Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify unclear or inappropriate phrases and organize answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid inappropriate or confusing phrasing (e.g., "do all sex") and use relevant vocabulary (e.g., "explore diverse genres, focus on art-related topics"). Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I usually read novels, short stories and poems, and sometimes essays and magazines to learn new things. Lately I have been focusing more on art-related topics, such as modern painting and design, because I find them inspiring.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two reasons with linking words like "because" or "however." Be concise and avoid filler words. Mention specific situations for clarity.

例: It depends on the situation, but I mostly read on my phone these days because it is convenient and I can carry many articles with me. However, I still prefer paper books or newspapers when I want to read more carefully or enjoy the tactile feel of a book.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example and a linking word such as "for example" or "however." Be a bit more precise about what "reading carefully" means and give a short reason.

例: I read carefully when the topic relates to my current interests because I want to understand details and remember them. For example, if I am researching art history for a project, I take notes and reread difficult passages; however, when I read for relaxation I skim casually.

提案: Correct unclear vocabulary and grammar, state preference clearly, and give one concrete example to illustrate the difference between scanning and detailed reading. Use linking words such as "when" and "if" to structure the answer and keep it within five sentences.

例: I prefer detailed reading when the material contains important information because I need to understand the main points and details. For instance, when preparing for a discussion I read articles carefully and take notes, but when I want to relax I scan webpages or headlines to save time.

× Yes, I like reading, mostly I read novels, essays, stories and poems. Beside these things sometimes I read magazines to get knowledge and recently I'm planning to do all sex. I mean mostly focus on arts topics.

✓ Yes, I like reading. Mostly I read novels, essays, stories, and poems. Besides these, sometimes I read magazines to gain knowledge, and recently I'm planning to study art topics more. I mean I mostly focus on arts topics.

Errors: 'Beside' should be 'Besides' (preposition/adverb indicating in addition). 'Beside these things' is awkward; use 'Besides these' or 'Besides those'. 'to get knowledge' is unnatural; use 'to gain knowledge' or 'to learn'. 'planning to do all sex' is incorrect and likely a word choice error; probably meant 'study art subjects' or 'focus on arts'; corrected to 'planning to study art topics more'. Also run-on sentence fixed by splitting. Suggestion: use 'besides' for additions, use 'gain/learn' for obtaining knowledge, and choose accurate vocabulary for intentions.

× And it depends on the situation. Nowadays I have been using my mobile device and laptop, so mostly I read on my phone. So besides that I used to read on books and the newspaper.

✓ It depends on the situation. Nowadays I use my mobile device and laptop, so I mostly read on my phone. I used to read books and newspapers before.

Errors: 'And it depends' is fine but leading 'And' unnecessary. 'I have been using my mobile device' is acceptable but 'Nowadays I use' is simpler and fits habitual action. 'So besides that I used to read on books and the newspaper' has multiple issues: 'read on books' should be 'read books'; 'the newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' or 'the newspaper' without 'on'. 'Used to' indicates past habit — keep it for past contrast: 'I used to read books and newspapers before.' Suggestion: use 'use' for current habits, 'used to' for past habits, and correct prepositions (no 'on' with 'read books').

× If the topic is more related with my current interest, I read carefully and I keep more attention to the topic.

✓ If the topic is more related to my current interests, I read it carefully and pay more attention to the topic.

Errors: 'related with' should be 'related to'. 'current interest' is better as plural 'current interests' if referring generally. 'I read carefully' is fine but adding object 'it' is clearer. 'I keep more attention' is incorrect collocation; use 'pay more attention'. Suggestion: use 'related to', 'pay attention to', and include the object after verbs when needed.

× But if I'm reading for just to pass the time, I don't take it seriously.

✓ But if I'm reading just to pass the time, I don't take it seriously.

Errors: 'reading for just to pass the time' mixes 'for' with 'to' — use one form: 'reading just to pass the time' or 'reading for pleasure/to pass the time'. Also no article issue here but removed redundancy. Suggestion: choose either 'for' + gerund (reading for pleasure) or 'to' + infinitive (to pass the time) and avoid combining both.

× I personally prefer to teach a reading. If I want to get some point on the talking I have to read it deeply.

✓ I personally prefer intensive reading. If I want to understand a point in a discussion, I have to read it carefully.

Errors: 'prefer to teach a reading' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'teach' → 'do' or 'intensive reading' or 'detailed reading'. 'get some point on the talking' is ungrammatical; use 'understand a point in a discussion' or 'understand the main point of the text'. 'read it deeply' is awkward; use 'read it carefully' or 'read it in depth'. Suggestion: use correct collocations like 'detailed reading', 'understand a point', 'read carefully'.

× But if I'm just to getting time pass at that time I just scan the few hours which can be found easily.

✓ But if I'm just trying to pass the time, I just skim the material to find the main points quickly.

Errors: 'just to getting time pass' is ungrammatical; correct expression is 'trying to pass the time'. 'scan the few hours which can be found easily' is nonsensical: 'scan' should be 'skim', and 'the few hours' makes no sense—likely meant 'the text' or 'the material' to find information quickly. Suggestion: use 'try to pass the time', 'skim' for quick reading, and specify the object (text/material) and purpose ('find main points quickly').