Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接で分かりやすいですが、文法ミス（冠詞、語順）や重複を減らし、接続語で流れを滑らかにするとさらに良くなります。具体的には：1) 'at early morning' は不自然なので 'early in the morning' を使う。2) 'along the river near my house' を簡潔に 'along the river near my house' のまま使うか 'by the river near my house' にする。3) 同じ意味の語（health / relaxed）を繰り返さない。4) 1〜2文で終える練習をする。

例: Yes, I do. I often walk early in the morning by the river near my house because it helps my fitness and relaxes me.

提案: 文法（時制、一致、動名詞／原形）の誤りが目立ちます。また語が欠けて文が途切れているため意味が不明瞭です。改善点：1) 過去の習慣は 'I often walked' を使う。2) 'walk with my grandmother' のように動詞の形を揃える。3) 'explore my neighborhood and greet my...' は未完なので 'greet my neighbours' のように完結させる。4) 接続語（for example, because）を使って理由を明確にする。

例: Yes, I did. I often walked outside with my grandmother because she walked for her health, and I liked exploring my neighbourhood and saying hello to neighbours.

提案: 回答は要点を伝えようとしているが、文法や語順の誤り、語の反復、文が途中で切れているため理解しにくいです。改善点：1) 主語と動詞の一致（'walking makes them' ではなく 'walking makes people relax'）。2) 不要な語の重複を避ける。3) 追加理由は接続語（for example, because）でつなぐ。4) 具体例（trees, fresh air, scenery）を挙げて詳細化する。

例: I think walking in parks helps people relax and reduce stress because parks offer fresh air, greenery and pleasant scenery.

提案: 意図は伝わりますが、文法（不定詞の使い方）と冗長さが改善点です。自然な表現に直すとより流暢です。また 'find some new fish' は不自然なので具体性を持たせる（observe wildlife, see different species）とよい。接続語を用いて理由をまとめること。

例: I would love to take a long walk along a wide river because watching the water relaxes me and I enjoy observing different kinds of fish and other wildlife.

提案: 内容が伝わりにくく、文法や語順、不要な語の混入があります。改善点：1) 過去の出来事は過去形で統一（'We went on a short trip to Fuji'）。2) 'Recently I worked for Ujjiva site with my boyfriend.' は質問と関係が薄いなら省略するか背景を明確にする。3) 活動を並べる際は接続詞（and, then）を使い、一文を2〜3文に分けて簡潔に。4) 'eat some sweets' を 'had some sweets' にする。

例: Recently my boyfriend and I went on a short trip to Mount Fuji. We walked around the area and tried some local sweets.

× Yes I do. I often walk at early morning along the river near my house.

✓ Yes, I do. I often walk early in the morning along the river near my house.

The phrase 'at early morning' is incorrect; use the prepositional phrase 'in the morning' and place 'early' before it. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech pacing. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes I did I often go outside and walking with my grandmother.

✓ Yes, I did. I often went outside and walked with my grandmother.

The question asks about past habitual actions, so verbs must be in the past tense. 'Go' should be 'went' and 'walking' should be 'walked' to match past tense and parallel structure. Add punctuation after 'Yes'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× My grandmother always walk for her health so I also join with her.

✓ My grandmother always walks for her health, so I also joined her.

Subject 'My grandmother' is singular so the verb needs third person singular form 'walks'. The sentence describes past habitual action, so 'join' should be past tense 'joined' and 'join with her' is better as 'joined her'. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I really like to explore my neighbor and greet my.

✓ I really liked to explore my neighborhood and greet my neighbors.

The sentence has missing and incorrect nouns. 'Neighbor' should be 'neighborhood' for the area, and 'greet my' is incomplete; use 'greet my neighbors'. Also maintain past tense to match previous sentences: 'liked'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I believe it is because it walking makes them relax and relieve stress parks there are many natural natural impacts and.

✓ I believe it is because walking makes them relaxed and relieves stress; parks have many natural features.

The original has redundant words and wrong word order. 'It walking' is wrong; use gerund 'walking'. 'Make them relax' should be 'make them relaxed' or 'help them relax' and 'relieve' should agree with subject: 'relieves stress'. 'Parks there are many natural natural impacts and' is ungrammatical; replace with 'parks have many natural features.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× I'm looking forward to walk around the long river.

✓ I'm looking forward to walking around the long river.

After the phrase 'look forward to', the verb should be in the -ing form: 'walking', not the infinitive 'to walk'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× That's because I really like to see a river.

✓ That's because I really like to see rivers.

In general statements about preference, plural 'rivers' or 'a river' can be used; 'see a river' sounds odd with 'walk around the long river'. Using 'rivers' or 'the river' depends on context. Here 'rivers' makes it natural as a general preference. Also present simple 'like' is correct. Grammar problem type ID:6

× It makes me relax and relieve stress.

✓ It helps me relax and relieve stress.

Use 'helps me relax' or 'makes me feel relaxed'. 'Makes me relax' is less natural. 'Helps me relax and relieves stress' or 'helps me relax and reduces stress' are better. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I want to find some new fish.

✓ I wanted to find some new fish.

In context of a hypothetical or past desire related to a past or imagined walk, past tense 'wanted' may be appropriate. If speaking about future intention, 'I want to find some new fish' could be acceptable. Here consistency with 'I'm looking forward' suggests present desire; choose one according to intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Recently I worked for Ujjiva site with my boyfriend.

✓ Recently I worked at the Ujjiva site with my boyfriend.

Use past tense 'worked' is fine; preposition should be 'at' for a site, and include the definite article 'the' before 'Ujjiva site' if it's a specific site. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I we went to a short trip at Fuji and walk around and eat some sweets.

✓ We went on a short trip to Fuji, walked around, and ate some sweets.

Remove extra pronoun 'I', use correct preposition 'on a trip' and 'to Fuji'. Use past tense verbs 'walked' and 'ate' to match 'went'. Use commas to separate actions. Grammar problem type ID:26