Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct tenses, articles and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unrelated or unclear phrases.

例: I didn't enjoy reading as a child, but I do now because I believe it is essential for gaining knowledge. For example, I especially enjoy history books because understanding past events helps me make better decisions today.

提案: Correct grammar and improve coherence: use full sentences, correct verb forms and prepositions. Give one clear reason and a concise example, linking them with words like "because" or "for example."

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it is more convenient and portable. For example, on the subway I can open an app on my phone and start reading immediately instead of carrying paper books.

提案: Clarify meaning and fix vocabulary: use precise words (important, relevant) and correct verb forms. Organize answer: state when careful reading is needed, give a specific example, then state when it is not needed with another example. Use linking words like "when" and "whereas."

例: I need to read carefully when the material is important or directly relevant to my work. For instance, when I study Python or follow programming guides I read every step carefully. By contrast, I skim short emails or simple notes because they rarely require detailed attention.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and logical: state preference clearly, give a reason and a specific routine example. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct collocations (help me relax, before bed, half an hour).

例: I prefer light, relaxing reading rather than intensive reading because it helps me relax before bed. For example, I usually read for half an hour each night to calm down and make it easier to fall asleep.

× When I was child I don't enjoy reading, but now I do because I believe reading is essential to green knowledge.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't enjoy reading, but now I do because I believe reading is essential for gaining knowledge.

Sentence structure and multiple grammar issues: missing article before 'child' (should be 'a child'), tense mismatch (past experience should use past tense 'didn't enjoy' not present 'don't enjoy'), and wrong preposition/word choice 'to green knowledge' is meaningless and should be 'for gaining knowledge'. Suggestion: add articles where needed, keep past tense for past situations, and choose appropriate prepositions and vocabulary. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I especially like history books since understanding paths can help me out.

✓ I especially like history books because understanding past events can help me.

Preposition/word choice errors: 'since' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer; 'paths' is incorrect word choice—should be 'past events' or 'the past'. 'Help me out' is colloquial; 'help me' is sufficient. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('past' not 'paths') and prefer clearer connectors. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Doing with the problem with the face today.

✓ It helps me deal with problems I face today.

Sentence fragment and incorrect word order: original lacks clear subject and verb and uses awkward phrasing 'doing with'. Correction supplies subject 'It' (referring to reading) and proper verb phrase 'helps me deal with'. Suggestion: ensure complete sentences with subject and verb and use correct verb phrases. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer read the book on the screen because it's more convenient and portable.

✓ I prefer reading books on a screen because it's more convenient and portable.

Verb form error: after 'prefer' use gerund 'reading' or the infinitive 'to read' with different nuance; also 'the book' should be plural or generic 'books', and 'on the screen' is better as 'on a screen'. Suggestion: use 'prefer reading' + plural noun for general preferences. Grammar problem type ID:10

× For example, why on the subway I can open the app to on my phone and read immediately instead of carry the paper books?

✓ For example, on the subway I can open an app on my phone and read immediately instead of carrying paper books.

Incorrect word order and verb form: question word 'why' is inappropriate here; sentence should be declarative. Preposition placement 'to on my phone' is wrong. 'Carry' should be the gerund 'carrying' after 'instead of'. Suggestion: remove 'why', use correct prepositions and gerund after 'instead of'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I need to read carefully while materials import or directly relevant to me.

✓ I need to read carefully when materials are important or directly relevant to me.

Tense and word choice errors: 'while' is better as 'when' for this context; 'import' is incorrect form—should be 'important', and passive 'are important' needed for plural 'materials'. Suggestion: use 'when' and ensure adjectives agree and include appropriate verb 'are'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× For example, when I'm study Python And work through the program books, it's less important.

✓ For example, when I'm studying Python and working through programming books, detailed reading is less important.

Verb form errors: after 'I'm' use present participle 'studying' and 'working'. 'Program books' is awkward—use 'programming books' or 'programming materials'. Also clarify what 'it' refers to; specify 'detailed reading'. Suggestion: use continuous forms for actions in progress and choose accurate nouns. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And the router thing like the short e-mail and notation, I usually just skip them.

✓ And other routine things like short e-mails and notes, I usually just skip.

Word choice and agreement errors: 'router' is incorrect word; likely 'routine'. 'Notation' is better as 'notes'. Pronoun agreement: referents should match number; 'them' is okay but sentence improved by rephrasing. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('routine', 'e-mails', 'notes') and concise structure. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I prefer lighter, relaxing reading rather than detailed or intensive reading because read book can help me unwell before the bed.

✓ I prefer light, relaxing reading rather than detailed or intensive reading because reading books can help me feel relaxed before bed.

Adjective/adverb and word form errors: 'lighter' should be 'light' when modifying 'reading' as a noun phrase; 'relaxing' is fine. 'read book' should be 'reading books' or 'reading a book'. 'Help me unwell' is incorrect—should be 'help me feel relaxed' or 'help me unwind'. 'Before the bed' should be 'before bed'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms, gerunds for activities, and common expressions like 'feel relaxed' and 'before bed'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× For example, I usually read off the half hour each night and climb my and make the easier to fall asleep.

✓ For example, I usually read for half an hour each night, which helps me relax and makes it easier to fall asleep.

Tense and sentence structure errors: 'read off the half hour' is incorrect—use 'read for half an hour'. 'Climb my' is meaningless here; likely intended 'calm my mind' or 'relax'. Also need clear subject for 'make it easier'. Suggestion: use time expressions 'for half an hour', connect clauses with 'which', and use idiomatic phrases like 'helps me relax' and 'makes it easier to fall asleep'. Grammar problem type ID:6