Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và mạch lạc: tránh lặp từ, giảm tiếng “uh/umm”, và nói rõ ý chính trước rồi mới giải thích. Sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản, tối đa 3 câu, nêu lý do cụ thể để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, I love reading. I often borrow novels from the library because they help me relax and improve my vocabulary. For example, reading classic fiction has taught me new expressions and literary styles.

提案: Rõ ràng hóa cấu trúc câu và dùng liên từ hợp lý: giới thiệu quan điểm chủ đạo, rồi nêu hai hoàn cảnh khác nhau với lý do cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (verb forms, articles) và dùng từ chính xác hơn.

例: It depends on the situation. At home or at school I prefer paper because it helps me concentrate and take notes more easily, but when I'm commuting I read on a screen because it's more convenient and portable.

提案: Tránh mơ hồ và nói rõ ví dụ cụ thể: nêu hai trường hợp rõ ràng, dùng linking words như "when" và "otherwise" hoặc "however", và giảm filler words. Sửa ngữ pháp (phrases like "learning by heart" needs context).

例: I read carefully when I need to memorise facts or study complex ideas, for example before an exam. Otherwise, if I'm just reviewing or discussing with friends, I skim the text to get the general idea.

提案: Nói ngắn gọn, tránh lặp và lỗi ngữ pháp: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề, giải thích vì sao với ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g., "focus", "take notes", "language" thay vì "linguistic language").

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me focus on the plot and notice language use. For instance, when I read a novel slowly I can take notes on new vocabulary and the author's style.

× Yes, of course, I am an avid reader of books and novels, so I often borrow lots of books from the library, uh, for my reading dreams.

✓ Yes, of course, I am an avid reader of books and novels, so I often borrow lots of books from the library for my reading goals.

Sử dụng giới từ 'for' trước cụm danh từ là hợp lệ nhưng 'reading dreams' is unnatural in English; 'reading goals' or 'for reading' is more appropriate. Also avoid unnecessary comma before 'for'. Suggest using 'for my reading goals' or simply 'to read'.

× And I also want to be a person that uh, that is good at literature, so I extremely love reading.

✓ I also want to be someone who is good at literature, so I really love reading.

'Person that' is not idiomatic; use 'someone who'. 'Extremely love' is incorrect collocation — 'really love' or 'love deeply' is better. 'That is' is better as 'who is' for people.

× Well depend on depending on situations I firstly, if I study at home or in school I will read on paper because I think it's make me more concentrate over my lessons.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation. If I study at home or at school, I read on paper because I think it helps me concentrate more on my lessons.

Fragmented and redundant phrases 'depend on depending on' are incorrect. Need subject 'it' with verb 'depends' (therefore Grammar Problem Type 6 Present tense issue and 27 subject-verb agreement also apply but main fix is structure). 'Firstly' unnecessary. 'It's make me more concentrate' is ungrammatical: correct is 'it helps me concentrate more on'. Use 'at school' not 'in school' in this context. Use consistent tense for habitual action: simple present.

× However when I study at the train station or public stage I will study on screen.

✓ However, when I study at the train station or in public places, I study on a screen.

'Public stage' is incorrect; use 'public places'. Preposition 'in' fits 'public places'; 'on screen' is fine but 'on a screen' is more natural. Use simple present for habits.

× I think that we need to read carefully when, uh, learning by heart anything and when we don't need to read carefully is, umm, we just practice it and, uh, in the process that we study with our friends.

✓ I think we need to read carefully when we are memorizing something, and we don't need to read carefully when we are just practicing or studying with friends.

Use continuous form 'are memorizing' for the ongoing action of learning by heart. Original sentence structure is awkward and has a clause 'when we don't need to read carefully is' which is incorrect. Rephrase to parallel clauses and use 'something' instead of 'anything' for clarity.

× Well, from a personal perspective, I love detailed reading because it make me uh, more concentrate over the stories that I read and uh, I can note all the knowledge or linguistic language from this story.

✓ Well, from a personal perspective, I love detailed reading because it makes me concentrate more on the stories I read, and I can note all the knowledge or linguistic points from those stories.

'It make' should be 'it makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'Concentrate' after 'makes me' should be base form but placement of 'more' is better before 'on'. Use 'concentrate more on' not 'concentrate over'. 'Linguistic language' is redundant; use 'linguistic points' or 'language points'. Use plural 'stories' consistently if referring to multiple texts.