Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid hesitations; give a brief reason or frequency. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word.

例: Not really. I don’t walk much because I usually commute by bike or bus. However, my mother walks every day for exercise, so she’s more active than I am.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words; use correct tense and clearer sequencing. Provide one specific memory or frequency with a linking word to support the statement.

例: Yes, I did. I often walked with my family on weekends when I was a child, for example to the nearby river, but I don't remember every detail.

提案: Avoid vague phrases like “or something” and give specific, coherent reasons linked with connectors. Provide two clear reasons and a short explanation for each.

例: People walk in parks mainly to stay fit because walking is good exercise. Also, parks are pleasant and relaxing, so many people walk there to reduce stress.

提案: Be grammatically correct and use conditional structure clearly. State the place directly, then give a reason using a linking word. Keep it to one or two supporting sentences.

例: I would like to take a long walk in the big park near my home because I love its trees and quiet paths. It’s peaceful and has good scenery for a long stroll.

提案: Answer the past question directly using past tense. If you didn't walk recently, say so and offer a brief reason or mention when/where you usually walk using a linking word.

例: I haven't gone for a walk recently because I’ve been busy with work. However, when I do go, I usually walk in the nearby park about twice a week.

× But my mom, she's, she does walk a lot actually.

✓ But my mom, she does walk a lot actually.

The original contained extra pronoun 'she' repeated; use either 'she's' (she is) or 'she' + verb. Here keep 'she does walk' and remove 'she's' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: 'But my mom does walk a lot.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Preposition choice: use 'for a walk' with 'go' to indicate purpose. The question form with 'did' is correct past tense, so change only preposition.

× Yeah, actually, but not alone. Umm, I was with my family and we were walked together much I think, but I'm not remember.

✓ Yeah, actually, but not alone. Umm, I was with my family and we walked together a lot, I think, but I don't remember much.

Errors: unnecessary passive 'were walked' should be active 'walked' (past tense). 'much' after verb is unnatural; use 'a lot'. 'I'm not remember' is incorrect tense and auxiliary; correct is 'I don't remember'.

× I don't remember it so much.

✓ I don't remember it very much.

Use 'very much' rather than 'so much' for this context; present simple negative 'I don't remember' is correct. This improves naturalness.

× Because they want a healthy body and they are boring or something.

✓ Because they want to be healthy and they are bored or something.

'Want a healthy body' is unnatural; use 'want to be healthy'. 'Boring' describes something that causes boredom; to say people feel uninterested use 'bored'.

× We have a park and nearly and I love there so if I take a long walk I will there.

✓ There is a park near me and I love it, so if I take a long walk I will go there.

Multiple issues: 'nearly' should be 'near me' (preposition), 'I love there' should be 'I love it' (pronoun), sentence missing verb 'go' in final clause. Also use 'There is' to introduce existence and correct word order.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' can be used, but with past simple 'recently' is more natural. No tense change needed; replace adverb for naturalness.

× I didn't go for a walk, but if I do I think we have a nearby park and if I do that. I do there.

✓ I haven't gone for a walk recently, but if I did I think there is a nearby park and I would go there.

Original mixes tenses and has fragments. Use present perfect 'haven't gone recently' to express recent absence. For hypothetical, use past tense 'if I did' with conditional 'I would go there'. 'We have a nearby park' changed to 'there is a nearby park' for natural phrasing.