Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "holiday school holiday") and use correct word forms (e.g., "historical books" or "books about history", "books in other languages"). Use a linking phrase like "for example" or "also" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially during school holidays. For example, I often read books about history and novels written in English or other languages. I also like to share interesting books with my friends.

提案: Use a formal tone and clear sentence structure. Begin with a direct answer (e.g., "I prefer paper") and give one clear reason with a linking word (e.g., "because"). Avoid informal phrases like "Not gonna lie" and fix grammar (e.g., "easier" not "more easier"). If you want to acknowledge alternatives, state it briefly and coherently.

例: I prefer reading on paper because holding a physical book helps me concentrate and remember information better. However, I sometimes read on a screen for convenience, such as when I need quick access to articles online.

提案: Organize your reply into two clear parts: when careful reading is necessary and when it is not. Use correct vocabulary ("historical books", "languages", "words" not "votes") and link ideas with words like "because" and "whereas". Give a specific reason why careful reading is needed (to understand details, vocabulary, or timeline). Avoid repetition and fix grammar ("I don't need to be careful").

例: I need to read carefully when I study historical books or texts in another language because I must understand the timeline, details, and unfamiliar vocabulary. In contrast, when I scroll social media I usually skim posts and do not read carefully.

提案: If you do not understand the question, ask for clarification briefly and then try to answer. Use simple language to state a preference ("scanning" means quickly looking for specific information; "detailed reading" means reading thoroughly). Give one reason and an example to support your choice.

例: Could you please explain what you mean by "scanning"? If you mean quickly looking for information, I prefer scanning when I search for facts or dates. For studying or enjoying a story, I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the content fully.

× Yes, I like reading especially during holiday school holiday.

✓ Yes, I like reading, especially during school holidays.

The phrase 'holiday school holiday' is incorrect and missing the plural and article. Use 'school holidays' to refer to the vacation period; add a comma after 'reading' for clarity. Also 'holiday' should be plural because 'school holidays' typically refers to multiple days/weeks.

× I would like to read historical English book or any languages book.

✓ I would like to read historical English books or books in other languages.

Use plural 'books' when speaking generally. 'Any languages book' is ungrammatical; say 'books in other languages' to indicate books written in various languages. Maintain parallel structure.

× Moreover, I would like to share my reading experience to my friends.

✓ Moreover, I would like to share my reading experiences with my friends.

Use plural 'experiences' for multiple occasions and the preposition 'with' (not 'to') after 'share'. Also 'my friends' is correct but prefer 'with my friends' to indicate sharing together.

× Not gonna lie, I prefer to read on paper than reading on the on a screen is because when I'm holding the paper I feel like it's more easier for me to memorise everything.

✓ Not gonna lie, I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because when I'm holding paper I feel like it's easier for me to memorize everything.

The original mixes comparative structures and has extra words ('the on a screen is because'). Use 'rather than on a screen' for comparison. 'More easier' is redundant; use 'easier'. Remove unnecessary articles before 'paper' and correct spelling 'memorize' (or 'memorise' in British English). Also keep casual 'Not gonna lie' if desired.

× Depends on everyone.

✓ It depends on the person.

Sentence fragment 'Depends on everyone' lacks subject; use 'It depends on the person' or 'It depends on everyone' with context. 'The person' or 'the individual' fits better when referring to personal preference.

× Also if I'm reading on the screen is also.

✓ Also, if I'm reading on a screen, it can be different.

Original is incomplete and ungrammatical. Provide a complete clause: 'if I'm reading on a screen, it can be different' or '... I prefer that too' depending on intended meaning. Add commas for clarity.

× When I'm reading historical book or any languages book I need to read it carefully because I need to understand the story in the past and also to understand the and understand every votes.

✓ When I'm reading a historical book or a book in another language, I need to read it carefully because I need to understand the story and also understand every word.

Use articles 'a' before singular 'historical book' and 'a book in another language' for clarity. 'Languages book' is incorrect—use 'a book in another language'. 'Story in the past' is unclear; simply 'understand the story' suffices. 'Every votes' is incorrect; likely 'every word' was intended.

× Also when I'm reading scrolling social media I no need to be careful.

✓ Also, when I'm scrolling through social media, I don't need to be careful.

Word order and auxiliary usage are wrong. Use 'when I'm scrolling through social media' to describe the activity and 'I don't need to be careful' for negation. Add commas for clarity.

× I don't understand.

✓ I don't understand the question.

The short answer 'I don't understand' is grammatical but incomplete in context; clarifying the object makes it clear what is not understood. If student truly doesn't understand, adding 'the question' completes the response.