Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence addressing the question (e.g., Yes, I walk quite often). Then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (like "so", "like"). Pay attention to grammar (use present simple: I live, I walk) and sentence boundaries.

例: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually walk for about 10–15 minutes from my home to the bus stop when I go to college, and I enjoy walking because it helps me relax when I'm bored.

提案: Answer with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g., Yes, I often walked with my parents). Use past simple consistently and give one specific detail or example. Omit hesitations and unfinished phrases. Use linking words (for example, because) to make reasons clear.

例: Yes, I often walked with my parents when I was a child. For example, we used to go to the nearby park every weekend because my parents were health-conscious and wanted to stay active.

提案: Give a clear opinion followed by specific, well-organised reasons. Avoid repetition and informal fillers. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and more natural phrases (e.g., "the fresh air," "natural surroundings").

例: People like walking in parks because of the fresh air and pleasant natural surroundings. For example, being among trees and flowers helps them relax and appreciate nature's beauty.

提案: Give a direct hypothetical answer using correct conditional/past tense (If I had the chance, I would...). Be specific about the place and reason. Avoid vague references and repeated fillers. Mention one clear example and tie it back to your preference.

例: If I had the chance, I would take part in an organized long-distance walk or charity walk, such as a marathon in my city, because I enjoy the challenge and the community atmosphere. For example, when I was a teenager in India I joined a similar event where people could win prizes.

提案: Use past simple for recent past (e.g., I went for a walk recently). Be specific about location and timing, and give a brief reason. Avoid modal mistakes ("will" is wrong here) and remove fillers.

例: I went for a walk recently on a street near my home. I often walk there before meals because it's a quick route and helps me feel ready to eat.

× Yes, I'll work a lot because I'm living in Canada so when I'm going to college so I have to take a bus.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because I live in Canada, so when I go to college I have to take a bus.

The speaker mixes future and progressive forms incorrectly ('I'll work a lot', 'I'm living', 'when I'm going to college') instead of simple present to describe habitual actions. Use simple present for routines: 'I walk', 'I live', 'I go'. Also remove redundant 'so' and adjust punctuation. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and routines and avoid stacking 'so'.

× So I walk.

✓ So I walk to the bus stop.

The sentence is very short and lacks information expected from context. Clarify the object or destination to complete the idea. Suggestion: Add where you walk to make the sentence more informative and grammatically complete.

× I start from my home and reaching through a bus stop it's like 10-15 minutes walk sometimes.

✓ I start from my home and reach the bus stop; it's about a 10-15 minute walk sometimes.

The original uses 'reaching' incorrectly after 'start' and concatenates clauses poorly. Use the base verb 'reach' for sequence ('I start... and reach'), and correct noun phrases ('a 10-15 minute walk'). Suggestion: Use parallel verb forms and proper article+noun phrasing for duration.

× So I usually enjoy walking because like when I'm bored.

✓ I usually enjoy walking, especially when I'm bored.

The phrase 'because like when I'm bored' is ungrammatical and informal. Use 'especially when' to express that walking is enjoyed in that situation. Suggestion: Use clearer conjunctions and avoid filler 'like'."},{