Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify grammar and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb/noun forms, and avoid redundancy. Use one linking phrase to add detail and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I walk to work regularly because my workplace is some distance from my home. I prefer walking to taking public transport as it gives me some exercise and helps me clear my mind before and after the day. For example, I usually walk for about 25 minutes each way.

提案: Good content and coherence. Improve by varying vocabulary (use 'as a child' phrasing), and link sentences smoothly with a contrast word. Keep it slightly shorter and correct repetition of 'often'.

例: Not really — as a child I rarely went for walks; instead, I often went cycling with my family. We usually rode our bikes together on weekends for family outings because I have always loved cycling.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words and more specific examples. Correct small errors (e.g. 'After meals a short walk'). Try to give two clear reasons with examples.

例: People often walk in parks because it helps them relax and reduce stress, especially after a busy day. Also, a short walk after meals can aid digestion and improve fitness; for instance, many people take a 20-minute stroll in the park after dinner.

提案: Strong, vivid answer with good detail. To improve further, add a brief personal reason or specific image and use one linking word to connect ideas. Keep it concise.

例: I would love to take a long walk along a beach, where I could feel the cool sea breeze and watch the shoreline stretching away. Walking at sunset would be particularly relaxing and would help me unwind after a busy day.

提案: Correct small grammar issues and improve cohesion. Use articles where needed ('the park') and add a brief specific detail about what you saw to make it more vivid. Use a linking word to explain why the park is popular.

例: I went to the Hong Kong Wetland Park recently with my girlfriend. We walked along the nature trails and saw several species of birds; the park has become popular recently because of its attractive scenery and wildlife.

× Yes, I work a lot because my work play is some distance from my home and I prefer work walking to using public transport.

✓ Yes, I work a lot because my workplace is some distance from my home and I prefer walking to work to using public transport.

The phrase 'work play' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'workplace' (compound noun). 'Prefer work walking' has wrong word order and unnecessary noun; use 'prefer walking to work' to express the action and destination. Also keep parallel structure with 'to using' by making 'walking to work' the object of 'prefer.' Suggestion: use 'workplace' and 'prefer walking to work.'

× No, I didn't often go for walks when I was a child, but I often went cycling with my family.

✓ No, I didn't often go for walks when I was a child, but I often went cycling with my family.

This sentence is already grammatically correct for past habits: 'didn't often go' (past negative) and 'often went cycling' (past affirmative). No change needed. Keep past tense consistency.

× We usually rode our bikes together on weekends as a family outing because I love cycling.

✓ We usually rode our bikes together on weekends as a family outing because I loved cycling.

Tense consistency: the clause describes a past habit, so 'I love cycling' should be 'I loved cycling' to match the past timeframe. This is not strictly an article error from the list, but it falls under Past tense issue (ID 5). However per instruction 2 only correct mistakes that meet the list: therefore classify as Past tense issue (ID 5). Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past habits.

× After meals or short walk can also aid digestion, and it's a simple way to keep a healthy lifestyle.

✓ After meals or a short walk can also aid digestion, and it's a simple way to maintain a healthy lifestyle.

The phrase 'short walk' needs an article 'a' when used countably. 'Keep a healthy lifestyle' is understandable but 'maintain a healthy lifestyle' is more natural. This corrects article usage (ID 22) and improves word choice.

× I would like to take a long walk on the beach because I could feel the cool sea breeze on my face and watch the shoreline stretching into the distance.

✓ I would like to take a long walk on the beach because I could feel the cool sea breeze on my face and watch the shoreline stretch into the distance.

After verbs of perception with 'watch,' use the base verb (bare infinitive) or present participle. 'Watch the shoreline stretching' is grammatical but 'watch the shoreline stretch' is more natural for observing the whole action; change to 'stretch' for clarity. This is primarily verb form choice (ID 10 or 9), but fits 'Verb in the present participle form' (ID 10) as a correction to expected base form.

× I went to Hong Kong Wetland Park recently with my girlfriend. We walked along the nature trails because the scenery and bird life are beautiful and park has become quite popular lately.

✓ I went to Hong Kong Wetland Park recently with my girlfriend. We walked along the nature trails because the scenery and bird life are beautiful and the park has become quite popular lately.

The noun 'park' requires the definite article 'the' when referring back to the specific park previously mentioned. Add 'the' before 'park' to show specificity (ID 17: Incorrect use of the definite article / ID 22: Article errors). Suggestion: use 'the park' when speaking about that particular park already named.