Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümle yapısını ve zaman kullanımını düzeltmelisiniz. Cevabınız net bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı (ör. 'Yes, I walk a lot.'). Destekleyici detaylarda basit bağlaçlar kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarları atın. Ayrıca kelime sırasına ve edatlara dikkat edin (e.g. 'walk to school', 'walk to the supermarket'). En fazla 3-4 kısa cümle kullanın.

例: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually walk to school and sometimes I walk to the supermarket. I also enjoy walking in the park when I have free time.

提案: Cevabınız doğrudan ve anlaşılır; ancak daha fazla detay ekleyerek genişletebilirsiniz. Geçmiş zamana dikkat etmişsiniz, bu iyi. İyileştirme için kısa nedenler ve bir örnek ekleyin (bağlaçlarla). Cümle sayısını 2-3 ile sınırlayın.

例: Not really, because I was very shy as a child. For example, I preferred staying at home and reading rather than playing with other kids outside.

提案: Cevabınız tekrara ve belirsiz ifadelere sahip. Daha doğal ve etkili olmak için doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun ve iki açık sebep verin; bağlaçlar (because, so) kullanın. Duygusal ve fiziksel faydaları belirtin ve kelime seçimini netleştirin ('feel energetic', 'relaxing').

例: People like to walk in parks because it helps them feel more relaxed and energetic. Also, parks are pleasant places with fresh air and nice scenery, so walking there is enjoyable.

提案: Cevabınız duygusal ve motive edici ama tekrarlara ve dilbilgisi hatalarına dikkat edin. Bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp 1-2 neden verin (ör. ünlü yerler, atmosfer). Kısa ve akıcı cümleler kullanın; gelecekle ilgili ifadelerde 'would' veya 'would like to' tercih edin.

例: I would like to take a long walk in New York City because it is my dream city. I want to explore famous places like Central Park and Times Square and enjoy the vibrant atmosphere.

提案: Cevabınız eksik ve belirsiz ifadeler içeriyor (ör. 'a lot of 3/3' anlaşılmaz). Daha doğru bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın ve spesifik detaylar verin: hangi park, kimleydiniz, ne gördünüz, ne hissettiniz. Kısa bağlaçlar kullanarak mantıklı akış sağlayın.

例: I walked in the central park of my city last weekend. The park was beautiful with many trees and flowers, and I enjoyed a peaceful, relaxing walk.

× I usually walk for go to school also I work for go to supermarket and home maybe park.

✓ I usually walk to school. I also walk to the supermarket and sometimes to the park or home.

The original sentence has incorrect verb usage and structure. 'Walk for go to' is ungrammatical; use 'walk to' + place. Split into separate sentences for clarity and use 'sometimes' for occasional actions. Suggest practicing 'walk to + place' and breaking long chains into simple sentences.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This sentence is already grammatical and correctly uses past simple with 'did' for a past habit question. No correction needed.

× Actually, no, because when I was a child I was so shy.

✓ Actually, no, because when I was a child I was very shy.

Use 'very' instead of 'so' for a more natural response in this context. The past tense 'was' is correct. Suggest using common intensifiers like 'very' or 'quite' for clarity.

× Because most people like to walk in the parks. Umm, because feel like, uh, energy or funny?

✓ Because most people like walking in parks. Umm, because it makes them feel energetic or happy?

Use gerund 'walking' after 'like'. 'In parks' (no 'the') is natural when speaking generally. 'Feel like energy or funny' is ungrammatical: express as 'makes them feel energetic or happy'. Suggest practicing 'like + -ing' and adjective forms (energetic, happy).

× I guess I want New York City because this city, my dream city, I love it so much. The city, wonderful city. I will go one day.

✓ I guess I want to go to New York City because it is my dream city and I love it so much. The city is wonderful. I will go one day.

Missing infinitive 'to go to' and several sentence fragments. Use full sentences: 'it is my dream city' and 'The city is wonderful.' 'I will go one day' is fine. Suggest practising infinitive use ('want to + verb') and avoiding fragments by ensuring a subject and verb.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is more commonly used with present perfect (Have you gone lately?). With 'did' use 'recently'. Use 'recently' for past simple questions. Suggest matching time adverbs to tense (lately -> present perfect, recently -> past simple).

× The last time I walked in a park of my city. The park so wonderful and a lot of 3/3.

✓ The last time I walked was in a park in my city. The park was wonderful and there were a lot of people.

Original has sentence fragments and incorrect preposition 'in a park of my city' -> 'in a park in my city'. Add the verb 'was' and use 'there were' for existence of 'a lot of people'. '3/3' appears to be an error; interpret as 'people'. Suggest using 'there is/there are' and complete sentences with a subject and verb.