Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural, relevant and well-structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve further, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy (two similar points about benefits), add one specific example (a book or topic) and use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I do. Reading is one of my favorite hobbies because it helps me unwind after a busy day. For example, I often read historical fiction before bed, which relaxes me and also expands my knowledge. Moreover, during my commute I read short articles to improve my vocabulary and concentration.

提案: Your answer is clear and natural but slightly repetitive (two similar 'prefer' phrases). Add a brief comparison giving a specific reason or example, and use a linking word to avoid repetition.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it's gentler on my eyes and I like the feel of a physical book. For instance, when reading novels I enjoy turning pages and annotating margins, whereas on-screen reading often makes me tired sooner.

提案: Good content and clear examples, but there is repetition (repeating 'read carefully' and 'so'). Improve by consolidating sentences, adding a linking word, and including a specific brief example of a consequence of missing details.

例: I need to read carefully when dealing with documentation such as contracts, official emails, or exam instructions because missing a single clause can cause legal or academic problems. Conversely, I don't read carefully when skimming casual messages or social media where small errors are unimportant.

提案: Very clear, well-structured answer with appropriate contrast and examples. To reach a higher score, add a linking phrase for cohesion and a brief specific example of when you skimmed and what you learned to show practicality.

例: It depends. For official documents like contracts or university guidelines I read in detail to understand every point. However, for news or social media I usually skim headlines and scan articles—for example, I skim news headlines in the morning to pick stories I want to read in full later.

× I also enjoy tactile experience of holding a physical book or magazine, so I prefer reading on paper rather than on the screen.

✓ I also enjoy the tactile experience of holding a physical book or magazine, so I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen.

The noun phrase 'tactile experience' needs the definite article 'the' to specify this particular kind of experience. 'On the screen' implies a specific screen previously mentioned; use 'on a screen' for general preference. Use 'the' before 'tactile experience' and 'a' before 'screen' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× So missing any detail could lead to mistakes.

✓ Missing any detail could lead to mistakes.

Beginning the sentence with 'So' creates a weak sentence structure and an unnecessary conjunction. Remove 'So' to make the sentence a clear independent clause: 'Missing any detail could lead to mistakes.' This keeps the logical flow from the previous sentence without using an extra connector.

× So in order to avoid it I need to read them carefully.

✓ In order to avoid that, I need to read them carefully.

Starting with 'So' is redundant; 'in order to avoid it' has an unclear pronoun reference. Replace 'it' with 'that' to refer to the previously mentioned problem (mistakes), add a comma after the introductory phrase for clarity, and remove the initial 'So' to improve sentence structure: 'In order to avoid that, I need to read them carefully.'