Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but has minor issues: slightly long sentences and a few grammatical points (use 'ride a bike' or 'cycle'). Make the response more natural by starting with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase.

例: Not really. I don't walk much because I have a busy school schedule. For example, I attend classes from Monday to Saturday, so I usually take the bus or ride my bike to save time.

提案: Content is relevant but has grammar and vocabulary errors (plural/singular, 'park' not 'parked', 'friends', verb forms). Also a bit repetitive. Give a direct answer, correct noun forms, and add one brief specific detail with a linking word.

例: No, I didn't. When I was young I often went out to hang out with my friends. For example, we usually went to the park and played board games together.

提案: Good points but reduce hesitations and fix vocabulary ('green space'). Start confidently with a topic sentence and use linking words to list reasons. Make details slightly more specific.

例: I think people enjoy walking in parks for several reasons. Firstly, parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery; moreover, the green space and trees create a relaxing atmosphere.

提案: Answer is clear and relevant but has grammatical mistakes ('if I had the chance', 'park located'/'that park'). Avoid repeating ideas; combine sentences and add a linking phrase explaining the benefit.

例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in the park near my house because it has many trees and fresh air, which helps me calm my mind and relax after a long day at school.

提案: This answer has tense errors, wrong word choices ('accumulate', 'one hours'), and inconsistent time references. Answer the question in the past tense clearly, use correct vocabulary and precise time expressions, and add a short specific detail.

例: Lately, I went for a walk in a nearby park with my mom whenever I had spare time. For example, we walked for about an hour last weekend and enjoyed chatting and the fresh air.

× I attend classes from Monday to Saturday, so I often take the bus or a bike to save time.

✓ I attend classes from Monday to Saturday, so I often take the bus or a bicycle to save time.

The phrase 'a bike' in this context is informal but not grammatically wrong; however, to be parallel with 'the bus' use 'a bicycle' or 'the bike'. No third-person singular issue here; keep 'attend' and 'take' as they correctly match the subject 'I'. Suggestion: use consistent articles and register: 'the bus or a bicycle'. Grammar problem type ID:2

× When I was young I usually went out to hang out with my friend.

✓ When I was young I usually went out to hang out with my friends.

The singular 'my friend' implies one friend, but 'usually' suggests repeated outings with potentially more than one friend; to sound natural use plural 'friends' or specify 'my friend' if it was always the same person. This is a singular/plural noun number choice. Grammar problem type ID:1

× We usually went to the parked and play board games together.

✓ We usually went to the park and played board games together.

'Parked' is incorrect form; 'park' is the correct noun. Also 'play' should be past tense 'played' to match 'went'. This involves noun form and verb tense/number alignment; primary issue fixed: noun singular/plural and verb form. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Uh, as my perspective, I think people like to walk in parks for many reasons like uh, fresh air, nice weather, and there are a lot of green spaced in the parks.

✓ From my perspective, I think people like to walk in parks for many reasons, such as fresh air, nice weather, and a lot of green space in the parks.

Use 'From my perspective' rather than 'as my perspective'. 'Such as' is preferable to 'like' when listing reasons. 'Green spaced' is incorrect; the correct noun phrase is 'green space'. Also simplify 'there are a lot of' to 'a lot of'. This is primarily preposition and word choice errors. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Well, if I had chance, I would like to take a long walk in the park which located near my house.

✓ Well, if I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in the park which is located near my house.

Missing article 'the' before 'chance' and missing verb 'is' in relative clause 'which is located'. Use conditional 'would like' correctly but include the necessary article and linking verb. This is a modal/conditional construction issue combined with omitted verb. Grammar problem type ID:4

× That parked has a lot of green trees and fresh air.

✓ That park has a lot of trees and fresh air.

'Parked' is wrong form; use 'park'. 'Green trees' is redundant—'trees' is sufficient. This is a noun form and number correction. Grammar problem type ID:1

× It will help me to calm my mind and relax after a long day at school.

✓ It would help me to calm my mind and relax after a long day at school.

Within the conditional 'If I had the chance, I would...', follow with 'would' rather than 'will' to keep the hypothetical mood consistent. Change 'will' to 'would' for correct conditional tense. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Recently, I often go to accumulate for a walk whenever I had spare time.

✓ Recently, I often go to a nearby place for a walk whenever I have spare time.

Original sentence has several problems: 'accumulate' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'a place' or 'the park'. Tense mismatch: 'recently' with 'often go' is fine, but 'whenever I had spare time' should be present 'have spare time' to match habitual present. Adjust to 'go to a nearby place' or specify location. This addresses past tense and word choice. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I will go for a walk for one hours with my mom.

✓ I go for a walk for one hour with my mom.

'One hours' is incorrect; use singular 'one hour'. Also 'I will go' conflicts with 'recently' and 'often'—use present habitual 'I go'. Correct quantifier and tense for consistency. Grammar problem type ID:14

× We had so much fun together.

✓ We have so much fun together.

If describing habitual recent activity, use present perfect or present simple: 'We have so much fun together' (present simple 'have' for habitual present). If referring to a specific past walk, 'We had so much fun together' is correct. Clarify context: choose tense matching intended meaning. This flags past/present tense mismatch. Grammar problem type ID:5