Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the reply more natural and combine sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason or frequency detail using a linking word. Avoid short fragments like “And near my house.”

例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially around my neighborhood because it’s convenient and peaceful. For example, I usually go for a 30-minute walk three or four times a week to relax and get some exercise.

提案: Use correct tense and grammar, and be specific. Begin with a clear statement about the past, use linking words to contrast, and give a concrete example. Avoid awkward phrases like “in your house.”

例: When I was a child I didn’t like walking or running, but I often walked our family dog around the neighborhood on weekends. For instance, every Saturday morning I would walk my dog for about 20 minutes with my parents.

提案: Give a clear reason then support it with specific details and correct phrasing. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid sentence fragments. Use vocabulary appropriate to the topic (relaxing, fresh air).

例: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, walking among trees and flowers helps reduce stress and lift the mood, especially after a busy day.

提案: Combine sentences into one fluid conditional sentence and use correct place name and vocabulary. Give a brief reason and a specific duration or plan. Check for correct nouns (e.g., Appalachian Trail).

例: If I had the chance, I would like to hike the Appalachian Trail for six months because I want to experience long-distance trekking and see diverse landscapes along the route.

提案: Use past tense for a recent action and avoid filler words like “literally” or “uh.” Start with a clear past-tense statement and add a reason or frequency detail using linking words. Correct collocations: “go for a walk/run at” or “walk at the center.”

例: Recently I went for a walk at the National Gymnastics Center because it has a quiet track and good facilities. I often run there twice a week to stay fit and I particularly like the smooth running surface.

× Yes, I usually walk a lot. And near my house.

✓ Yes, I usually walk a lot near my house.

The original is two fragments; 'And near my house' is a sentence fragment and repeats location. Combine into one present simple sentence to match habitual action: 'I usually walk a lot near my house.' Ensure subject-verb present tense 'walk' matches adverb 'usually'.

× Uh, when I was a child I disliking walking and running, but I usually take a walk with my dog in your house.

✓ When I was a child I disliked walking and running, but I usually took walks with my dog near my house.

The sentence mixes past and present forms incorrectly. 'Disliking' is a present participle; for past habitual use simple past 'disliked'. 'I usually take a walk' conflicts with 'when I was a child' so change to past habitual 'usually took walks'. 'In your house' is incorrect reference and preposition; use 'near my house' for location. This fixes tense consistency and preposition/reference errors.

× Maybe it's comfortable. A Walking in the park, it fills us fresh. And makes us happy.

✓ Maybe it's comfortable. Walking in the park makes us feel refreshed and makes us happy.

Errors: unnecessary article 'A' before 'Walking', awkward clause 'it fills us fresh' which is ungrammatical. Use gerund 'Walking' as subject without 'a'. Use correct verb phrase 'makes us feel refreshed' or 'refreshes us'. Combine clauses for clarity and correct adjective/adverb use.

× If I had a chance. I would like to walk through Appalachian trade for six months.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk through the Appalachian Trail for six months.

The first fragment 'If I had a chance.' must be joined to its result clause. Use 'the chance' (definite article) and correct noun 'Appalachian Trail' not 'trade'. This creates a correct conditional sentence (second conditional) matching hypothetical present/future desire.

× Yeah, I go for a walk at the National Gymnastics Center. Literally, it's my favorite place and I usually take a walk and running. Uh.

✓ Recently I went for a walk at the National Gymnastics Center. It's my favorite place, and I usually go there for walking and running.

Question asked 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' so answer should use present perfect or simple past: 'I went' or 'I've gone'. 'Go' (present) is inconsistent; change to past 'went' or 'recently I went'. Also 'take a walk and running' is ungrammatical — use parallel structure 'go there for walking and running' or 'for walking and running' and correct tense and word order.'