avoid vague phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

例: It depends on the purpose: for studying or following instructions I read in detail to understand everything. However, for general browsing or news I usually scan the text to pick out the main points.

× I don't like reading and I was a child.

✓ I didn't like reading when I was a child.

The original mixes present tense 'don't' with past reference 'a child'. Use past tense 'didn't' to match the time frame and add 'when' to connect the clauses clearly; this makes the temporal relationship explicit.

× I spent a lot of time on reading a book while I studied Korean.

✓ I spent a lot of time reading books while I studied Korean.

After 'spend time' use the gerund without 'on' in this context: 'spend time reading'. Also use plural 'books' or 'a book' consistently; 'reading books' sounds more natural for general habit.

× But after I grew up I became a far from reading a book.

✓ But after I grew up I moved away from reading books.

The phrase 'became a far from' is ungrammatical. Use 'moved away from' to express distancing and use 'reading books' as the activity. Maintain past tense 'moved' to match 'grew up'.

× But occasionally I read some articles.

✓ But occasionally I read articles.

'Some' is unnecessary with 'read articles' in this context; removing it makes the sentence more natural. Tense 'read' (present habitual) is appropriate.

× Definitely I prefer to read on paper because on a screen basically I cannot focus on the texts and it is a bit awkward to me.

✓ I definitely prefer to read on paper because I basically cannot focus on texts on a screen and it feels a bit awkward to me.

Place adverb 'definitely' after subject for natural word order. Move 'basically' next to the verb it modifies. Use 'texts' without 'the' for general reference and change 'it is a bit awkward to me' to 'it feels a bit awkward to me' for idiomatic phrasing.

× And when I when I read something on paper I can concentrate more.

✓ When I read something on paper I can concentrate better.

Remove repeated 'when I'. Use 'better' instead of 'more' to modify the verb 'concentrate' correctly. Keep a single clause starting with 'When'.

× I think when I read instruction and description of arts or textbook related to my major, I need to read carefully and when I read a comic book.

✓ I think I need to read carefully when I read instructions and descriptions of art or textbooks related to my major, but not when I read a comic book.

The original is a sentence fragment and has parallelism issues. Make a full sentence by stating 'I need to read carefully when...' Pluralize 'instructions' and 'descriptions', use 'art' (not 'arts') for general field, pluralize 'textbooks', and add contrast 'but not when I read a comic book' to complete the thought.

× It depends on situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'situation' in this idiomatic expression 'depends on the situation'.

× As I said, when I have to read some important details on textbook or instruction, I usually read carefully.

✓ As I said, when I have to read important details in a textbook or in instructions, I usually read carefully.

Use 'in a textbook' and 'in instructions' (plural) for natural preposition and article use. Remove 'some' which is unnecessary and adjust prepositions: 'in' is correct for contents inside texts.